Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, grammatical and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child.), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/and/so). Correct verb tenses and plural forms (e.g. parks, animals) and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, there were always animals like ducks and squirrels, and watching them made me feel happy and relaxed.

제안: Give a clear reason and use correct grammar. Begin with a topic sentence (Yes, I still enjoy parks.), then explain why with a logical connector (because/as/so). Use correct singular/plural and clearer vocabulary (e.g. 'a place to relax' instead of 'for one' or 'breakout').

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are a peaceful place to relax and get some fresh air, and I often go there to read or take a short walk.

제안: Answer the question directly and give specific reasons. Start with a clear opinion (Yes or No). Use linking words to add details and concrete examples: mention benefits (health, recreation, community) and avoid irrelevant phrases. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve public health and provide places for families to exercise and meet. For example, a new park with walking paths and playgrounds would encourage more outdoor activity.

제안: Give a clear, coherent plan. Start with a topic sentence naming the park you want to visit. Then add a reason and a brief detail using linking words (because/so/for example). Correct tense and sentence structure and avoid contradictory statements.

예시: In the future, I would like to visit UMM Park because I have heard it has beautiful gardens and a large lake. I hope to go there with friends to enjoy a picnic and take photos.

× Yes, I like going to the park before the park have a animal and help me feeling good.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child; the park had animals and made me feel good.

Errors: tense and verb form. 'like' should be past 'liked' to match 'as a child' context; 'before' is awkward, use 'when I was a child'. 'have' should be past 'had' (Past tense issue). 'a animal' has article-noun disagreement; 'an animal' but plural 'animals' fits better. 'help me feeling good' is ungrammatical; use 'made me feel good' (verb caused + base form). Suggestion: use consistent past tense for childhood memories, correct articles and use 'made me feel' for change in state.

× Yes, I like going to the park now because the park is for one and have a breakout.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park now because it is peaceful and has picnic areas.

Errors: unclear wording and verb agreement. 'the park is for one' is unclear; replace with a suitable adjective 'peaceful'. 'have a breakout' is incorrect: subject-verb agreement—should be 'has' if singular (Third person singular issue) and 'breakout' is wrong noun. Suggestion: choose correct verbs and vocabulary ('has picnic areas' or 'has open spaces') and keep present simple for current habits.

× I like park in my city example park health anymore and pretty girl and people have around.

✓ I like the parks in my city; for example, there are healthy parks, pretty areas, and many people around.

Errors: sentence structure, article use, and pluralization. 'I like park in my city' needs 'the parks' or 'parks' (Article errors and Singular/plural). 'example park health anymore' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'for example, parks that are healthy'. 'pretty girl and people have around' is unclear; correct to 'pretty areas and many people around' or 'there are pretty gardens and people around'. Suggestion: reorder with a clear subject and verb, use plural 'parks' and 'there are' to list features.

× In the future I want to go park UMM. I don't think in the future because I going to the park everywhere.

✓ In the future, I want to visit UMM park. I can't predict the future, but I will try to go to many parks.

Errors: verb forms and sentence coherence. 'go park UMM' needs 'visit UMM park' or 'go to UMM park' (preposition use). 'I don't think in the future because I going to the park everywhere' is ungrammatical: 'I going' lacks auxiliary 'am' or 'will be' and logical meaning is unclear. Use future tense 'I will try to go' or 'I plan to visit many parks'. Suggestion: use 'will' or 'want to' for future plans and include correct prepositions ('to' before park names).