Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 매우 혼란스럽고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 질문에 바로 답하는 주제 문장(예: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child.)을 말한 뒤, linking words(so, because, therefore 등)를 사용해 이유와 구체적 상황을 덧붙이세요. 단어 선택을 정확히 하고 한 문장에서 너무 많은 정보를 넣지 말아야 합니다. 예: 'My family lived in an apartment in Seoul, so parks were the only place I could run freely.'처럼 간결하고 논리적으로 말하세요.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. My family lived in an apartment building in Seoul, so parks were the only places where I could run around freely. I remember playing tag with other kids and enjoying the open space, which felt very special to me.

제안: 답변은 직접적이지만 문법과 문장 연결이 부족합니다. 주제 문장으로 시작한 뒤 이유를 linking words로 연결하고 구체적인 예를 추가하세요. 현재 진행형이나 일반 현재를 적절히 쓰고 어색한 표현(“it helps me to.”)은 완성된 형태로 마무리하세요. 예: 'Parks help me relax after a busy day, especially when I sit and read under a tree.'

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Because I have a busy and often stressful life, parks help me relax and recharge. For example, I sometimes sit on a bench and read a book or take a short walk, which really calms me down.

제안: 의견을 명확히 전달했지만 문법(주어-동사 일치), 지명 표기와 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 'I think'로 시작하고 이유를 연결어로 설명하세요. 구체적인 공원 이름을 정확히 쓰거나 'many parks'처럼 일반화된 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 'enough'를 쓸 때 이유를 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다.

예시: I think there are enough parks in the city. Seoul has many parks where people can sit and rest, such as some large riverside parks and neighborhood green spaces, so most residents already have easy access to them.

제안: 의도는 분명하지만 문법과 표현력에서 개선이 필요합니다. 'I have heard'나 'I've heard that' 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, ‘people freely being raised’는 의미가 불분명하므로 'people enjoying themselves' 등으로 바꾸세요. 또한 이유와 기대를 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

예시: I would like to visit Central Park in New York. I’ve heard it’s a huge green space right in the middle of the city, and I’m curious to see how people relax and enjoy outdoor activities there. I’d love to have a long walk and maybe a picnic while watching street performers and families.

× Who was the child I left to go park with my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I used to go to parks with my parents.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verb forms, making it unintelligible. Use time phrase 'When I was a child' and the habitual past 'used to go' or 'went' to express repeated childhood activity. Also include the plural 'parks' or 'the park' and the preposition 'to'.

× It was my place to be freely running because so all most of the house and Seoul is apartment there no place for children to run.

✓ It was a place where I could run freely because most houses in Seoul are apartments and there was no place for children to run.

The original has incorrect word order and wrong forms: 'freely running' should be 'run freely'; 'all most of the house' should be 'most houses'; verb agreement 'Seoul is apartment' should be 'houses in Seoul are apartments'; add relative clause 'where' and past tense 'was' for childhood context.

× Nowadays I still love to go park.

✓ Nowadays I still love to go to parks.

Missing preposition 'to' and singular/plural choice: 'go to the park' or 'go to parks'. Use plural 'parks' for general preference. Present tense 'love' is correct.

× These days I'm exhausted sometimes and busy life.

✓ These days I'm sometimes exhausted and busy with life.

Word order and missing preposition: place adverb 'sometimes' before adjective; 'busy life' needs 'busy with life' or 'busy with work/school' to be natural.

× Parks make me feel relaxed and it helps me to.

✓ Parks make me feel relaxed and they help me too.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'parks' plural requires 'they help', not 'it helps'. 'to' at the end is unnecessary; use 'too' to mean 'also'.

× I thinks it's enough for now.

✓ I think it's enough for now.

Subject 'I' takes base form 'think', not 'thinks'. Use 'it's' contraction for 'it is' correctly.

× Seoul has many parts such as Song Soo and Purami and Yoito such as sitting so it is enough to place for people to rest.

✓ Seoul has many parks such as Songpa, Purami, and Yeouido, which provide places for people to rest, so it is enough for now.

Several issues: use 'parks' not 'parts'; correct park names (Songpa, Purami, Yeouido likely intended); replace repeated 'such as' and add relative clause 'which provide places'. 'enough to place' is ungrammatical; use 'enough for now'.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to visit in the future?

Original is acceptable but 'visit' is more natural than 'go to' in this question; tense and structure are fine.

× I want to go to Central Park in the US.

✓ I want to go to Central Park in the US.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the future intention; no change needed.

× I listened that park as the biggest area in the middle of the city and also I want to see the people freely being raised.

✓ I heard that the park is a very large area in the middle of the city, and I also want to see people enjoying themselves freely.

Use 'heard' not 'listened' for reported information; add definite article 'the park' and correct verb 'is' for description. 'Being raised' is incorrect in this context; use 'enjoying themselves' or 'playing/freely spending time' to express people freely using the park.