Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and avoid repetition. Add one specific supporting detail and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. My parents, my sister and I often had picnics there on weekends, and I liked playing on the swings. Because the parks were near our home, we could go there regularly.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and use coherent reasons with correct tense and fewer hesitations. Start with a topic sentence, then add a specific reason linked with a connector (e.g., "because"), and keep it concise.

예시: Not really, because I am a high school student and I am very busy studying for exams. As a result, I rarely have time to visit parks during the week.

제안: Clarify your idea and correct word choice. Begin with a direct response, then give one or two specific details (location, frequency) using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and ensure vocabulary is appropriate (e.g., "near my apartment").

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. For example, there is a park in front of my apartment that I visit often, but other neighborhoods do not have green spaces.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatically correct answer with a specific park name or type and a reason. Use future intention phrasing (e.g., "I would like to visit...") and add a brief supporting detail linked with "because" or "so".

예시: Yes, I would like to visit national parks in the United States in the future, such as Yellowstone, because I want to see the natural scenery and wildlife.

× Yeah, I like going to park.

✓ Yeah, I like going to the park.

Use of the definite article 'the' is required before a singular, countable noun when referring to a specific place type in general (going to the park). Replace 'park' with 'the park' to be grammatically correct.

× I was a child, my parents and my sister sometimes going to park and picnic with my parents in.

✓ When I was a child, my parents, my sister, and I sometimes went to the park and had a picnic.

Sentence is ungrammatical and has tense and word-order problems. Add the subordinating phrase 'When I was a child' for clarity, use past tense 'went' for completed habitual action, include the subject 'I', add the definite article 'the' before 'park', and use 'had a picnic' for a natural verb phrase. Also fix punctuation by separating items with commas.

× No, because I, I am a high school student. Uh, it's busy for is busy, then, uh, I ready to school test and next, uh, next test IO.

✓ No, because I am a high school student. It's busy, and I am getting ready for school tests.

Original contains redundant words, incorrect verb forms and tense, and awkward phrasing. Use present continuous 'am getting ready' to express ongoing preparation, 'for school tests' is the correct prepositional phrase, and remove filler repetitions. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word order.

× Yeah, I went uh, bur virtually, uh almost I always in see, see the park, uh, my airport, my apartment, uh, my apartment front have a park.

✓ Yeah, I haven't gone much in person, but I often see the park near my apartment in front of my building.

Original mixes tenses and has article and preposition errors. Use the negative present perfect 'haven't gone' or rephrase to indicate lack of in-person visits, use 'see the park' with 'the' before 'park', and correct noun phrases to 'the park in front of my apartment' or 'near my apartment'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer word order.

× Yeah, I want, I want to going to, uh in United States at park.

✓ Yeah, I want to go to a park in the United States.

Use the infinitive 'to go' rather than 'to going', use the indefinite article 'a' before 'park' because it is non-specific, and include 'the' before 'United States' only when needed; here 'in the United States' is acceptable but 'in the United States' is more natural: corrected to 'in the United States'. Also fix word order to match standard English.