Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/agreement. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were great places to play freely. For example, I used to play football and climbing games with my friends every weekend, which helped me stay active and make close friends.

제안: Organise your answer: give a clear main idea then one or two concise reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words. Use specific vocabulary (e.g., "take a walk", "green space").

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, mainly to take walks and relax. For instance, I often walk there to enjoy the greenery and watch children playing, which lifts my mood after a busy day.

제안: Answer directly then support with a specific reason and one concrete example. Fix grammar (plural/singular) and avoid vague phrases like "quite good"—use stronger adjectives. Use a linking word such as "because".

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide places to relax. For example, if there were a new park near my home, I could visit more often after work and use it for short walks and reading outdoors.

제안: Be specific about which park or country and why; organise answer with a topic sentence and one detailed reason/example. Use correct phrasing ("I want to visit parks abroad to observe local recreational culture").

예시: Yes, I would like to visit parks abroad, especially in Spain, to observe how people use outdoor spaces. For example, I would like to see local children playing football and families gathering for picnics, which would show me cultural differences in leisure activities.

× Everybody like I like to go to park when he was a child in my opinion, because it was quite cool.

✓ Everybody liked going to the park when they were children, in my opinion, because it was quite cool.

Subject and verb must agree: 'Everybody' is singular but commonly followed by singular verb; however the sentence describes past habitual action, so use past tense 'liked' and gerund 'going'. Use 'the park' or 'parks' and plural or gender-neutral pronoun 'they' to agree with 'everybody'. Also change 'he was a child' to 'they were children' for number and neutrality.

× So if you look at back, you could play as much as you want with people with child and I think it's good you were outside.

✓ If you look back, you could play as much as you wanted with other children, and I think it was good that you were outside.

Use 'look back' not 'look at back'. Temporal context is past so use 'wanted' and 'was'. 'People with child' is incorrect; use 'other children'. Add 'that' to introduce the clause 'you were outside' and match past tense.

× So it's win, win forever.

✓ So it was a win-win situation.

Informal repeated phrase 'win, win forever' is ungrammatical. Use noun phrase 'a win-win situation' and match past tense 'was' to context.

× Yeah, but sadly I, uh, grew up so, uh, I don't play there anymore, but for a walk, uh, it's, it's very good.

✓ Yeah, but sadly I grew up, so I don't play there anymore; however, it's very nice for a walk.

Mixing past 'grew up' with present 'don't play' is acceptable, but remove filler 'uh' and use punctuation. 'Very good' better as 'very nice' and 'for a walk' should be integrated: 'it's very nice for a walk.'

× And although I don't have a, a dog, but I still love to go there because the nature, the kids are playing.

✓ Although I don't have a dog, I still love to go there because of the nature and because I can see kids playing.

Do not use both 'although' and 'but' together. Articles: remove extra 'a'. 'Because the nature' is incorrect; say 'because of the nature' or 'because of nature'. Clarify clause order and use 'kids playing' with 'see' to make sense.

× It's good to see that it makes me happy.

✓ It's good to see that it makes me happy.

Sentence is grammatical; no change needed. (No error from the provided list.)

× So yeah, sadly I don't have enough time to go and visit all of the park in my city, but in my district I saw all of them and umm, I really enjoy time to being there.

✓ I don't have enough time to visit all of the parks in my city, but in my district I have seen all of them, and I really enjoy being there.

Use plural 'parks' and say 'visit all of the parks'. 'Saw' should be present perfect 'have seen' for experience up to now. 'Enjoy time to being there' is ungrammatical; use 'enjoy being there.'

× It makes me happy and I can relax and I love to be surrounded by nature, so it's quite good in my opinion.

✓ It makes me happy, I can relax, and I love being surrounded by nature, so it's quite nice in my opinion.

Change 'to be surrounded' to gerund 'being surrounded' for natural phrasing. 'Quite good' better as 'quite nice.' Add commas for clarity.

× But I don't want to go here in my country.

✓ But I don't want to go to parks in my own country.

'Go here in my country' is unclear and ungrammatical. Specify 'go to parks in my own country.' Use 'own' for emphasis and correct preposition 'to' for destination.

× I want to visit more countries and there because I want to see the culture and how the people are playing that.

✓ I want to visit parks in other countries because I want to see their cultures and how people play there.

Avoid 'and there' after 'countries'; restructure to 'parks in other countries.' Use plural 'cultures' if referring to multiple countries, and place adverb 'there' correctly. 'How the people are playing that' is ungrammatical; use 'how people play there.'

× For example, in Spain, I'm pretty sure that the kids are playing football there and volleyball and basketball, and I would like to see that.

✓ For example, in Spain I'm pretty sure that kids play football, volleyball, and basketball there, and I would like to see that.

Use simple present 'play' for habitual actions. Remove 'the' before 'kids' unless referring to specific kids. Place 'there' at end for clarity and list sports with commas.