Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 문법 오류를 바로잡고 말하려는 내용을 더 명확히 표현하세요. 구체적으로 과거 습관을 나타낼 때는 'used to'를 정확히 사용하고, 단어 선택(예: 'dragonflies' 'frogs')과 시제 일관성에 주의하세요. 또한 연결어를 써서 이유나 결과를 명확히 설명하세요. 예: 주제문 → 구체적 행동 → 결과/어머니의 반응으로 구성하세요.

예시: Yes, parks were one of my favorite places when I was a child. I used to catch dragonflies and frogs and bring them home, which often annoyed my mother because they made a mess. As a result, she would scold me and tell me to release them back into the park.

제안: 의도를 더 분명히 하고 문법(과거습관, 현재상태, 시제)을 정리하세요. 중복 표현('used to to', 'I'd moved on' 등)을 제거하고 연결어로 과거와 현재를 비교하세요. 또한 'enjoy something at the park' 대신 구체적인 활동을 말하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

예시: I used to go to parks when I was younger, but I moved to a different town where there aren't any good parks. We do have a small park nearby, but it's too cramped for activities like playing football or having a picnic, so I rarely go there now.

제안: 아이디어는 괜찮지만 어휘 선택(‘perks’→‘parks’, 'person'→'people')과 문법(주어-동사 일치)을 고치고 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 문장을 분리해 '사람을 위한 공원'과 '동물을 위한 녹지'를 비교하는 방식으로 구조화하면 명확합니다.

예시: Yes, I would. Many wild animals are losing their natural habitats, so creating more parks with large green areas would help local wildlife. I would prefer parks focused on nature conservation rather than ones filled mainly with exercise equipment for people.

제안: 과거 습관과 현재 희망을 구분하여 명확히 말하세요. 'used to' 사용 시 뒤에 동사원형을 쓰고, 'renewed last year'는 완료 시제와의 조합을 자연스럽게 표현하세요. 방문 이유(무엇이 달라졌는지)를 구체적으로 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: I used to go to the Northern Island Park on the Han River. It was renovated last year, and I haven’t had a chance to visit since then, so I’d be very happy to go back and see the new pathways and gardens.

× I usually catch a dragon, flies or frog and take them to our house and my mom was very annoying about them and.

✓ I usually caught dragons, flies, or frogs and took them home, and my mom was very annoyed with them.

The student mixed tenses and verb forms. Use past tense for habitual actions in childhood (catch -> caught, take -> took). Plural nouns should match (dragon -> dragons, frog -> frogs). 'Was very annoying about them' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'was annoyed with/about something'. Improve by keeping past tense consistent and using correct adjective formed from verb (annoy -> annoyed).

× I assure them trouble.

✓ I caused them trouble.

'I assure them trouble' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that the student created problems for the animals, so the correct verb is 'cause' in past tense if referring to childhood: 'I caused them trouble.' Use correct verb and tense to express the meaning clearly.

× No, when I was young I used to to go to the park, but after I'd have moved on, I'd moved on another town.

✓ No. When I was young I used to go to the park, but after I moved to another town,

Double 'to' is an error: 'used to to go' -> 'used to go'. 'I'd have moved on' is incorrect for a simple past sequence; use simple past 'I moved to another town.' Also 'moved on another town' should be 'moved to another town.' Keep tense consistent and use correct preposition 'to.'

× There's no park where I can go and play.

✓ There was no park where I could go and play.

The student is referring to past circumstances (after moving away), so the verb 'be' should be past: 'There was' not 'There's.' Also use 'could' for past ability: 'I could go and play.' Match tense to context.

× Actually we have one, but it's too small to enjoy something at the park.

✓ Actually we had one, but it was too small to enjoy much at the park.

Tense should be past ('have' -> 'had', 'is' -> 'was') to match context. 'Too small to enjoy something' is unnatural; use 'too small to enjoy much' or 'to enjoy activities.' Choose a quantifier or phrase that fits English usage.

× Yes, of course, you know, a lot of wild animals lacks their appropriate environment to live in and I think we need more perks.

✓ Yes, of course. You know, a lot of wild animals lack appropriate environments to live in, and I think we need more parks.

Subject-verb agreement: 'a lot of wild animals' is plural, so verb should be 'lack' not 'lacks.' 'Their appropriate environment' is awkward; use plural 'appropriate environments' or 'an appropriate environment.' 'Perks' is a wrong word; the intended noun is 'parks.' Ensure correct vocabulary and agreement.

× Not for person for animals, which is full of green area, not uh, exercise facilities.

✓ Not for people but for animals, which should have lots of green space rather than exercise facilities.

Use 'people' instead of 'person' and 'but' as the conjunction. 'Full of green area' is unnatural; use 'lots of green space.' 'Not uh, exercise facilities' needs rephrasing to 'rather than exercise facilities.' Fix prepositions and word choice for clarity.

× I used to to go a northern Island Park in Han River.

✓ I used to go to Northern Island Park on the Han River.

Remove duplicate 'to'. Use 'go to' with the preposition 'to.' Capitalize proper noun 'Northern Island Park.' Use 'on the Han River' as the common prepositional phrase. Ensure place names and prepositions are correct.

× It has been renewed last year and since then I've never been there, so I'll be very glad if I can visit there again.

✓ It was renovated last year, and since then I have never been there, so I'd be very glad if I could visit it again.

Mix of tenses and incorrect perfect usage: 'has been renewed last year' should be simple past 'was renovated last year' because a specific past time is given. 'I've never been there' is correct present perfect for experience; keep it. For the conditional, use 'I'd be very glad if I could visit it again.' Also use 'visit it' instead of 'visit there.' Use consistent tense and correct verb forms.