Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use past tense for childhood. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant phrasing and keep to fewer than five sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make your reason clear.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because they were a place where I could play with my friends. For example, we often spent entire afternoons playing football on the grass or having picnics, which helped me make close friendships.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and use present tense patterns correctly. Explain one or two specific reasons and link them logically (for example, because / as / so). Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetition (e.g., 'career, professional career').

예시: Not really; I rarely visit parks now because I am very busy studying and preparing for my professional career. As a result, I prefer to spend my free time at home studying or exercising close to my university.

제안: Give a brief but expanded answer: state your opinion clearly and add one specific reason or benefit. Use linking words (for example, because / because of / so) and keep it to one or two supporting sentences.

예시: Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation. For instance, additional parks would make it easier for residents to go jogging or for families to spend weekends outdoors.

제안: Be precise when naming places and avoid vague phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons why you want to go and when you might go. Correct small errors ('part' -> 'park' or 'theme park') and avoid unnecessary clauses.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Disneyland, which is a famous theme park. I want to go because of the rides and shows, and I hope to visit there during a long vacation next year.

× I do, actually. It's one of the things that I like back when I was a kid.

✓ I did, actually. It was one of the things that I liked when I was a kid.

The student mixes present simple with a past time reference 'when I was a kid'. Use past tense 'did' and 'liked' to match the past time frame and maintain tense consistency. Suggestion: Use past tense for actions or states tied to a past time (e.g., 'when I was a child').

× Since I like to play around with my friends, I get to enjoy playing as much as I can.

✓ Since I liked to play around with my friends, I got to enjoy playing as much as I could.

This sentence describes past habitual action but uses present tense 'like' and 'get'. Change verbs to past tense 'liked', 'got', 'could' to match the past context. Suggestion: When describing past habits, use past simple (liked, played, enjoyed).

× Not that much. Uh, there's a lot of factors why I don't go to parks now versus I'm studying.

✓ Not that much. Uh, there are a lot of reasons why I don't go to parks now because I'm studying.

Several issues: 'there's a lot of factors' is incorrect number agreement and article use; 'versus I'm studying' is incorrect conjunction/phrase. Correct 'there are' for plural 'reasons' and replace 'versus' with 'because' to show cause. Suggestion: Use 'there are a lot of reasons why...' and link cause with 'because'.

× Uh, I want to focus more on my career, professional career, but yeah.

✓ Uh, I want to focus more on my professional career, though.

The original repeats 'career' awkwardly and uses 'but yeah' informally. Combine into 'professional career' and use 'though' to contrast concisely. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use concise connectors in speaking tests.

× Yes, actually there's this part, it's called Disneyland, where the magic happens.

✓ Yes, actually there's this place called Disneyland, where the magic happens.

The student wrote 'part' instead of 'place'. Use 'there's this place called...' for introduction. Also remove the comma splice by linking noun and name directly. Suggestion: Use 'place' when referring to an amusement park and avoid comma splice by phrasing 'this place called Disneyland'.

× I would very much like to go there when I have the time.

✓ I would very much like to go there when I have time.

Phrase 'have the time' is not incorrect but 'have time' is more natural in this context. No modal error per se, but minor wording improvement. Suggestion: Use 'when I have time' for natural speech.