Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ понятен, но нужно улучшить структуру и связность, убрать повторения и расширить детали. Говорите кратко: одна вводная фраза, затем 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретикой. Используйте связки (for example, also, sometimes) и избегайте тавтологии (play volleyball / play tennis / in the tennis court можно объединить).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with friends to play sports, especially volleyball and tennis, and sometimes we had small picnics on the grass. For example, we would spend whole afternoons practicing serves and then share homemade sandwiches.

제안: Хорошая идея, но есть ошибки в грамматике и формулировках, а фраза "to be far from the cities routine" звучит неестественно. Употребляйте правильные предлоги и артикли, уточняйте цель визита и используйте связки (because, so, usually).

예시: Yes, I do. Since I moved from the village to the city, visiting the park has become part of my daily routine. After work or tutor classes I usually go there to relax and escape the noise of the city.

제안: Ответ четкий, но есть повторы («hometown» дважды) и небольшие проблемы с артикуляцией мысли. Дайте более конкретные причины и последствия, используйте связки (because, therefore, which would) и исправьте лексику (a quite high level → quite high levels of pollution).

예시: Yes, I would love that. My hometown has quite high levels of air pollution, so creating more parks would improve air quality and give residents peaceful places to relax. This would likely benefit public health and community life.

제안: Идея понятна, но есть неверные слова («Hut of New York City»), повторы («Uh») и ошибки в формулировке (get visa, study in the university). Нужно быть точнее и избегать запинок, использовать связки (when, because, if) и правильные выражения: Central Park in New York City; get a visa; study at university.

예시: Yes — I would love to visit Central Park in New York City. I plan to go there when I get a visa to study at a university in the US, because I have heard it is a beautiful place to relax and see local life.

× I usually went to parks with my friends to play volleyball and have some picnic with them and we always played tennis in tennis court in the park.

✓ I usually went to parks with my friends to play volleyball and have picnics with them, and we always played tennis on the tennis court in the park.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'have some picnic' is incorrect noun number and article use — use plural 'picnics' for repeated events (Singular and plural issue, ID 1) and drop 'some'. Also use the correct preposition 'on' with 'tennis court' and include the definite article 'the' before 'tennis court' (Incorrect use of prepositions and article errors, IDs 11 and 22). Keep past tense consistently 'went/played'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for repeated activities, correct prepositions, and include necessary articles.

× Since I moved from village to city it became kind of daily routine for me.

✓ Since I moved from the village to the city, it has become a kind of daily routine for me.

After 'Since' plus a past time clause, the result should use present perfect to show a state continuing to the present (Present tense issue, ID 6). Also include definite articles before 'village' and 'city' when referring to specific places (Article errors, ID 22). Add commas for clarity.

× After work or my tutor classes I always go there to to be far from the cities routine.

✓ After work or my tutor classes, I always go there to be away from the city's routine.

Use 'away from' rather than 'far from' in this context (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). 'Cities routine' needs possessive form 'city's' and an article 'the city's routine' if speaking about the city's routine; here 'the city's routine' or 'the city's daily routine' is preferred (Incorrect use of pronouns/articles, IDs 12 and 22). Also remove duplicated 'to'. Add comma after introductory phrase.

× The main reason is because in my hometown it's a quite high level of air pollution and I think our residents would be happy to see more parks in our hometown.

✓ The main reason is that my hometown has a quite high level of air pollution, and I think residents would be happy to see more parks there.

Avoid 'the main reason is because' — use 'the main reason is that' (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). 'It's a quite high level of air pollution' should be rephrased with subject 'my hometown has' (Present tense issue/structure). Repeating 'our hometown' is redundant; use 'there'. Use 'residents' rather than 'our residents' for general statement.

× Uh, the park I would love to visit is Central Park in the Hut of New York City.

✓ The park I would love to visit is Central Park in the heart of New York City.

'Hut' is incorrect word; likely intended 'heart' (vocabulary error categorized under sentence structure or incorrect word choice; map to Incorrect use of prepositions/structure, ID 11/26). Use 'in the heart of New York City' with article 'the' (Article and preposition use). Remove filler 'Uh' and ensure correct noun phrase.

× Uh, I will definitely go there when I get visa to study in the university there.

✓ I will definitely go there when I get a visa to study at the university there.

Include the indefinite article 'a' before 'visa' (Article errors, ID 22). Use the preposition 'at' or 'to' with 'study at the university' depending on context; 'study at the university' is natural here (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Remove filler 'Uh'.