Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Tránh tiếng ừ, à quá nhiều; dùng câu chủ đề nêu quan điểm ngay (ví dụ: Yes, I liked going to parks), rồi thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (ai đi, làm gì ở công viên, cảm xúc). Giữ độ dài tối đa 4–5 câu. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (liked, spent time, playground, relax).

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends and we played on the swings and climbed trees. Those visits made me feel relaxed and happy because we could run around freely. I especially remember picnics my family organized on weekends.

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp trước rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với lí do cụ thể. Tránh cấu trúc lủng củng và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "I don't have much spare time to go to parks"). Dùng liên từ như "but" hoặc "however" để liên kết ý. Cố gắng cung cấp 1 ví dụ cụ thể về thời gian rảnh hoặc việc học.

예시: Not as often as before, because I am a student and I have a heavy study schedule. However, I still visit a nearby park once or twice a month to relax and clear my mind after exams. When I go, I usually walk or read for thirty minutes.

제안: Nên đưa ra câu chủ đề khẳng định (Yes/No) rồi nêu lí do cụ thể, tránh câu không rõ nghĩa. Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như "green spaces, public health, community" và liên từ như "because, so, therefore" để làm rõ lợi ích. Ví dụ nêu lợi ích công cộng và một tình huống cá nhân.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve air quality and provide places for exercise. For example, a new park near my neighborhood would give families a safe area for children to play and help people relax after work. Therefore, more parks would benefit everyone's health.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng: có/không, rồi giải thích ngắn gọn. Tránh lỗi từ vựng như "speakers" hay "talk" không phù hợp; dùng "parks". Nếu bận, có thể nói sẽ vẫn cố gắng đến một công viên cụ thể khi rảnh. Đưa ra một ví dụ cụ thể về công viên bạn muốn thăm (tên hoặc đặc điểm).

예시: I don't have any specific parks planned at the moment because I will be very busy studying to become a doctor. However, if I get a day off, I would like to visit the large botanical garden in the city because it has many rare plants and quiet walking paths. It would be a nice break from studying.

× Uh, you may need to remember umm, I think it's debate on my mood and mental stay.

✓ Uh, you may need to remember, umm, I think it depends on my mood and mental state.

The phrase 'debate on my mood and mental stay' is incorrect word choice and structure. Use 'depends on' for conditional relationship and 'mental state' is correct noun phrase. Also add comma for clarity. Suggestion: replace 'debate on' with 'depends on' and 'mental stay' with 'mental state'.

× What I need is umm, let's see, you know when I'm sure I really like go hanging out with my friends.

✓ What I need is, umm, let's see, you know when I'm sure I really like going to hang out with my friends.

The verb combination is incorrect: use gerund 'going' and the phrase 'to hang out' or 'hanging out', not 'go hanging out'. Suggestion: use 'going to hang out' or 'hanging out' and keep consistent structure.

× MMM, let's see, you know, because I'm a student, so I have more important things on my table, Yes.

✓ MMM, let's see, you know, because I'm a student, I have more important things to do.

'Have more important things on my table' is unnatural. Use 'have more important things to do' to express obligations in present tense. Also remove unnecessary 'so' and 'Yes'.

× I don't have much spare time to going talk now.

✓ I don't have much spare time to talk now.

After 'to' (infinitive marker) use base verb 'talk', not 'going'. 'To going talk' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'to talk' or 'for talking' depending on context.

× I think of course because park play an important role on telly last time in citizen or resident because it's had it helped me and my family.

✓ I think, of course, parks play an important role in the city for citizens and residents because they have helped me and my family in the past.

Multiple issues: missing plural/definite article ('park' -> 'parks'), wrong preposition ('on telly' incorrect; use 'in the city'), awkward 'last time' -> 'in the past', subject-verb agreement ('play' with plural 'parks'), incorrect pronoun and tense ('it's had it helped' -> 'they have helped'). Suggestion: pluralize 'park' and fix prepositions and verb forms.

× I think no speakers in the future become because I'm becoming a doctor.

✓ I don't think I'll have time to go to parks in the future because I'm going to become a doctor.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical. Use future expression 'I don't think I will' or 'I don't think I'll' and 'have time to go to parks' to express future lack of time. 'I'm becoming a doctor' -> 'I'm going to become a doctor' or 'I'm training to become a doctor'.

× So I think I don't have great time going to talk, yes.

✓ So I think I won't have much time to go out, yes.

Mix of tenses and wrong verb phrases: 'don't have great time going to talk' is incorrect. Use future 'won't have much time' or present 'don't have much time' depending on context, and 'to go out' or 'to talk' depending on meaning. Suggestion: clarify intended action and use correct tense and infinitive form.