Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và dùng thì phù hợp; tránh lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ “goat” có lẽ nhầm thành “thought” hoặc “go out”); làm câu ngắn gọn, trực tiếp theo cấu trúc topic sentence + chi tiết hỗ trợ. Ngoài ra dùng từ vựng chính xác (relax, relieve stress, think) và tránh lặp từ.

예시: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child because they were peaceful places where I could relax and relieve stress. I often sat under a tree and thought about my day or played games with friends, which made me feel happy and calm.

제안: Câu trả lời rõ ràng nhưng cần mượt hơn, loại bỏ tiếng lấp đầy (uh) và cải thiện cấu trúc (use present perfect or simple present). Có thể thêm một lý do ngắn gọn để làm rõ ý và dùng liên từ (but, although).

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks, but I don't have much time these days because of my busy schedule. However, I try to visit a park occasionally at weekends to recharge.

제안: Cần dùng ngôn ngữ chính xác và tránh lặp, loại bỏ tiếng lấp đầy. Dùng cấu trúc có trật tự: nêu quan điểm, rồi giải thích cụ thể với lý do và ví dụ. Chú ý ngữ pháp (plurals, articles) và từ vựng phù hợp (children, residents, reduce stress).

예시: Yes, I would. The city should build more parks for children and residents because parks provide space to relax and exercise. For example, new parks with playgrounds and walking paths would help people reduce stress and stay healthy.

제안: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần sắp xếp câu rõ ràng và dùng giới từ/đồng nhất từ (have a picnic, do activities, take pictures). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (which park, when) sẽ làm câu thuyết phục hơn. Giữ dưới 5 câu và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

예시: Yes. My friends and I plan to visit a large city park next month for a picnic. We'll prepare food, do some outdoor activities, take photos, and enjoy the green surroundings.

× When I was a child, I'll really like going to the parks because I have the place to reduce my stress and the time to relax and think about my goat.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked going to parks because I had a place to reduce my stress and time to relax and think about my goals.

The sentence mixes tenses: 'When I was a child' requires past tense. 'I'll really like' is incorrect future/modal and should be past 'I really liked' (Present tense issue). 'Have' should be past 'had'. Also 'the parks' is unnecessary article; use 'parks' generally (Article/Plural). 'My goat' is likely a typo for 'my goals'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, remove unnecessary articles, and check word choice.

× Yes, of course, but nowadays I'm a busy person that I, uh, don't have time to spend on going to parks.

✓ Yes, of course, but nowadays I'm a busy person and I don't have time to go to parks.

Use of 'that' after 'person' is awkward and unnecessary; 'and' connects ideas better. 'Don't have time to spend on going to parks' is wordy—use 'time to go to parks'. Tenses are present continuous/simple present appropriate for 'nowadays' (Present tense issue). Suggestion: simplify phrase and use correct connector.

× Yes, I think my CT have to umm build more parks for child or everyone to uh, like umm, relax and uh, get some exercise to uh, reduce my uh, reduce their stress after uh.

✓ Yes, I think my city has to, um, build more parks for children and everyone to, um, relax and get some exercise to reduce their stress.

'CT have' is incorrect: subject 'city' is singular so verb should be 'has' (Subject-verb agreement errors). 'Child' should be plural 'children'. Repetition and filler words removed; 'after' at end is incomplete so removed. Suggestion: use correct verb form for singular subjects and pluralize nouns when needed; avoid unnecessary fillers.

× Yes, I have a plan with my friend that we will go to a park to get a picnic, activities, to take a pictures and see more green place.

✓ Yes, I have a plan with my friend: we will go to a park for a picnic, do some activities, take pictures, and see more green areas.

Several article and noun number errors: 'a plan with my friend that we will' is awkward—use colon or 'and'. 'To get a picnic' should be 'for a picnic' (Article errors). 'Activities' needs a verb 'do some activities'. 'To take a pictures' should be 'take pictures' (no article with plural). 'See more green place' should be 'see more green areas' (countable plural). Suggestion: use correct prepositions for purpose, match articles with countability, and pluralize nouns appropriately.