Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Correct grammar and use natural phrasing; keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid plural errors and verb tense mismatches (e.g., "enjoy" -> "enjoyed", "families" -> "family", "brush fresh air" -> "breathe fresh air").

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to the park with my family as a child because it helped me relax and breathe fresh air. For example, we often had picnics and played games together, which made those afternoons fun and memorable.

제안: Improve grammar, verb forms and sentence clarity; use linking words for coherence. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear supporting details. Fix errors: "prefer go to alone" -> "prefer to go alone", remove repetition, and correct tense: "helped" -> "helps". Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "unwind" instead of "unveiled").

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park after work; I prefer to go alone. I usually sit on a bench and watch people pass by, which helps me relax and unwind after a long day.

제안: Good content and structure; make sentences more natural and concise and add a linking phrase. Use precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy ("relax" and "reduce stress" overlap).

예시: Yes, definitely. I would like more parks in my city because they offer public spaces for exercise and relaxation, which can reduce stress. For example, Central Park in New York is an excellent model of a large, accessible urban park.

제안: Fix article and phrasing errors and tighten sentences. Use a clear topic sentence then one specific reason with linking word. Correct articles: "the Hyde Park" -> "Hyde Park" and "go visit" -> "visit"; remove extra words at sentence end.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Hyde Park in London because I have seen beautiful photos of it and several colleagues recommended it. It seems like a peaceful place to walk and relax, so I hope to go there on my next visit.

× Yes, when I was a child I really enjoy going to the park with my families because it helps me relax and brush fresh air.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really enjoyed going to the park with my family because it helped me relax and breathe fresh air.

Tense mismatch and word choice: 'when I was a child' sets past context so verbs should be past tense ('enjoy' -> 'enjoyed', 'helps' -> 'helped'). 'Families' is incorrect because 'family' as a unit is singular here. 'Brush fresh air' is incorrect collocation; correct verb is 'breathe'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use correct nouns and verbs: 'enjoyed', 'family', 'breathe'.

× For example, we often had picnics, played games together and chat with each other, which made those things fun and memorable.

✓ For example, we often had picnics, played games together and chatted with each other, which made those times fun and memorable.

Parallel tense and word choice: list uses past tense 'had' and 'played' so 'chat' should be past form 'chatted' (or 'were chatting'). Also 'those things' is vague; 'those times' or 'those days' is more natural. Suggestion: maintain past tense for parallel verbs and choose precise noun: 'chatted' and 'those times'.

× Yes, I still like going to the park after work. I prefer go to alone, sit there on the bench, on a bench and watch the people and pass by, which helped me relax and unveiled after a long day.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park after work. I prefer to go alone, sit on a bench and watch the people pass by, which helps me relax and unwind after a long day.

Infinitive and tense errors: 'prefer go to' needs infinitive 'prefer to go'. 'sit there on the bench, on a bench' is redundant; use 'sit on a bench'. 'watch the people and pass by' should be 'watch the people pass by' (people is subject of pass). 'which helped me relax and unveiled' mixes past and wrong verb; keep present 'helps' and use correct verb 'unwind' not 'unveiled'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to + base verb', avoid redundancy, use correct verbs 'pass by' and 'unwind', keep consistent present tense for habitual actions.'},{

× Yes, I would like to go visit the Hyde Park in London because I saw some beautiful photos of it online and several colleagues recommend it.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Hyde Park in London because I saw some beautiful photos of it online and several colleagues recommended it.

Article and tense issues: 'the Hyde Park' is incorrect; proper noun is 'Hyde Park' without 'the'. 'go visit' is wordy; use 'visit'. 'colleagues recommend' should be past 'recommended' to match 'I saw' or use present if describing ongoing recommendation. Suggestion: remove unnecessary article, use 'visit', and make tenses consistent ('recommended').

× It looks like a peaceful place to walk and relax, so I hope to go to there next time I visit the.

✓ It looks like a peaceful place to walk and relax, so I hope to go there next time I visit.

Extra words and incomplete clause: 'go to there' is incorrect; use 'go there'. Ending 'visit the.' is incomplete and has an extra definite article. Suggestion: remove the extra 'to' and the stray 'the' to form a complete sentence.