Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答自然且有个人经历，但存在语法错误和冗余。注意时态与表达的准确性（例如“looked forward to doing”而不是“looking forward to do doing”），并尽量把话控制在最多5句内，同时避免重复。可以用一两句总结并补充1个具体细节（如玩什么游戏）。

예시: Yes, I loved going to the local park as a child. I used to play tag and football with neighborhood kids there after school, and those afternoons were the highlight of my day.

제안: 观点明确但句子结构混乱且有语法错误（如“Park can be surrounded by trees”应为“Parks are often surrounded by trees”），信息重复且衔接词使用不足。应用一两句清晰陈述并用连接词（for example, so）补充具体感受或频率，控制在5句内。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they offer a break from city life. For example, I often walk in a nearby park to breathe fresh air and relax when I feel stressed.

제안: 回答有逻辑且理由明确，但用词不够地道（如“more breathable”不合适，“citizens feel stressful”应为“feel stressed”）。避免泛泛而谈，加入具体好处或建议（如改善空气质量、提供运动场所），并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: Definitely. More parks would improve air quality and provide space for exercise and socializing. For instance, new parks with walking trails and playgrounds would help residents relax and stay active.

제안: 回答表达清楚但存在语法和用词问题（如“have already saw”应为“have already seen”；“hostile city life”用词过强，改为“hectic”或“busy”更合适）。可补充具体景点或活动（如看间歇泉、徒步）以使答复更具体和生动。

예시: I'd love to visit Yellowstone National Park someday because I've seen many travel videos about its geysers and wildlife. I'd like to hike the trails and watch Old Faithful erupt to experience nature away from city noise.

× I remember I often went to the parks right by our neighborhood to play with other kids after school.

✓ I remember I often went to the parks right by our neighborhood to play with other kids after school.

句子中“the parks”若指多座公园则复数正确；若只指附近的公园群体或复数概念，原句无需改动。此处不确定性较小，可保留复数形式。

× It was one of my favorite activities and what I was looking forward to do doing every day.

✓ It was one of my favorite activities and something I was looking forward to doing every day.

原句中不定式结构与动名词混用错误。“look forward to”后必须接动名词（doing）。此外“what I was looking forward to”结构用法不自然，改为“something I was looking forward to doing”更流畅。建议记住固定搭配“look forward to + ving”。

× Park can be surrounded by trees.

✓ Parks can be surrounded by trees.

原句将可数名词单数“Park”用作泛指时应使用复数“Parks”或加不定冠词“a park”。这里讲一般情况，使用复数“Parks”更合适。

× Where is a good place for people to breathe the fresh air and makes me feel immediately better because of getting away from busy city life.

✓ They are a good place for people to breathe fresh air and they make me feel immediately better because I get away from busy city life.

原句结构混乱：以疑问词“Where”开头但句意是陈述；主语和谓语不一致，且多个从句衔接不当。改为复数主语“they”（指parks），分成两部分并保持主谓一致。注意“breathe fresh air”不加定冠词，“make someone feel”结构，以及用“because I get away from”明确原因从句。

× If citizens feel stressful with their busy city life, they can go to a park and chill and relax.

✓ If citizens feel stressed by their busy city life, they can go to a park to chill and relax.

“feel stressful”错误，应为“feel stressed”（形容人感到压力）。介词搭配应为“stressed by”而非“with”。此外“go to a park and chill and relax”重复冗余，改为“go to a park to chill and relax”更自然。

× I'd really want to visit the Yellowstone National Park in the US someday because I have already saw various kinds of videos of this park posted by the traveling bloggers.

✓ I'd really like to visit Yellowstone National Park in the US someday because I have already seen various videos of this park posted by travel bloggers.

“I'd really want”不自然，应为“I'd really like”或“I really want”。另外，当前完成时“have already saw”错误，正确的过去分词为“seen”。地名前通常不加定冠词“The”与“National Park”连用时可省略或视具体名称，常见用法为“Yellowstone National Park”。“traveling bloggers”改为“travel bloggers”更简洁。

× The scenery there looks absolutely stunning and it is far away from city and noise, which means it's a perfect escape from the hostile city life.

✓ The scenery there looks absolutely stunning and it is far away from the city and its noise, which means it's a perfect escape from hostile city life.

“far away from city and noise”应加定冠词“the city”并指明“its noise”。“hostile city life”中“hostile”用法不太自然，可删去定冠词或改为“hostile”改为“the stresses of city life”。这里将“the hostile city life”改为“hostile city life”以保持表达简洁自然。