Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap kısa ve biraz karışık. Konuya doğrudan başlamışsınız ama gereksiz bilgi (yaşınız) ve dolgu kelimeler (“uh”) kullanılmış. Konuyu netleştirmek için bir ana cümleyle başlayın, ardından 1–2 destekleyici detay ekleyin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak akışı iyileştirin ve dilbilgisine dikkat edin (örneğin “to the park” veya çoğul “parks”).

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were peaceful and safe. For example, I used to feed the ducks and play on the swings with my friends, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Cevabınız anlaşılır ama çok kısa, tekrarlı ve dolgu kelimeler içeriyor. Bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp nedenleri açıkça belirtin ve bağlaçlarla destekleyin. Duygu ve sebepleri somut örneklerle genişletin. Dilbilgisi: “I love it and it’s fun” şeklinde düzeltin.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and exercise. For instance, I often walk my dog there and sometimes meet friends for a picnic, which makes the visits enjoyable.

제안: Cümle yapısı hatalı ve ifadeniz net değil (“Parks City” karışık). Doğrudan görüşünüzü söyleyin, nedenlerini verin ve örnek veya sonuç ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (because, so, therefore) kullanarak mantığı güçlendirin.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and improve air quality. More parks would also give people places to exercise and relax, which could improve public health.

제안: Cevabınız motive edici ama dilbilgisi ve akış sorunlu. “I want to go to Disneyland because it’s my dream” gibi net bir ana cümle kurun, sonra nedenlerini ve bir ayrıntı ekleyin. Tekrarlardan kaçının ve daha doğal sıfat kullanımına özen gösterin.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Disneyland in the future because it has many exciting attractions and shows. For example, I want to try the themed rides and see the parades, which is why it has been my dream destination.

× I like going to park.

✓ I like going to parks.

The noun 'park' should be plural because the student refers to parks in general, not a single park. Use the plural form when speaking about places generally (e.g., 'I like going to parks'). Suggestion: Use 'park' vs 'parks' according to countability and general meaning; here 'parks' is correct.

× Yes yes, still like going to park now because umm I'm I love it and fun.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because I love them and they are fun.

Several tense and form issues: 'still like' needs subject 'I'; 'park' should be plural for general meaning; 'I'm I love it' is ungrammatical — use 'I love them' to refer to parks; 'fun' needs a verb: 'they are fun'. Suggestion: Keep subject and verb consistent ('I still like'), use plural for general reference, and ensure clauses are complete ('they are fun').

× Yes, yes, I like to see more Parks City.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city.

Word order and article/preposition use are incorrect. 'Parks City' is not correct English. Use 'parks in the city' or 'more parks in my city'. Also 'like to see' in this context is better as 'would like to see' for polite preference. Suggestion: Use preposition 'in' with places and include articles or possessives as needed ('the city' or 'my city'). Use 'would like' for preferences.

× Yes, I want to the Disneyland because my dream and it is so fun and it is so big.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Disneyland because it is my dream; it is so fun and so big.

Missing verb 'go' after 'want to'. 'the Disneyland' is incorrect—use 'Disneyland' without 'the'. 'My dream' should be clarified as 'it is my dream'. Suggestion: Use 'want to' + base verb ('want to go'), avoid 'the' before proper names like Disneyland, and connect ideas with clear clauses.

× I love big parks.

✓ I love big parks.

Original sentence is grammatically acceptable. It correctly uses the plural 'parks' to express a general preference. No correction needed.