Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep to 2–3 sentences. Focus on past tense when talking about childhood and give a specific example of activities.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, I often went to Vikarabad Park where I used to play on the swings and do simple exercise routines with my friends.

제안: Answer directly and use present tense for current habits. Use a linking word to contrast past and present (e.g., 'however' or 'but'), and give one specific reason for the change. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

예시: I still like parks, but I go less often now because I am busy with college and household chores. However, I try to visit a park when I have free time to relax.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific benefits. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect idea and avoid repetitive phrases. Mention concrete advantages for different groups (children, families, community).

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide fresh air and safe places for children to play. For instance, more parks would allow families to exercise, socialize, and children to develop outdoor skills.

제안: Be specific about a preference or express a plan using correct future forms. If unsure, say what kind of park you would like to visit and why. Use one or two sentences and include linking words like 'if' or 'perhaps'.

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind, but if I get the chance I would like to visit a large botanical garden with my friends. If possible, we would spend the afternoon walking among the plants and having a picnic.

× Yeah, of course in my childhood, I'll mostly visited parks and I have fun with in the park.

✓ Yeah, of course, in my childhood I mostly visited parks and I had fun in the park.

The original mixes future-like contraction 'I'll' with past actions; use simple past 'visited' and 'had' for past routines. Remove extra preposition 'with' and duplicate 'in'. Also add commas for clarity.

× In our in our society, there is a park named by Vikarabad Park.

✓ In our community there is a park called Vikarabad Park.

Use 'called' to name the park, not 'named by'. Remove duplicate phrase 'in our'. 'Society' can be awkward; 'community' is more natural here.

× In this park we have so many exercises.

✓ In this park there are many exercise areas or exercise facilities.

'Exercises' is unclear; likely means 'exercise areas' or 'facilities'. Also use 'there are' for existence (there be issue), and 'many' with countable plural nouns. Rephrase for clarity.

× Yeah, sometimes not more.

✓ Yeah, not so often now.

The phrase 'sometimes not more' is ungrammatical. To contrast past frequency with current lower frequency use 'not so often now'.

× In my childhood, I travel, I visited more parks, my parents take me over there and I'll enjoy there.

✓ In my childhood I traveled; I visited many parks. My parents took me there and I enjoyed them.

Maintain past tense consistently: 'traveled', 'visited', 'took', 'enjoyed'. Replace 'over there' with 'there' and correct object reference; 'enjoyed them' or 'enjoyed my time there'. Remove future contraction 'I'll'.

× But now, in the busy schedule, I need to go for college and a home house works.

✓ But now, with a busy schedule, I need to go to college and do housework at home.

Use 'with a busy schedule' for context. 'Go to college' is correct; 'a home house works' is incorrect — use 'do housework' or 'do chores'.

× I'll busy in that.

✓ I'm busy with that.

'I'll busy' mixes future contraction with adjective; use 'I'm busy' and 'with that' to indicate what occupies you.

× Yeah, of course in the parks we will get a new environment and our future generation also will travel to will visit the parks by playing with some other child.

✓ Yes, of course; parks provide a pleasant environment, and future generations will visit parks and play with other children.

Remove redundant modals and correct verb forms. Use 'will visit' or 'will play' consistently; 'some other child' should be plural 'other children' to be natural. Also rephrase 'get a new environment' to 'provide a pleasant environment'.

× In my childhood, I played.

✓ When I was a child, I used to play there.

'In my childhood, I played' is grammatically possible but awkward; 'When I was a child, I used to play there' clarifies habitual past action.

× In the future, I don't know.

✓ I don't know about the future.

Simpler phrasing; 'In the future, I don't know' is awkward. Use present 'I don't know' or 'I don't know about the future' to express uncertainty.

× I didn't have planner to visit the.

✓ I don't have any plans to visit.

The speaker intends present lack of plans; use present 'don't have' and 'plans' plural. Remove stray 'the'.

× But I if I get a chance I'll go with the my friends and I'll have some fun and some chill time with them.

✓ But if I get a chance, I'll go with my friends and have some fun and relax with them.

Remove extra 'the' before 'my friends'. Use 'have some fun and relax' instead of 'some chill time'. Keep future 'I'll' for the conditional future. Also fix word order and comma after 'But if I get a chance'.