Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và phát âm, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh từ không phù hợp (ví dụ: “pars”, “weapon”, “print across”). Nên nói: nêu ý chính ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ các hoạt động, thời điểm). Sử dụng liên từ như “because” hoặc “for example” đúng ngữ cảnh. Hãy giữ câu không quá dài (không quá 5 câu).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were spacious and safe. For example, I often played on the swings and played football with my friends on weekends.

제안: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và dùng thì đúng (hiện tại đơn/thói quen). Tránh lặp từ và từ không chính xác (ví dụ: “gladly to park”, “require in after the trust”). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes, I still enjoy...) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn lợi ích cụ thể (sức khỏe, thư giãn) và khi nào bạn đi.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me stay fit and relax. I usually go for a walk or jog in the park every weekend to clear my mind and get some exercise.

제안: Cần trả lời rõ ràng theo câu hỏi: bày tỏ ý kiến về việc muốn nhiều công viên hơn hay không, rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể. Sửa trật tự từ và dùng tính từ phù hợp (ví dụ: “more green spaces”, “more flowers”, “pleasant atmosphere”). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và mạch lạc, dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they create pleasant green spaces. For example, more parks with flowers and trees would make the area more attractive and improve residents' well-being.

제안: Cần dùng thì và ngữ pháp phù hợp khi nói về kế hoạch tương lai (will / going to / present continuous). Nói rõ tên hoặc loại công viên, mô tả cụ thể (ví dụ: số km đường mòn, cảnh đẹp) và kế hoạch cụ thể (thời gian, ai đi, hoạt động). Tránh lặp từ (“visit and visit”).

예시: Yes, I am planning to visit a nearby national park next spring because it looks very beautiful and offers several hiking trails. I will go with some friends so we can hike, take photos and enjoy the scenery.

× Yes, I like going to pars when I work with you because they are weapon and there's a lot of space to print across.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because they were lovely and there was a lot of space to run around.

The sentence contains adjective misuse ('weapon' and 'print across') and tense/structure problems. Use 'liked' for past preference and 'was' for past time frame. 'Parks' plural is correct; replace 'weapon' with 'lovely' and 'print across' with 'run around' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives and common verbs for movement (run, walk).

× For example, I used to play on screen and play football with my friends on a weekend.

✓ For example, I used to play on the swings and play football with my friends on weekends.

The phrase 'play on screen' is incorrect; likely meant 'play on the swings' or similar. 'Used to' requires base verbs. Also 'on a weekend' is better as 'on weekends' for habitual past actions. Suggestion: use correct noun for playground equipment and pluralize 'weekend' for repeated actions.

× Yes, I too gladly to park right now because it's it's good going to park help me improve the health and require in after the trust on a weekend.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because they help me improve my health and relax on weekends.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'too gladly to park' is ungrammatical; 'still like' fits present preference. Use plural 'parks' and verb 'help' for present plural subject. 'Improve my health' uses possessive; 'relax on weekends' expresses benefit. Suggestion: simplify to subject + present verb + object and use common collocations ('improve my health', 'relax').

× Yes I love I like Piccadilly more, park in my city meaningful, more plain, more flower and that have a beautiful atmosphere.

✓ Yes, I like Piccadilly Park the most in my city; it is more peaceful, has more flowers, and has a beautiful atmosphere.

Sentence has repetition ('I love I like'), incorrect word order and wrong adjective forms ('plain' instead of 'peaceful', 'more flower'). Use superlative 'the most' for preference. Use 'has' for possession and correct adjectives. Suggestion: avoid repetition and structure list with commas and parallel forms ('is ..., has ..., has ...').

× Well yes, I want to go to a peak National Park near my city because it look very beautiful and has 9 hiking travel.

✓ Well, yes, I want to go to a nearby national park because it looks very beautiful and has nine hiking trails.

Errors: 'a peak National Park' is odd—use 'nearby national park'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it looks' not 'it look'. '9 hiking travel' is incorrect; use 'nine hiking trails'. Suggestion: ensure correct subject-verb agreement and use count nouns with appropriate nouns ('trails' for hikes).

× For example I plan to visit and visit next spring with some friends so we can walk and take photo.

✓ For example, I plan to visit next spring with some friends so we can walk and take photos.

Redundant 'visit and visit' should be a single 'visit'. Use future plan 'plan to visit' is correct; 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure plural form for countable nouns when appropriate.