Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は肯定している点は良いですが、文法と語順の誤り、あいまいな表現が目立ちます。具体的にどんな遊びやスポーツをしたのかを付け加え、過去形の正しい使い方（I played）や自然な語順に直してください。また回答は最大5文までで簡潔にまとめ、接続詞（for example, such as）を使って詳述すると良いです。

예시: Yes, I did. I often went to the park near my house and played football and tag with my friends. For example, we used to meet every weekend and play until sunset, which was great fun.

제안: 答えは肯定的ですが、繰り返しや不要な言いよどみ（uh）や不明瞭な略語（my G）があり、冗長です。明確な主文を一つ置き、必要なら具体的な理由（exercise, relax, spend time with my girlfriend）を付け加えてください。接続詞（because, and）で理由をつなぐと自然です。

예시: Yes, I do. I often go to the park with my girlfriend because we enjoy walking and relaxing there. We usually sit by the pond and talk, which helps us unwind after work.

제안: 質問の意図（街にもっと公園が欲しいか）に直接答えていません。話題が都市の観光や東京に逸れているため焦点がずれています。まず「Yes/No」で直接答え、その理由（need more green spaces, improve air quality）を具体的に述べてください。比較や具体例（playgrounds, jogging paths）を入れると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I would. I think my city needs more parks because green spaces improve air quality and provide places for families to relax. For example, small playgrounds and jogging paths would be very helpful for local residents.

제안: 答えは意欲を示していますが、公園の名前（spread park）が不明確で、繰り返しや曖昧な表現（probably it is the magnificent sightseeing）があります。具体的な公園名や特徴（mountain views, botanical gardens）を明確に述べ、理由や期待するアクティビティを付け加えてください。接続詞で流れを整理すると効果的です。

예시: In the future, I would like to visit Shinjuku Gyoen, a large park famous for its gardens and cherry blossoms. I want to walk through the botanical gardens and take photographs because the scenery looks beautiful in spring.

× When I was a child I was playing in many sports with my friend.

✓ When I was a child I played many sports with my friend.

The progressive past 'was playing' implies an ongoing action at a specific time; for habitual or repeated activities in the past, use the simple past 'played'. Use 'play sports' rather than 'play in sports'. Use plural 'friend' may be singular if one friend; original used 'my friend' which is fine.

× Yes I do. I still like going to the park with my G, my girlfriend right now, uh, I like to go, uh, parks a lot. I also like to go.

✓ Yes, I do. I still like going to the park with my girlfriend right now. I like going to parks a lot.

Use simple present 'I like' for general preferences. Remove filler 'uh' and clarify 'my G' to 'my girlfriend'. Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally. Combine sentences to avoid repetition and ensure correct article use 'the park' for a specific park and 'parks' for general plural.

× Yes, I would like to see the cities. I like to the city S sightseeing and my favorite place is the Tokyo city. A lot of building is beautiful.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city. I like sightseeing in the city, and my favorite place is Tokyo. Many buildings are beautiful.

Mismatch between singular/plural and incorrect nouns: 'see the cities' doesn't fit the question about parks; changed to 'see more parks in the city'. Use 'sightseeing' after 'like' as a gerund phrase: 'like sightseeing in the city'. 'Tokyo' does not need 'city' after it. Use plural 'buildings' with 'many' and plural verb 'are'.

× In the future, I want to go the spread park and uh, probably it is the magnificent sightseeing to go there. I would like to go there, go there.

✓ In the future, I want to go to the Spread Park. It will probably be a magnificent sight to see. I would like to go there.

Include preposition 'to' after 'go'. Proper nouns like 'Spread Park' should be capitalized and treated as a single name. 'Magnificent sightseeing' is unnatural; use 'a magnificent sight' or 'a magnificent place' and 'sight to see'. Remove repeated fragments and filler words. Use future intention with 'want to' or 'would like to' correctly.