Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (thì động từ, số nhiều/ít), phát âm và sắp xếp lại câu cho tự nhiên hơn. Nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau là chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất, hoạt động và cảm xúc. Tránh lỗi như 'I really like' (quá khứ nên là 'liked'), 'work under the shop' (ngữ nghĩa không rõ), 'sometime' -> 'sometimes'. Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu và dùng liên từ phù hợp (e.g., 'and', 'so', 'because').

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park with my father when I was a child. We usually sat under the trees to cool off after a hot day, and I often played on the swings while he relaxed. Sometimes we bought ice cream, which made those evenings even more enjoyable.

제안: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc, ngữ pháp và từ vựng; tránh tiếng lặp 'uh' và sử dụng thì đúng ('I'm very busy' ok hiện tại nhưng cần giải thích ngắn gọn). Trình bày rõ ràng chủ đề và lý do bằng một hoặc hai câu liên kết (ví dụ 'because' hoặc 'so'). Hoàn thành câu (không bỏ cụm 'to the').

예시: At the moment I don't go to parks very often because I'm very busy with schoolwork. As a result, I usually prefer to rest at home in the evenings rather than going out.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (số nhiều 'parks'), dùng cấu trúc liên kết mạch lạc hơn và thêm ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi giải thích hậu quả và lợi ích cụ thể. Có thể nêu một đề xuất ngắn hoặc ví dụ về địa điểm.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because industrial development has harmed air quality. Creating more parks would improve air quality, provide green spaces for relaxation, and offer recreational areas for families, such as playgrounds and walking paths.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (cụm 'going to cook from National Park' không đúng). Nên nêu tên công viên quốc gia rõ ràng, lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: 'clean air', 'wildlife'), và dùng cấu trúc mong muốn rõ ràng ('I hope to visit...'). Tránh tiếng ngập ngừng và giữ dưới 5 câu.

예시: In the future I hope to visit Ning Bing National Park because it is known for its clean air and diverse wildlife. I would like to see animals I have never seen before and enjoy hiking through its scenic trails.

× When I was a child I really like going to the park with my father to relax after a hot day.

✓ When I was a child I really liked going to the park with my father to relax after a hot day.

The sentence refers to a past habitual action, so the verb should be in the past tense ('liked'). Use past simple for repeated actions in the past. Suggestion: use 'liked' for consistency with 'When I was a child'.

× We often work under the shop, the trees, I play on the swing and sometime we bought ice cream which made those evenings very enjoyable.

✓ We often sat under the shade of the trees, I played on the swing and sometimes we bought ice cream, which made those evenings very enjoyable.

Multiple issues: 'work' is incorrect meaning; for past habitual actions use past tense verbs 'sat' and 'played' to agree with past time frame. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Added 'the shade of the trees' for clarity. Ensure verbs agree in tense and number with the past context.

× For now, I'm very busy, uh, because the homework, homework at the school, uh, and I'm often study school and now I'm very lazy.

✓ At the moment I'm very busy because of my homework at school, and I often study at school; now I'm very tired.

'For now' is acceptable but 'At the moment' is more natural. 'because the homework' needs preposition 'because of' and possessive 'my'. 'I'm often study' is incorrect: after 'I' use base verb with proper auxiliary or use 'I often study' but 'study at school' fits; 'very lazy' conflicts with 'busy' so 'very tired' may be intended. Maintain present tense and correct verb forms and prepositions.

× So I think I, uh, don't enjoy going to the.

✓ So I think I don't enjoy going to the park anymore.

Sentence is incomplete and missing object 'park'. 'Don't enjoy going to the' is ungrammatical; add 'park' and optional 'anymore' for clarity. Ensure full sentence structure with object.

× Many factories have been established in my country and they are harmful to the environment, so I think the government should create more park in the city to improve air quality and give people green space for relaxation.

✓ Many factories have been established in my country and they are harmful to the environment, so I think the government should create more parks in the city to improve air quality and give people green space for relaxation.

'More park' is uncountable/incorrect; use plural 'more parks' to indicate additional countable places. 'The government' is correct; keep tense and article usage consistent.

× In the future I hope have a chance going to cook from National Park in Ning Bing because uh cook for National Park have uh uh clean air and many animal I have never seen in my life.

✓ In the future I hope to have a chance to go to Ningbing National Park because the park has clean air and many animals I have never seen in my life.

Multiple corrections: 'hope have' should be 'hope to have'; 'going to cook from' is incorrect phrase; use 'to go to Ningbing National Park'. Use present simple 'the park has' to describe general facts about the park. 'many animal' should be plural 'many animals'. Maintain future intention with 'hope to' + infinitive and correct noun plurals and article use.