Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid listing verbs without connectors and correct verb tenses and plurality.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I enjoyed exploring nature and walking along the trails, and I often took pictures of flowers and birds to remember the visits.

제안: Use correct articles and natural phrasing, include a brief reason or example to enrich the answer, and keep it within a couple of sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now, especially with my wife and friends. For example, we often go for an evening walk together because it helps us relax and catch up.

제안: Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and improve coherence. Provide a clear reason and specific activities you would do, using linking words. Avoid trailing off and finish the sentence.

예시: Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because they offer new places to visit. For instance, my family could go on picnics and enjoy leisurely strolls, which would help us bond more often.

제안: Make the sentence more natural and specific: mention a country or type of park and give a short reason. Use correct prepositions and plural forms, and add linking words if needed.

예시: Yes, I'm planning to visit national parks in another country, such as those in New Zealand, to make new memories and meet people from different cultures while hiking and sightseeing.

× Yes, I like exploring, walking, sightseeing, take a nice pictures.

✓ Yes, I liked exploring, walking, and sightseeing, and taking nice pictures.

Issues: 5 Past tense issue (the question asked about childhood so use past tense 'liked'); 8 Verb + -ing form (use 'taking' not 'take'); 1 Singular and plural issue ('pictures' is fine with 'nice' so remove 'a'). Suggestion: Use past tense for habits in childhood and use gerunds for activities when listing them; ensure articles agree with count nouns.

× Yes, I still like going to park now with my family, friends and also my wife.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now with my family, friends, and my wife.

Issues: 11 Incorrect use of prepositions/articles ('going to park' should be 'going to parks' or 'going to the park'); 1 Singular and plural issue (use plural 'parks' if speaking generally); 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (comma and conjunction use for list). Suggestion: For habitual current activities use present tense 'still like' and use plural when referring to parks in general; add commas in lists.

× Yes, I would love to see more park in our city to visit a new parks and bonding with my family do picnic, strolling and.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in our city so we can visit new parks and bond with my family, have picnics, and go for strolls.

Issues: 22 Article errors/1 Singular and plural issue ('more park' should be 'more parks'); 26 Sentence structure errors (run-on and incomplete list 'and.'); 8 Verb + -ing form and 6 Present tense issue ('bonding' should be 'bond' in infinitive or base form after 'can'); also 'do picnic' is incorrect—use 'have picnics'. Suggestion: Use 'more parks', keep parallel structure in lists (have picnics, go for strolls), and complete the sentence with clear conjunctions.

× Yes, I'm planning to go in the future to the other country parks and make new memories and meet the other people.

✓ Yes, I'm planning to go in the future to parks in other countries, make new memories, and meet new people.

Issues: 7 Future tense issue/6 Present tense issue (use 'I'm planning' is fine but word order awkward); 11 Incorrect use of prepositions ('to the other country parks' should be 'to parks in other countries'); 12 Incorrect use of pronouns/phrases ('the other people' unnatural — use 'new people' or 'other people'). Suggestion: Use natural word order 'parks in other countries', keep parallel verbs in the list, and use 'new people' for meeting people you don't know.