Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb tenses and word forms (e.g., 'loved', 'Parkseter Shades' -> check name, 'learned a lot' -> specify what).

예시: I loved going to Parkseter Shades as a child. For example, I often ran around with my friends and my parents took us for picnics, which helped me become more outgoing and make new friends.

제안: Use correct grammar and clearer linking words. Give a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., 'fresh air', 'feel free' once). Avoid vague phrases like 'when I go to the past' and possessive errors ('everybody's').

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they have fresh air and open space. For example, when I walk in a park I feel relaxed and refreshed, and I often have picnics there with my friends.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific, well-structured reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Fix grammar (e.g., 'nearby' -> 'area', 'comfort place' -> 'comfortable places', 'take a student' -> 'take students'). Avoid filler phrases.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide comfortable places for people to relax and exercise. For instance, more parks would give families and students safe outdoor spaces for picnics and sports.

제안: Give a clear, specific plan or example rather than vague statements. Correct prepositions and nouns (e.g., 'parks in New York', 'different experiences'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' and finish your sentence with a complete idea.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit famous parks in the future, especially parks in New York like Central Park. For example, I want to experience the variety of activities there and meet people from different backgrounds.

× Yes, I love going to Parkseter Shades.

✓ Yes, I loved going to Parkseter Shades.

The examiner asked about childhood (past), so the student should use past tense. Use 'loved' to match the time frame: 'Did you like going to parks as a child?'. Suggestion: use past simple for habits in the past (I loved, I used to).

× I used to run around at the park with my friends and my parents always took me there for picnics and I really enjoyed it because I have learned a lot with my friends and I have made friends with others.

✓ I used to run around in the park with my friends and my parents always took me there for picnics, and I really enjoyed it because I learned a lot with my friends and made new friends.

Multiple issues: preposition 'at the park' should be 'in the park' (correct preposition). Also present perfect 'have learned' and 'have made' are inappropriate for a finished past period; use simple past 'learned' and 'made' to match 'used to' and 'always took'. Combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: keep past simple for past habits and use 'in' for location.

× It's really a good experience for me.

✓ It was really a good experience for me.

Tense mismatch: referring to childhood, use past tense 'was' not 'is'. Also 'a good experience' is fine. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time being discussed.

× Absolutely, yes. I still love going to parks because it's have a fresh air and I really enjoyed it because when I go to the past, I feel free, I feel comfortable and I feel like free.

✓ Absolutely. I still love going to parks because they have fresh air, and I really enjoy it because when I go there I feel free and comfortable.

Several errors: 'it's have a fresh air' incorrect subject-verb and article; 'parks' plural needs 'they have' and 'fresh air' without 'a'. 'I really enjoyed it' should be present 'I really enjoy it' for current habit. 'When I go to the past' is incorrect phrase; use 'when I go there'. 'I feel like free' is incorrect; use 'I feel free'. Suggestion: use consistent present tense for current likes, correct subject-verb agreement, and correct adverbial phrases.

× I love going to park so much because I love to see everybody's.

✓ I love going to the park so much because I love to see everybody.

Missing article 'the' before 'park' and incorrect possessive 'everybody's' used instead of object pronoun 'everybody'. Suggestion: use 'the park' for general preference and 'everybody' as object without apostrophe.

× I love to picnics with my friends.

✓ I love to picnic with my friends.

'Picnic' can be a verb; 'to picnics' is wrong. Use 'to picnic' (infinitive) or 'going on picnics'. Suggestion: choose correct verb form: 'to picnic' or 'to go on picnics'.

× Because if my nearby have a lot of parks, it's mean we have a comfort place to spend and we have a good place to take a student there.

✓ If there were many parks nearby, it would mean we have comfortable places to spend time and good places to take students.

Original begins with 'Because if' creating a fragment and incorrect conditional structure. 'my nearby have' is ungrammatical; use 'there were many parks nearby' or 'parks nearby'. 'It's mean' should be 'it would mean'. 'a comfort place to spend' should be 'comfortable places to spend time'. 'a good place to take a student' should be plural 'places to take students'. Suggestion: use proper conditional form and correct nouns/adjectives.

× And I think it's really have a good thing.

✓ And I think that's really a good thing.

'it's really have a good thing' is ungrammatical; use 'that's really a good thing' or 'it is really good'. Use contraction 'that's' or 'it is' and noun phrase 'a good thing'. Suggestion: use correct linking verb 'is' and noun phrase.

× Yes, of course. But I don't know the name of the parks.

✓ Yes, of course. But I don't know the names of the parks.

Plural noun 'parks' requires plural 'names' when speaker refers to multiple parks. Use 'names' rather than singular. Suggestion: match number between noun and modifier.

× I don't have a specific one, but I want to see, I want to go at another pass, I want to go to the parks head of New York because I think there is a lot of different experience there and meeting each other, meeting a lot of people is really.

✓ I don't have a specific one, but I want to visit other parks; I want to go to the parks in front of New York City because I think there are many different experiences there and meeting lots of people would be great.

Many preposition and phrase errors: 'go at another pass' unclear; use 'visit other parks'. 'go to the parks head of New York' unclear—perhaps 'parks in/near New York City' or 'parks in New York'. 'there is a lot of different experience' should be 'there are many different experiences'. 'meeting each other, meeting a lot of people is really' incomplete; finish idea 'would be great'. Suggestions: use clear prepositions 'to/near/in', plural agreement 'are' with 'experiences', and complete the sentence.