Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the sentence grammatically correct, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence and add one supporting detail. Use correct tense and articles, and avoid capitalisation errors.

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. I enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the trees, which made my childhood afternoons fun and active.

제안: Organise the answer into a clear topic sentence plus one or two linked supporting details. Use linking words and correct sentence structure; avoid repetition and misplaced punctuation.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I often exercise there. For example, I like running on the paths and doing bodyweight workouts, so parks are convenient and peaceful for my routine.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then one specific reason with a linking word. Use singular/plural and collocations correctly (e.g., "modern cities" not "modern worlds") and avoid repeating the same word.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green spaces for relaxation. For instance, parks reduce stress and offer places for families to meet, which improves urban life.

제안: Answer clearly with a topic sentence and a concise supporting detail about why you want to go. Avoid repeating the same phrase and keep it to two sentences max.

예시: I would like to visit the Disneyland parks in the future because it's been my childhood dream. I am excited about the themed attractions and parades, which I think would be a memorable experience.

× Yes, when I was child I really liked Go to the parks.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really liked going to the parks.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'child' (singular/plural and article). Also 'Go to' is incorrect form after 'liked' — use the gerund 'going' to express enjoyment of an activity. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'child' and change 'Go to' to 'going'.

× Yes, when I was child I really liked Go to the parks.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really liked going to the parks.

After verbs of liking (liked), use the verb+ing form (gerund). 'Go to' is base form and does not follow 'liked'. Use 'going' to form 'liked going'.

× Yes, because I do sports in parks for example and I really like running and I can easily run in. Parks.

✓ Yes, because I do sports in parks, for example, and I really like running and I can easily run in parks.

The sentence has incorrect punctuation and an unnecessary period before 'Parks'. Also 'parks' can be used without an article when speaking generally, so no article change is required. Remove the stray period and add commas. Suggestion: remove the period and keep 'parks' lowercase and part of the sentence.

× Yes, because I do sports in parks for example and I really like running and I can easily run in. Parks.

✓ Yes, because I do sports in parks, for example, and I really like running, so I can run easily in parks.

The original has fragmented structure and awkward ordering ('I can easily run in. Parks.'). Reorganize clauses and use 'so' to connect reason and result. Place adverb 'easily' after the verb for natural adverb placement.

× Yes, because in modern worlds, parks are very important for humanity because people want to rest in these areas.

✓ Yes, because in the modern world, parks are very important for humanity because people want to rest in these areas.

'Worlds' should be singular 'world' when speaking generally; include the definite article 'the' before 'modern world' to refer to the current global situation. Suggestion: use 'the modern world' instead of 'modern worlds'.

× Yes, because in modern worlds, parks are very important for humanity because people want to rest in these areas.

✓ Yes, because in the modern world, parks are very important for people because they want to rest in these areas.

Using 'humanity' is not incorrect but 'people' with pronoun 'they' is clearer and more natural in spoken English. Ensure pronoun 'they' clearly refers to 'people'.

× I want to go to the Disneyland parks and this is my childhood dream and one day I really want to go to Disneyland.

✓ I want to go to Disneyland; this has been my childhood dream and one day I really want to go.

'the Disneyland parks' is awkward — use 'Disneyland' without 'the' when referring to the theme park as a proper noun. Also improve tense consistency: 'this has been my childhood dream' (present perfect) shows a continuing desire. Remove repeated 'go to Disneyland' for concision. Suggestion: use 'Disneyland' as a proper noun and refine tense.