Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğrudan soruya yanıt veriyor ancak zaman uyumsuzluğu ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha doğal olmak için geçmiş zamanda konuşun (çünkü soru çocukken gitmeyi sormuş), cümleleri bölün ve gereksiz tekrarları/ayırt edilemeyen ifadeleri çıkarın. Ayrıca bağlaçlar ekleyerek cümlelerinizin akışını iyileştirin. Örneğin: geçmiş alışkanlık için “When I was a child, I used to…” kullanın ve aktivite dağılımını kısa destekleyici cümlelerle belirtin.

예시: When I was a child, I used to love going to parks. I often played hide-and-seek with my friends, and we would spend hours exploring the playground and running around.

제안: Cevap evet/hatırla biçiminde ama çok tekrar ve dolgu kelime (uh) kullanımı var; zaman uyumu karışık (“spent” geçmiş, soru şimdiki zamandı). 5 cümleyi aşmamak şartıyla daha akıcı ve tutarlı bir yapı kullanın: bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra iki kısa destek cümlesiyle ne yaptığınızı ve neden sevdiğinizi açıklayın. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri bağlayın (for example, because). Dolgu sözcüklerini azaltın.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are a great place to relax with friends. We usually hang out on the grass and chat, and sometimes we play simple games or walk around the paths for exercise.

제안: Niyet açık ama ifade edilmesi karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var (“children's can, social life social” anlamsız). Cümlenizi netleştirin: neden parkları istediğinizi somut nedenlerle söyleyin (sağlık, sosyal etkileşim, çevre). Bağlaçlar kullanarak neden-sonuç ilişkisini gösterin ve sahiplik/düzensiz ifadelerden kaçının.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they offer children a safe place to play and help people meet their neighbours. In addition, parks improve air quality and provide spaces for exercise and relaxation.

제안: Cevap açık ama biraz basit ve olumsuzda takılı kalmış; gerekçeniz yüzeysel. Daha ikna edici olmak için neden farklı parkları ayırt edemediğinizi veya hangi özelliklerin sizi çekeceğini belirtin (örneğin: gölet, oyun alanı, spor tesisleri). Böylece konuşma daha özelleşir ve zenginleşir.

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind, because most parks here look quite similar to me. However, I would be interested in visiting a park with a lake or sports facilities in the future, as those features would make it more appealing.

× I do like going to the parks, we play hide and seek with my friends even though I am 17.

✓ I do like going to parks; we play hide-and-seek with my friends even though I am 17.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'parks' is incorrect because speaker refers to parks in general, so no article is needed. Also use a semicolon or separate sentences instead of a comma splice, and hyphenate 'hide-and-seek'. Suggestion: remove 'the' when speaking generally, and connect clauses correctly.

× Uh, yes, I still like going to the park. Uh, we hang out with my friends. Uh, we have chats in parks. As I said, we play hide and seek. Uh, we spent hours running around.

✓ Uh, yes, I still like going to the park. Uh, we hang out with my friends. Uh, we chat in parks. As I said, we play hide-and-seek. Uh, we spend hours running around.

Mixed tenses: 'spent' is past tense but context is describing habitual present activities, so use present simple 'spend'. 'Have chats' is grammatical but 'chat' is more natural in present simple for habitual actions. Maintain present tense for ongoing habits.

× I would like to see more parks in my city because I think parks are the best places that children's can, umm, social life social.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because I think parks are the best places for children to have a social life.

Several issues: incorrect use of possessive/apostrophe in 'children's' and wrong pronoun/structure 'that children's can, social life social'. Correct structure is 'places for children to have a social life'. Use 'children' (plural noun) without apostrophe, and use infinitive 'to have' to express purpose.

× I don't have any parks that I want to go in the future, uh, because. I think all parks are the same. I don't have any ideas about the different ones.

✓ I don't have any parks that I want to go to in the future, because I think all parks are the same. I don't have any ideas about different ones.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' ('go to a place'). Also sentence fragment 'because.' should join the clause. Remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'different ones'. Ensure full clause after 'because' and keep negatives consistent.