Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy, clearer sentence structure, and more specific details. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms (e.g., 'loved going to parks', 'we played', 'on weekends').

예시: I loved going to parks as a child. Usually on weekends I went with my friends and we played football or flew kites; the parks were peaceful and breezy, which made them perfect places to relax.

제안: Improve verb tense consistency and reduce repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately and correct forms such as 'I go', 'I feel', 'it helps'.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I feel stressed or tired, I go for a walk there because the beautiful scenery and calm atmosphere help me relax and recharge.

제안: Make your answer direct and concise, correct plural and verb forms, and provide a specific benefit. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas, and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green spaces and a peaceful environment. Families could spend time together there, and children would have safe places to play.

제안: Clarify the park name and correct sentence structure. Start with a direct answer naming the park, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Fix vocabulary errors ('trail' not 'trade', 'refreshing' as adjective).

예시: Yes, I want to visit a park called Riverside. I want to go there because it has a long walking trail and a peaceful, refreshing atmosphere for relaxing walks.

× Yes, I love to going to park.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park.

The original uses an infinitive 'to' plus a gerund 'going', which is incorrect. Use either 'love to go' or 'love going'. Also 'park' needs the definite article 'the' or plural 'parks' depending on meaning. Past context ('as a child') requires past tense 'loved'. Suggestion: use 'loved going to the park' for childhood habit.

× When I was a child I went with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I went to the park with my friends.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'to' and the noun 'park' is implied; adding 'to the park' clarifies location and requires the definite article 'the'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.

× Usually in the weekend we are playing on different activities like football, band, winter and there are parks provide the parks provide the on wind and peaceful.

✓ Usually on weekends we played different activities like football and badminton, and the parks were windy and peaceful.

Multiple problems: 'in the weekend' should be 'on weekends'; present continuous 'we are playing' is inappropriate for habitual past, so use past 'we played'. 'Band' likely intended 'badminton'; 'winter' is incorrect here. Repeated phrase 'the parks provide' is ungrammatical; better to say 'the parks were windy and peaceful'. Adjusted vocabulary and tense to match childhood context.

× Yes, definitely, I love to going to parks now because when when I feel so stressed and exhausted, I would just simply went to park because park has a beautiful sceneries and peaceful atmosphere which help us to relax and recharge again.

✓ Yes, definitely. I love going to parks now because when I feel stressed and exhausted, I simply go to a park since it has beautiful scenery and a peaceful atmosphere which helps me relax and recharge.

Replace 'love to going' with 'love going' (correct gerund/infinitive use). Remove duplicate 'when'. 'Would just simply went' mixes modal and past tense; use simple present 'simply go' for habitual present. Use 'a park' or 'the park' and 'scenery' (uncountable) instead of 'sceneries'. 'Which help us' should agree with singular 'atmosphere' so use 'helps me' and match pronoun to speaker.

× Yes, I would like to see some more parks in my cities because parks provide the green atmosphere and peaceful environment and family can goes to spend their time and they can they take their child to win playing for safely.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks provide a green atmosphere and a peaceful environment. Families can go there to spend time, and they can take their children to play safely.

'Cities' should be singular if referring to one city. 'Some more' can be simplified to 'more'. 'Provide the green atmosphere' needs 'a' before 'green atmosphere'. 'Family can goes' has subject-verb agreement and pluralization errors: use 'families can go' or 'a family can go'; 'child' should be plural 'children'. 'Win playing for safely' is unintelligible; corrected to 'play safely'.

× Yes, definitely you are A1 park with name is Riverside.

✓ Yes, definitely. There is a park called Riverside.

Original mixes pronouns and fragments: 'you are A1 park' is incorrect. Use 'There is a park called Riverside' to introduce the park. This also fixes a 'There be' construction error by using the correct form.

× So I want to go there uh, because there is a long trade for walks and peaceful atmosphere and refreshing.

✓ So I want to go there because it has a long trail for walking, a peaceful atmosphere, and is refreshing.

'Trade for walks' should be 'trail for walking' or 'walking trail'. Add articles 'a long trail' and 'a peaceful atmosphere'. 'Refreshing' needs to be connected properly (e.g., 'and is refreshing'). Removed filler 'uh' and ensured parallel structure.