Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Shorten and structure the answer: start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one clear reason and an example. Avoid contradictions without explanation. Use linking words like 'because' and 'but' correctly and keep within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't really enjoy going to parks as a child because I preferred playing games with my friends in the street. However, now I appreciate parks more for their greenery and peaceful atmosphere, so I visit them to relax.

제안: This response is not an answer to the question. Always reply directly with a short, clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and one supporting detail. If there was a noise problem in the test, briefly answer and then mention the noise if relevant.

예시: Yes, I do. I often go to parks to exercise and unwind, although sometimes background noise can make it hard to relax.

제안: The answer is unrelated to the question. Provide a direct opinion (Yes/No) and one or two specific reasons, using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Keep it concise and relevant.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and for families to relax together.

제안: This is too short and vague. Give a clear response naming a type of park or a specific park you'd like to visit and explain why with one brief reason or example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit the botanical garden next year because it has rare plants and quiet walking paths that interest me.

× Not actually because I used to love to play with my friends rather than going to the park.

✓ Not really, because I used to love playing with my friends rather than going to the park.

The student used 'not actually' which is unnatural here; 'not really' is the correct adverbial response. Also 'used to love to play' is acceptable but 'used to love playing' is more natural in spoken English. Use of the gerund 'playing' after 'love' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: replace 'not actually' with 'not really' and use 'playing' for smoother, natural phrasing.

× I actually didn't know the importance of the parks during my childhood.

✓ I actually didn't know the importance of parks during my childhood.

The definite article 'the' before 'parks' implies specific parks already known; here the meaning is general, so no article is needed. For general plural nouns, omit 'the'. Suggestion: use 'parks' without an article to express general concept.

× But nowadays I love to look at the parks.

✓ But nowadays I love to go to parks.

'Look at the parks' is awkward; the student likely means 'visit' or 'go to parks'. Also 'the parks' suggests specific parks; use plural without article to generalize. 'Love to go to parks' fits present habitual meaning. Suggestion: use 'go to' or 'visit' and drop 'the'.

× It didn't record my voice because of other noise.

✓ My voice wasn't recorded because of other noise.

The original uses 'It didn't record my voice' which misplaces the subject; passive construction 'My voice wasn't recorded' is clearer. Also passive fits the situation where the recording failed. Suggestion: use passive voice to indicate the voice was not recorded and keep tense consistent with past event.

× For nearly one week.

✓ For nearly a week.

'One week' is correct but when using 'nearly' the more natural phrasing is 'nearly a week' rather than 'nearly one week'. 'Nearly' pairs with 'a' in colloquial English. Suggestion: say 'for nearly a week' or 'for about a week'.

× I think.

✓ I think so.

As an answer to 'Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?', the response 'I think' is incomplete and unclear. 'I think so' indicates agreement or a tentative affirmative. Better is to give a full answer such as 'Yes, I think so' or 'I think I will visit new parks in the future.' Suggestion: provide a complete response relevant to the question.