Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence, correct grammar, and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "my child freedom" or "new child people." Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I enjoyed the freedom to run around and play games, and I often met other children there, which helped me make friends and learn social skills.

제안: Use correct tense and concise phrasing. State your current preference clearly, give one or two specific reasons, and use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Avoid wordy or vague expressions.

예시: No, I don't go to parks much now. As an adult I prefer indoor activities because parks feel noisy and crowded, so they don't relax me the way they used to.

제안: Answer directly, use singular/plural agreement, and provide a specific reason with a linking phrase. Replace vague statements with concrete benefits of more parks.

예시: Yes, I would. Since the city's population is growing, adding more parks would provide residents with green space for exercise and relaxation, reduce congestion, and improve air quality.

제안: Be specific: name or describe a type of park and give one clear reason. Use correct article and phrasing ("a couple of parks"), avoid repeating "because." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, there are a couple of botanical gardens I'd like to visit in the future because of their extensive greenery and horticultural displays; I enjoy being surrounded by plants and learning about different species.

× Yes, absolutely. I like to go to the park as a child because I want my child freedom to be enjoyed and I want to learn and connect with the new child people.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I liked going to the park as a child because I wanted my childhood freedom to be enjoyed and I wanted to learn and connect with new children.

The speaker is referring to past habitual actions, so use past tense verbs (liked, wanted) rather than present tense (like, want). 'my child freedom' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'childhood freedom'. 'the new child people' is ungrammatical; use 'new children' or 'other children'. Also change 'to go to the park as a child' to 'going to the park as a child' to match past habitual sense. Suggestion: Use past simple for childhood habits and correct noun phrases (childhood freedom, new/other children).

× Now I'm grows up and I really don't like to go to the park at all because the environment is not catching my attention that much because of my adulthood.

✓ Now I'm grown up and I really don't like to go to the park at all because the environment does not catch my attention as much now that I am an adult.

Use correct form 'grown up' rather than 'grows up' with 'I am'. 'Grows' is third person singular present and incorrect here (subject-verb mismatch). The clause about attention needs present simple negative 'does not catch' rather than 'is not catching' for general state. 'because of my adulthood' is awkward; use 'now that I am an adult'. Suggestion: Use appropriate adjective 'grown up' and natural phrasing 'does not catch my attention' and 'now that I am an adult'.

× Yes, absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my cities because of the population. The population are getting more and more day by day, so the more parks make a good sense.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city because of the population. The population is increasing day by day, so having more parks makes sense.

Use singular 'city' if speaking about one's own city. 'The population are' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'population' is singular count noun in this context so use 'is increasing'. 'the more parks make a good sense' is ungrammatical — use 'having more parks makes sense' or 'it makes good sense to have more parks'. Suggestion: Ensure noun number matches meaning and use correct verb agreement and natural collocations ('makes sense').

× Yes, definitely. There are couple of parks I will definitely like to go because of their greenery and horticulture focused design because I like surrounding myself with the nature.

✓ Yes, definitely. There are a couple of parks I would definitely like to visit because of their greenery and horticulture-focused design, as I like surrounding myself with nature.

When saying 'couple' you need the article 'a couple'. Use 'would' for conditional/future preference 'I would like to' rather than 'I will like'. Use the verb 'visit' rather than colloquial 'go' for clarity. Compound adjective 'horticulture-focused' should be hyphenated. 'surrounding myself with the nature' is incorrect; say 'surrounding myself with nature' (no article). Suggestion: Use 'a couple', prefer 'would like to visit', hyphenate adjectival phrases, and drop unnecessary articles before 'nature'.