Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I didn't like going to the park much'). Avoid long lists and redundancy.

예시: No, I didn't enjoy parks much as a child. I preferred staying at home playing video games or spending time with my family, because indoor activities felt more comfortable and social for me.

제안: Begin with a clear direct response and then give two concise, specific examples. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'a long walk in the park', 'sit beside a tree'). Use linking words like 'but' and 'for example' appropriately.

예시: Not really, but I sometimes enjoy visiting parks for specific activities. For example, I like taking a long walk in the park to clear my mind, or sitting under a tree to read or do some work in the fresh air.

제안: Answer directly then support with a specific reason and one clear benefit. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'there are not many parks', 'near my neighborhood') and avoid exaggerated phrases. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would. There are not many parks near my neighborhood, and I think adding more would increase greenery and improve air quality, so the city would feel fresher and more pleasant to walk in.

제안: Give a clear direct response, then offer a specific plan or reason. Use correct grammar ('no particular park I really want to visit', 'near my neighborhood'). Adding a brief reason makes the answer more informative.

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind, but I plan to visit nearby parks in my neighborhood soon because I want to enjoy more outdoor time and relax in green spaces.

× I didn't like that much going to the park.

✓ I didn't like going to the park that much.

The original sentence misplaces 'that much' and uses an awkward gerund phrase order. Place 'that much' after the verb phrase 'like going' to correctly modify the degree of liking. The past tense 'didn't like' is correct so keep it. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I prefer staying at home playing video games or spending time with my family or friends or doing some work at home.

✓ I prefer staying at home, playing video games, spending time with my family or friends, or doing some work at home.

The sentence uses present simple 'prefer' correctly (habitual preference). The issue is sentence clarity and missing commas to separate parallel gerund phrases. Add commas to clearly list activities and maintain verb forms consistent with 'prefer'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Not really, but I would like to go for a long walk in the at the parks or going for a piece sitting beside some tree or doing some work under the tree enjoying the natural air.

✓ Not really, but I would like to go for a long walk in the park, sit beside a tree, or do some work under a tree enjoying the fresh air.

Multiple problems: unnecessary article repetition 'in the at the parks', inconsistent verb forms ('would like to go' should be followed by base verbs like 'sit' or 'do' instead of gerund 'going'), and singular/plural inconsistencies. Use 'park' (general) or 'parks' consistently and use base verbs after 'would like to'. Also change 'natural air' to 'fresh air' for idiomatic English. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Around my city there are not much car parks, but I really like to have more parks near my society so the greenery, the nature grows more and the environment will be more pure and more breathtaking.

✓ Around my city there are not many car parks, but I would really like to have more parks near my neighborhood so the greenery and nature can grow more, and the environment will be cleaner and more beautiful.

Several errors: 'not much' should be 'not many' with countable plural 'car parks' (singular/plural/quantifier issue). 'Society' is a non-idiomatic translation; use 'neighborhood'. 'The greenery, the nature grows more' is ungrammatical — use 'greenery and nature can grow more' or 'the greenery and nature will increase'. 'More pure' is odd; use 'cleaner' and 'more beautiful' for natural descriptions. Also change 'like to have' to 'would like to have' for politeness/conditional preference. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× There is no particular park I really want to go in future, but I will visit some parks near my society one day.

✓ There is no particular park I really want to go to in the future, but I will visit some parks near my neighborhood one day.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' (There is no park I want to go to). Also add article 'the' before 'future' for the phrase 'in the future'. Replace 'society' with 'neighborhood'. The future tense 'will visit' is appropriate. Ensure 'go to' uses correct verb-preposition combination. Grammar problem type ID: 7