Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly answer the question with past tense, organize ideas into one clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid unrelated information (e.g. pubs). Use linking words like "when" or "because" to connect ideas. Keep it to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. When I was young my mother would pack a picnic with snacks and we would eat popsicles and play games, which made those visits very fun and memorable.

제안: Answer directly and use present simple for current habits. Avoid repetition and combine related ideas with linking words (e.g. "but", "so"). Provide one specific example of recent park activity to enrich the response.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go with my friends now because my sisters live elsewhere, and we often have picnics or play football there on weekends.

제안: Directly state your opinion and give two clear, specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (park, pets, parents) and avoid pronunciation/spelling errors in writing. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to explain consequences.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would provide safe places for parents with young children and for people with pets, so families would not have to let kids or dogs run near busy roads.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence. If you have no specific park in mind, say so briefly, then add a specific preference with reasons. Use correct words (plants, trees) and a linking word such as "but" or "however."

예시: I don't have a particular park in mind, but I prefer parks with a wide variety of plants and trees because I enjoy learning about different species and taking photos of nature.

× Yes, I do love going out at the pub with my friends and then I remember that my mom taking me at the park with a bunch of foods and then so many junk food because obviously we when we were kids, we love eating popsicles, different kind of junk foods.

✓ Yes, I loved going out to the park with my friends, and I remember my mom taking me to the park with lots of food and many kinds of junk food because when we were kids, we loved eating popsicles and different kinds of snacks.

Multiple pronoun and related errors: 'I do love' is present tense while talking about childhood; it should be past 'I loved'. 'Going out at the pub' is irrelevant to parks; changed to 'going out to the park'. 'My mom taking me' lacks correct verb form; use 'my mom taking me' -> 'my mom took me' or restructure: 'I remember my mom taking me' (keeps gerund) but overall past tense consistency requires 'I remember my mom taking me to the park'. Prepositions corrected: 'at the park' -> 'to the park'. 'a bunch of foods' -> 'lots of food'; 'so many junk food' -> 'many kinds of junk food'. 'we when we were kids, we love' -> remove extra 'we' and use past 'we loved'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) for childhood memories, use correct pronouns and plural forms, and choose correct prepositions (to the park, lots of food).

× Yes, I do like going out to park a lot with my friends most of the time.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park a lot with my friends most of the time.

Preposition and article error: 'going out to park' is missing the article 'the' before 'park' and the phrase 'going out to' is redundant. Use 'going to the park' or 'going out to the park'. Also 'I do like' is acceptable for emphasis but simpler 'I like' is natural. Suggestion: include definite article for specific places and simplify auxiliary verbs unless emphasizing.

× I used to go to park with my sisters when we were together.

✓ I used to go to the park with my sisters when we were together.

Missing article before singular countable noun: 'park' requires 'the' when referring to a specific park or habitual visits. Suggestion: use 'the park' for a known place or 'parks' for general visits.

× Now they are not with me. They're at different place.

✓ Now they are not with me. They're in different places.

'At different place' is ungrammatical: use 'in different places' or 'in different cities'. 'Place' should be plural to match 'they', and preposition 'in' is more natural for location. Suggestion: match number and use correct preposition for location.

× So that's why now most of the time I go out at the parks with my friends and most of the time.

✓ So that's why most of the time I go to the park with my friends.

Redundant and incorrect preposition/article: 'go out at the parks' should be 'go to the park' or 'go to parks'. Repetition 'and most of the time' is redundant. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use 'go to the park' for habitual visits, and keep singular/plural consistent.

× I would say yes, because having more pugs in our city is very help helpful for the person who the people who have pads and then kids because running around in A roadside with kids or your pet is kind of danger because obviously.

✓ I would say yes, because having more parks in our city is very helpful for people who have pets and for children, since running around on the roadside with kids or your pet is dangerous.

Multiple errors: 'pugs' should be 'parks' (word choice), 'help helpful' redundant; 'the person who the people who have pads' is confused—should be 'people who have pets'; 'A roadside' wrong article and preposition: use 'on the roadside'; 'kind of danger' -> 'dangerous'. Quantifiers and determiners corrected to plural 'people' and 'children'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns, remove redundancies, and use appropriate prepositions.

× I would say I don't have any kind of specific part that I want to go to in the future, but then I would say I love to go to park where there is different kinds of plans and different kind of trees because I love learning different kinds of plans and everything.

✓ I would say I don't have any specific park that I want to go to in the future, but I would like to go to a park where there are different kinds of plants and different kinds of trees because I love learning about different plants and everything related to them.

Several article, spelling, and agreement errors: 'any kind of specific part' -> 'any specific park'; 'go to park' needs an article 'a park' or 'the park'; 'there is different kinds' should be 'there are different kinds' to agree with plural 'kinds'; 'plans' is wrong word, should be 'plants'; repeated 'different kind' -> 'different kinds'. Also 'learning different kinds of plans' corrected to 'learning about different plants'. Suggestion: ensure correct nouns (plants vs plans), match singular/plural with verbs, and use appropriate articles ('a park', 'the park').