Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and grammar (past tense for childhood). Keep it under 5 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to play on the swings and ride my bicycle there almost every weekend. Those visits helped me make friends and created many happy memories.

제안: Answer directly, use present simple to describe current preferences, and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about how often you go or what you do there. Fix grammar and remove repetition.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I go less often because of my busy study schedule. However, when I have free time in the evenings or on weekends, I usually walk or read in the park to relax.

제안: Give a direct answer and then support it with a clear reason using linking words (because, so). Be specific about benefits of more parks. Use correct collocations (live in an urban area, build parks).

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green spaces for exercise and relaxation. For example, new parks could reduce pollution and give families safe places to spend time together.

제안: Answer the question directly (name the park), avoid philosophical openings about unpredictability. Use present conditional correctly and give specific reasons or details about the park. Keep sentences grammatical and complete.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Rose Garden in my hometown in the future. It is famous for its many varieties of roses, and I would enjoy walking among the flower beds and breathing the fresh air.

× Now I'm younger, if I got a chance to retry my childhood I would definitely going to like to going to park as a child.

✓ Now I'm younger; if I got a chance to relive my childhood, I would definitely like to go to the park as a child.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'If I got a chance' is a past form used for a hypothetical present; better: 'if I got a chance' can stay but must pair with 'I would' and base verb. 'going to like to going to' is ungrammatical: use 'would definitely like to go'. Also use article 'the park' for a general reference to parks experienced as a child. Suggestion: keep conditional structure consistent and use base verb after 'would' and correct article usage.

× Nowadays, I am struggling with my busy schedule for my study and I still like to go in the parks.

✓ Nowadays, I am struggling with a busy study schedule, but I still like to go to the parks.

Word choice and preposition errors: 'for my study' is awkward; 'a busy study schedule' is clearer. Use conjunction 'but' to contrast. Use preposition 'to' with 'go to the parks' rather than 'go in the parks'. Articles: 'a busy study schedule' is appropriate. Suggestion: simplify the phrase and use correct preposition 'to'.

× When I was free in my study during my after my study time, that time I like to go in the parks.

✓ When I was free after my study time, I liked to go to the parks.

Tense and redundancy errors: 'When I was free in my study during my after my study time' is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use past tense 'liked' to match 'When I was free' (past context). Use preposition 'to' (go to the parks). Remove redundant phrases. Suggestion: simplify to 'When I was free after my study time, I liked to go to the parks.'

× Well, I live in urban areas, there are several kind of buildings which are built by governments and local residents.

✓ Well, I live in an urban area; there are several kinds of buildings built by the government and local residents.

Number agreement and article use: 'urban areas' can be singular 'an urban area' to match 'I live in'. 'several kind of' should be 'several kinds of' (plural 'kinds'). Use 'the government' for a specific entity; 'built by governments' is possible but 'the government' is more natural here. Suggestion: ensure noun phrases agree in number and use appropriate articles.

× So definitely I would like to build a park in my city.

✓ So, I would definitely like to have more parks built in my city.

The original suggests the speaker will build a park personally; intent likely is to want more parks in the city. 'Like to build a park' is grammatical but may not match context. Rephrasing clarifies meaning and uses modal 'would like to' correctly. Suggestion: choose wording that matches intended meaning; use 'have more parks built' or 'see more parks built' for clarity.

× First of all, future is unpredictable and if I go to chance in the future to going any park, I would definitely choose my hometown garden named Rose Garden.

✓ First of all, the future is unpredictable, but if I get a chance to go to any park in the future, I would definitely choose my hometown garden called Rose Garden.

Multiple issues: missing article 'the' before 'future'; 'if I go to chance' is ungrammatical—use 'if I get a chance'; 'to going any park' should be 'to go to any park'; word order 'named Rose Garden' can be 'called Rose Garden'. Use conditional 'would' with base verb 'choose' is correct. Suggestion: use 'get a chance to go to' and include articles where needed.

× This is a famous for his flower called rose and there there I can feel fresh and.

✓ It is famous for its roses, and there I can feel refreshed.

Pronoun and possessive errors: 'his flower' incorrectly uses masculine pronoun; use possessive 'its' for 'garden'. 'called rose' should be plural 'roses' and 'there there' is repeated. 'I can feel fresh' is unnatural; use 'I can feel refreshed'. Also remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: use correct possessive pronoun 'its', pluralize 'roses' if referring generally, and choose appropriate adjective 'refreshed'.