Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 总体回答自然，信息明确，但有两处需要改进：1）句子长度稍长且有小语法错误（“fly kites”应为“flying kites”）。2）可以用一到两句更具体的细节或回忆（例如一次特别的经历）来丰富内容，同时保持不超过5句。建议注意时态一致并修正动名词用法。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. They were perfect places for my family to exercise and play together. I especially enjoyed swimming in the pond and flying kites on windy afternoons. One memory I have is when my kite got stuck in a tree and my father climbed up to retrieve it.

제안: 回答内容具体且关联性强，逻辑清晰。但存在小语法和表达问题：1）句子可更简洁，避免冗长（把原因和例子分成两句）。2）注意动词形式一致（“listen to birds”可改为“listening to birds”以匹配前文结构）。建议在一到两句内明确陈述并用连接词衔接细节。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after work. I often walk among the trees and listen to birds, which helps me escape the noise of the city and calm my nerves. As a result, I usually feel more focused and refreshed afterward.

제안: 回答观点明确且包含理由，但存在连贯性问题和句子断裂：句子“If there were more parks in my city.”是残句，应合并或修正。建议把条件句和结果句连贯表达，并加入具体例子或比较以增强说服力。保持句子不超过5句。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would improve the local environment and public health. If there were more parks, trees would help reduce air pollution and cool urban areas, and people would have more space for exercise and family activities. For example, a new park near my neighborhood would encourage more residents to go jogging and spend time outdoors.

제안: 回答清晰且包含个人计划与理由，但可更具体：1）明确命名一个公园或地点会更有说服力（例如“the Botanical Garden”已提及，可先提名再说明理由）。2）可以补充时间或计划细节以显得更自然。注意不要重复同义表达（“relax and take photos”与“see the flowers and walk around”稍有重复）。

예시: I plan to visit the city’s Botanical Garden next spring because it’s peaceful and full of beautiful plants. I want to take photos of the flowers, walk along the shaded paths, and maybe have a picnic while enjoying the scenery.

× I especially enjoyed swimming and fly kites there.

✓ I especially enjoyed swimming and flying kites there.

句中並列動詞應保持一致形式。原句使用 enjoyed（過去式）後，第一項用 swimming（動名詞），第二項誤用不定式或原形 fly，應改為 flying 以與 swimming 形式一致並作為 enjoyed 的賓語。建議在類似結構中保持動詞形式一致，例如：enjoyed reading and writing。

× Yes, I still enjoy going to parks as I get older and the pressure from work and study has been accumulating, so I often visit a park to unwind and recharge.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks as I get older and the pressure from work and study accumulates, so I often visit a park to unwind and recharge.

句中時間軸混用不當。前半句表示隨著年齡增長（一般性事實）應使用一般現在時 get older，後半句 has been accumulating（現在完成進行）暗示正在累積，但與表示經常性或普遍情況的語境不太匹配，改用一般現在時 accumulates 更自然。建議描述習慣或普遍事實時使用一般現在時；若要強調正在進行且持續影響，可用現在完成進行。

× For example, I enjoy walking among the trees and listen to birds, which helps me escape the hustle and bustle and calm my nerves.

✓ For example, I enjoy walking among the trees and listening to birds, which helps me escape the hustle and bustle and calm my nerves.

並列動作在 enjoy 之後應使用動名詞形式。原句第一項為 walking（正確），第二項使用原形 listen，應改為 listening 與前項一致，作為 enjoy 的賓語。建議檢查 enjoy、avoid、mind 等動詞後是否要求動名詞。

× Yes, I would. If there were more parks in my city. It would greatly improve the local environment because trees help reduce air pollution and cool the area.

✓ Yes, I would. If there were more parks in my city, it would greatly improve the local environment because trees help reduce air pollution and cool the area.

原文把條件句拆成了兩個不完整的句子，導致句子結構錯誤。正確的第二類條件句應為一個完整句子，從屬副詞子句（If...）與主句用逗號連接或合併為一個句子。建議連接條件子句與主句，或改寫為兩個完整句子：If there were more parks in my city, the local environment would be greatly improved。

× For example, I enjoy walking among the trees and listen to birds, which helps me escape the hustle and bustle and calm my nerves.

✓ For example, I enjoy walking among the trees and listening to birds, which helps me escape the hustle and bustle and calm my nerves.

（重複提示）句中 enjoy 後應跟動名詞形式，且整體描述為一般現在的習慣，因此使用動名詞形式更合適。建議統一動詞形式以保持時態和語法一致。

× Well, I would like to visit a big City Park next year. It's peaceful and has nice trees, so I think it will be a great place to relax and take photos.

✓ Well, I would like to visit a big city park next year. It's peaceful and has nice trees, so I think it will be a great place to relax and take photos.

此處主要問題為專有名詞大小寫與一般名詞使用。原句 City Park 若非特定公園名稱，不應全部大寫為 City Park。雖然不完全屬於語法類別清單，但為使語句自然，建議使用小寫 city park 表示一個大公園。時態和語法本身正確。