Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific details using linking words. Reduce repetition and correct basic grammar (use past tense for childhood).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go with my parents every weekend, where I would play cricket and other ball games with many other children. Those visits were fun and helped me stay active.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about the present habit, then add specific reasons and link them logically. Use correct verb tenses and fewer fillers. Mention an example to support your point.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, last Sunday I went with a friend because I was stressed, and walking there really relaxed me. Parks are pleasant and people often jog or run, which makes the atmosphere lively.

제안: Answer directly then give 2 clear reasons with examples. Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) and correct word order. Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because currently there is only one park and it is far from many neighborhoods. For example, if there were four or five parks in different areas, people could visit easily and children would have safe places to play.

제안: Be specific about the park and give a clear plan or reason. Use correct future tense and avoid repetition. Provide one or two concrete details about what attracts you there.

예시: Yes, I plan to visit a large park in Islamabad next month. It has several swimming pools, wide green areas and recreational facilities, so I want to go there to relax and try the pools.

× Yes, I like park so I'm child so I'm going parks with parents.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child, so I used to go to parks with my parents.

The original mixes present and past incorrectly and has sentence structure errors. Use past tense 'liked' and 'was a child', and 'used to go' to indicate habitual past action. Add articles 'the' or 'my' and plural 'parks' correctly.

× So they are there are a lot of so sports, sports so Suns are a lot of children who play to put balls other games cricket so so I'm sure so I'm every weekends I'm going to park so.

✓ There were a lot of sports and many children playing games such as cricket and football, so I used to go to the park every weekend.

This sentence has word choice and structure errors. Use 'There were' for past existence, 'a lot of' correctly, and list examples with 'such as'. Use 'used to' for habitual past and 'every weekend' (no 's'). Remove filler words.

× Yeah, I'm also going to the parcel.

✓ Yes, I still go to the park.

'Parcel' is incorrect word choice. For a habitual present action use simple present 'I still go'. 'Park' needs article 'the' only when referring to a specific park; 'the park' or just 'parks' depending on context.

× So, uh, last Sunday I'm going to park with prinzone because I'm very stride and very stressed.

✓ Last Sunday I went to the park with my friend because I was very tired and stressed.

For a past event use simple past 'went' and 'was'. Correct nouns: 'friend' not 'prinzone'; 'tired' not 'stride'. Include articles 'the' and possessive 'my' as needed.

× So I'm sometimes spend the park.

✓ Sometimes I spend time in the park.

Use 'spend time' collocation and preposition 'in' for location. Place adverb 'sometimes' before the verb phrase for natural word order.

× So because they relax me and they, uh, environment is too much good.

✓ Because it relaxes me and the environment is very pleasant.

Use singular 'it relaxes me' when referring to 'the park'. 'Environment' needs the definite article 'the' and 'very pleasant' is natural; avoid 'too much good'.

× So some people are coming to the parks and, uh, activities, for example, jogging, uh, running.

✓ Many people come to the parks and do activities such as jogging and running.

Use simple present 'come' for habitual actions, and 'do activities such as' to introduce examples. Remove progressive 'are coming' unless describing right now.

× Yes, so I like to more park in my city zone because my city is in only one park, so in this is very too much distance.

✓ Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there is only one park and it is far away.

Use 'would like' for preference. 'There is only one park' uses 'there is' correctly. 'Far away' expresses distance; avoid 'very too much distance'.

× So I'm going to the bikes with Prenzo.

✓ So I go there by bike with my friend.

Use 'go by bike' for travel mode and 'my friend' for clarity. 'I'm going' suggests present progressive; simple present 'I go' for habitual, or past 'I went' if describing a specific trip. Ensure pronouns are clear.

× So I say why? So my opinion. So there are new parks.

✓ In my opinion, there should be more new parks built.

Express opinion with 'In my opinion,' and use modal 'should' to suggest improvement. Original fragmentary sentences need combining into a full sentence.

× So, uh, granary, so every every cities, uh, I think there are four to five parks is a very common so.

✓ In most cities, I think having four or five parks is common.

Use 'in most cities' and make 'four or five parks' plural. Use 'is common' to describe the idea. Remove repeated words and filler.

× Yes, so I, I think so I'm going to Islamabad. There are one park.

✓ Yes, I think I will go to Islamabad. There is a large park there.

For future plans use 'I will go' or 'I'm going to go'. Use 'There is' for singular existence and add 'a' or 'the' as needed. Clarify 'large park'.

× So if 9 parks, there are large park in my country.

✓ There are nine large parks in my country.

Spell out numbers under ten in formal speech and use correct word order: 'There are nine large parks'. Use plural 'parks' and adjective order 'large parks'.

× There are large of Draco. There are a lot of swimming pools also I'm going so I, uh, if nine parts.

✓ They have many attractions, including large lakes and many swimming pools, and I plan to go there if the nine parks are near.

Original has unclear nouns ('Draco') and wrong structures. Use 'many' for quantifiers, 'including' to list attractions, and clarify conditions with 'if'. Ensure articles and plural forms are correct.

× So I think the next month or yeah, next to month, I'm going to this park because this is very good and very good.

✓ I think next month I will go to this park because it is very nice.

Use 'next month' without 'the' or 'to'. Use future 'I will go' for planned action. Avoid repetition 'very good and very good' and use 'very nice' or another adjective. Ensure concise sentence structure.