Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more precise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and time expressions, and avoid unclear phrases like "for a week" if you mean regularly. Use a linking word to add one supporting detail. Also correct grammar: "sometimes I rode bicycles" or "I sometimes rode my bicycle in the evenings."

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often visited the park every weekend and sometimes rode my bicycle there in the evenings to play with friends.

제안: Make your time reference and grammar accurate and give a specific reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct phrases like "it's make up my mind." Say "it helps me relax and clear my mind." Keep to 1–3 supporting sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Since I became a teenager, I usually visit them at weekends because they help me relax and clear my mind after a busy week.

제안: Use correct grammar (plural/singular agreement) and more precise vocabulary. Replace "unwinced" with "relaxed" or "refreshed." Provide one clear reason with a linking word such as "because" and avoid redundant phrases. Example: "Yes, because parks offer green space for people of all ages to relax and recharge."

예시: Yes, I would. Parks provide green space for people of all ages, and they offer a peaceful place to relax and feel refreshed after a long day of work or study.

제안: Clarify facts and use accurate vocabulary. Disneyland is an amusement park, not a national park; correct country names and avoid confusing lists. Give a clear reason why you want to visit and one specific detail. Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Disneyland in the future. It is a large theme park popular in several countries, and I especially want to go because I enjoy the shows, Disney characters, and the princess-themed attractions.

× When I was a kid I used to go to the park for a week and sometime I ride bicycles in the evening.

✓ When I was a kid I used to go to the park every week and sometimes I rode bicycles in the evening.

Mixed past tense forms: 'used to' indicates habitual past, so the second clause should also be past. 'Sometime' (adverb) is incorrect here; use 'sometimes'. Use past tense 'rode' to match 'used to'. Also 'for a week' is unclear; 'every week' fits habitual meaning better.

× Yes I do, when I become a teenager I usually go to the park at the weekends to relax and it's make up my mind.

✓ Yes I do; when I became a teenager I usually went to the park at the weekends to relax and it helped me make up my mind.

Tense inconsistency: the question asks about now, but the clause describes past teen years — use past tense 'became' and 'went'. 'It's make up my mind' is ungrammatical: use 'it helped me make up my mind' to express that going to the park aided decision-making in the past.

× Yes, I would like because parks is a place for people from every age to go there for relax and they can feel unwinced after a long day for work and for their study.

✓ Yes, I would like more parks because parks are places for people of every age to go to relax and they can feel unworried after a long day of work or study.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'parks' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. 'A place' should match plural 'parks' — 'places'. Preposition corrections: 'people from every age' -> 'people of every age'; 'go there for relax' -> 'go to relax'; 'after a long day for work and for their study' -> 'after a long day of work or study'. 'Unwinced' is incorrect word choice; 'unworried' or 'relaxed' is appropriate.

× I love to go to Disneyland. It is a National Park. That's just how in Chinese, China, Japan, Hong Kong and USSA, and it's a really big park for girls who love Princess. So I would like to go to.

✓ I would love to go to Disneyland. It is a theme park. There are Disneyland parks in China, Japan, Hong Kong and the USA, and it's a really big park for girls who love princesses. So I would like to go.

Multiple issues: 'I love to go' -> 'I would love to go' fits future/conditional desire. 'It is a National Park' is incorrect classification; Disneyland is a theme park. List of places needs articles and correct country names: 'China, Japan, Hong Kong and the USA'. Plural 'princesses' needed. Trailing 'to' is unnecessary; complete sentence with 'go'. 'USSA' is incorrect; use 'USA'.