Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition and grammar errors, and add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Keep answers concise (maximum 5 sentences). For example, use past tense verbs (liked, went), remove repeated phrases, and give a concrete memory or specific ride to make the answer vivid.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed the carousel and swings because they felt exciting and safe. My cousins and I would spend entire afternoons there, and the calm green space was a peaceful place for our family to relax.

제안: Use present tense consistently and reduce hesitation. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., "release my address") with accurate expressions like "reduce stress". Organize answer: state topic sentence, then give linked reasons and specific activities. Limit filler words and keep it to 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit them to reduce stress from my heavy workload, and I often do morning exercises and yoga there. The fresh air and open space help me feel refreshed for the day.

제안: Make a clear, direct statement and support it with specific reasons and a comparison. Correct grammar (e.g., "fewer parks", "overcrowded", "not enough seating"). Use a linking word such as "because" or "therefore" to connect ideas and keep it brief and precise.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are fewer parks than in similar cities. As a result, existing parks are often overcrowded and lack enough seating and quiet areas for people to relax.

제안: Answer directly and provide one or two specific reasons or activities you expect to do there. Avoid repetition and filler. Use comparative language correctly ("bigger than our city's park") and give a concise picture of what attracts you to that park (e.g., playgrounds, walking trails, picnic areas).

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a large park in Lahore because it has extensive playgrounds and walking trails that we don't have here. I imagine going there with my family for a picnic and for the kids to play while adults exercise or relax.

× Yes, of course I like to go parks as a child because every child, every child dreams for the best rides and the view of the park is much more beautiful and calm.

✓ Yes, of course I liked going to parks as a child because every child dreams of the best rides and the view of the park was much more beautiful and calm.

The speaker is referring to childhood (past), so present tense 'like' should be past 'liked' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also 'go parks' is missing the preposition/to or plural form; the correct phrase is 'going to parks' or 'going to the park(s)' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Dreams for' is incorrect collocation; use 'dreams of' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Ensure tense consistency: past tense for events in childhood.

× Calmness is everywhere and that's the reason we going to park and play with my cousins, aunt, family.

✓ Calmness was everywhere and that's the reason we went to the park and played with my cousins, aunt and family.

The sentence refers to past events, so verbs should be past tense: 'going' should be 'went' and 'play' should be 'played' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also plural coordination needs 'and' between items and articles: 'the park' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Pronoun 'we' with 'my cousins, aunt, family' is fine, but add 'and' and 'the' for clarity.

× Yes, of course I go. I still like going to park because as compared to my daily routine, I have much more, uh, load, uh, workload and uh, I will go park to release my address and mentally pressure.

✓ Yes, of course I do. I still like going to the park because compared to my daily routine I have a much heavier workload and I go to the park to relieve my stress and mental pressure.

Use auxiliary 'do' for short answers in present simple: 'I do' instead of 'I go' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Going to park' needs article 'the' (Grammar Problem Type 22). 'Much more load, workload' is ungrammatical; use 'a much heavier workload' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 14). 'Release my address' is wrong collocation; correct is 'relieve my stress' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× So I will go bath and do some fitness exercise at the morning and uh, do some yoga as well.

✓ So I will take a bath and do some fitness exercises in the morning and also do some yoga.

'Go bath' is incorrect; use 'take a bath' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Do some fitness exercise' should be plural 'exercises' or 'exercise' with no 'some' depending on context (Grammar Problem Type 14). Use 'in the morning' not 'at the morning' (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× Yes, of course as compared to the population of the city, the parks are more lesson as compared to the other cities and the and whenever we go to park there, it is much crowded and there is no space of sitting, sitting calm down there.

✓ Yes, of course, compared to the population of the city, there are fewer parks than in other cities, and whenever we go to a park there, it is very crowded and there is no space to sit and relax.

'More lesson' is incorrect; use 'fewer' for countable nouns like 'parks' (Grammar Problem Type 14). Word order: 'compared to' is enough once. 'Go to park there' needs article 'a park' (Grammar Problem Type 22). 'No space of sitting' is unnatural; use 'no space to sit and relax' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 26).

× So it there is much lesser quantity of parks as compared to the other cities.

✓ So there is a much smaller number of parks compared to other cities.

'Much lesser quantity' is unidiomatic; use 'a much smaller number' or 'far fewer' for countable nouns (Grammar Problem Type 14). Keep present simple 'there is' is fine, but rephrase for naturalness (Grammar Problem Type 6).

× Yes, I've, I, yes, of course I would like to go to the park which is located in Lahore.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to go to the park that is located in Lahore.

Use 'that' or 'which' can be acceptable, but in defining clauses 'that' is preferable in informal speech. The sentence is fine tense-wise; remove stuttering. 'Would like to' is correct modal usage (Grammar Problem Type 4).

× It is much bigger park as compared to the park in our city and the climate and the atmosphere there is much more attractive for the kids and uh, the people come there for some exercise and enjoyment.

✓ It is a much bigger park compared to the park in our city, and the climate and the atmosphere there are much more attractive for children; people come there for exercise and enjoyment.

Add article 'a' before 'much bigger park' (Grammar Problem Type 22). Subject-verb agreement: 'climate and atmosphere' is plural so use 'are' (Grammar Problem Type 27). 'Kids' is informal; 'children' is more appropriate in formal speech (Grammar Problem Type 13).

× Some of the families come there for picnics, picnic.

✓ Some families go there for picnics.

Redundant repetition 'picnics, picnic' should be singular/plural consistent; use 'picnics' (Grammar Problem Type 14). 'Some families go there' is more natural than 'come there' depending on speaker perspective.