Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and reduce hesitations. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences: state that you liked parks, give one specific reason and a short example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly and avoid wrong phrases (e.g. “take a piece” → “take a break”).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were great places to relax after school. For example, I often played football with my friends there and we would stay until sunset.

제안: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words. Fix tense and phrasing (e.g. “when I get free” → “when I have free time”; “in a piece” → “to relax”). Limit filler words and combine related points into one or two clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks when I have free time because they are peaceful places to relax. I also take my child there to play, which makes it a pleasant family outing.

제안: Give a direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using connectors like “because” and “also”. Avoid repetition and ungrammatical phrases (“park is the place” → “parks are places”).

예시: Yes, I would. I think more parks would improve people’s quality of life because they provide space for recreation and help the environment by increasing greenery.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park. Use correct tense and concise supporting details: say how you heard about it and what specifically attracts you. Avoid vague phrases like “a lot of things.”

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Greenland Park in Noida. I heard about it on Instagram and from friends; it looks attractive because of its large gardens and family-friendly facilities, which I would like to see in person.

× Well, yes, I really like going to parks as a child because at that time I was a kid and when I was feeling free after my studies, so I always went to park to take a piece or to play with my friends.

✓ Well, yes, I really liked going to parks as a child because I was a kid then, and when I was free after my studies I always went to the park to relax or to play with my friends.

The speaker is describing past habits, so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Like' should be 'liked' to match 'as a child'. 'At that time' and 'when I was feeling free after my studies' are better expressed as 'I was free after my studies'. 'Went to park' needs the article 'the park'. 'Take a piece' is incorrect and unclear; 'relax' conveys the intended meaning. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because when I got free, uh, if I am doing something and also sometimes I go with my child to play with him and when I am feeling like that, I want to sit anywhere so, uh, in a piece. So I always go to park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because when I am free I sometimes go with my child to play with him, and when I feel like relaxing I like to sit somewhere in the park. So I often go to the park.

The response mixes past and present tenses inconsistently. Use present tense for current habits: 'when I am free', 'I sometimes go'. 'Feeling like that' is vague; 'feel like relaxing' is clearer. Use 'somewhere in the park' and 'often' instead of 'always' if describing a frequent habit. Include the definite article 'the park'. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I think park is the place where you can spend the whole time. Also, it is a good location, uh, it is good for the environment also because, uh, the greenery is very important. So I think that yes.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I think a park is a place where you can spend time. Also, parks are good for the environment because greenery is very important.

Use articles correctly: 'a park' (singular, nonspecific) and 'a place' (not 'the place'). 'Spend the whole time' is awkward; 'spend time' is natural. Use plural 'parks are good' when speaking generally. Remove filler words. (Grammar problem type ID:22)

× Yes, if I got a chance, I would like to go in a park which name is Greenland Park, which is in Noida. I like hear about that park on Instagram or some of my friend. So I also saw that there is a lot of things which I want to see over there. So I think yeah, I want to go.

✓ Yes, if I get a chance, I would like to go to a park called Greenland Park in Noida. I heard about that park on Instagram and from some of my friends. I have also seen that there are a lot of things I want to see there, so I would like to go.

Use correct verb forms: 'if I get a chance' (conditional future), not 'if I got'. Use 'go to a park' rather than 'go in a park'. Use the passive/perfect 'heard' (past) to report information received earlier. 'Some of my friend' should be 'some of my friends'. 'There is a lot of things' should be 'there are a lot of things' to agree in number. Use 'I would like to go' for polite intention. (Grammar problem type ID:9)