Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with verb tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often ran around with my friends and played hide-and-seek in the playground, which made me feel relaxed and happy.

제안: Use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence in present tense, explain why, and give a specific activity. Reduce hesitations and filler words.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After work I often walk among the trees and grass to relax and clear my mind, which helps me feel refreshed.

제안: Avoid repetition and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "fresh" or "more pleasant"). Give a brief reason with linking words and one specific benefit.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they make the environment fresher and the streets more pleasant. For example, extra green spaces would reduce pollution and give people places to relax.

제안: Clarify which park you mean and use future tense properly. Avoid contradictory starts ("yeah, no, I mean"). State the park name or location, give a reason, and mention a planned activity with linking words.

예시: Yes, there is a famous park in Nanjing that I plan to visit tomorrow. Many people recommend its outdoor exercise area, so I want to try the park gym and see why it is popular.

× Yeah, I like going to parks when I was a child because it makes me feel comfortable and relax.

✓ Yeah, I liked going to parks when I was a child because they made me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Tense inconsistency and agreement: 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'liked'. 'Parks' is plural so refer with 'they'. 'Relax' should be past participle/adjective 'relaxed' to describe the subject's state. Use consistent past tense and correct adjective form. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout the sentence and match pronouns and verb forms (liked, made, relaxed).

× When I was a child, I go run around the parks with my friends and play games.

✓ When I was a child, I ran around the parks with my friends and played games.

Past tense required: 'When I was a child' sets the time in the past, so verbs must be in past tense ('ran', 'played'). 'Go run' is an incorrect sequence here; use simple past for habitual past actions. Suggestion: Use simple past for past habits (I ran, I played).

× It's enjoyable.

✓ It was enjoyable.

Tense consistency: The previous sentences describe past experiences, so 'It' referring to that past should use past tense 'was'. Suggestion: Maintain past tense when describing past experiences.

× I still enjoying going to the parks now because when I uh, of work, I go to the park feels comfortable and uh, relax.

✓ I still enjoy going to parks now because after work I go to the park and I feel comfortable and relaxed.

Incorrect verb form: 'I still enjoying' should be 'I still enjoy' (simple present). 'When ... of work' is incorrect prepositional phrase; use 'after work'. 'I go to the park feels' mixes clauses; separate with 'and I feel'. 'Relax' should be adjective 'relaxed' describing feeling. Suggestion: Use simple present for current habits (I still enjoy), correct prepositions ('after work'), and proper clause structure ('and I feel comfortable and relaxed').

× There are so many trees and grass and I can walk in the street.

✓ There are so many trees and so much grass, and I can walk on the path.

Countable/uncountable and preposition issues: 'grass' is uncountable so use 'so much grass'. 'Walk in the street' is odd and unsafe; native phrasing is 'walk on the path' or 'walk in the park' using correct preposition 'on' for path or 'in' for park. Also add comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'so many' with plural nouns (trees) and 'so much' with uncountable nouns (grass); choose appropriate preposition for location (walk in the park / on the path).

× Yeah, I'd like to see more parks in my city because, uh, because it makes our city more fresher and more, uh, comfortable, because so many trees and grass makes, uh, people feel comfortable.

✓ Yeah, I'd like to see more parks in my city because it would make our city fresher and more comfortable, as more trees and grass make people feel relaxed.

Wrong comparative and verb agreement: 'more fresher' is redundant; use 'fresher' or 'more fresh' but 'fresher' is correct. Use conditional/modal 'would make' to express hypothetical result. 'So many trees and grass makes' has subject-verb agreement error: compound subject 'trees and grass' is plural, so use 'make'. 'Feel comfortable' can be refined to 'feel relaxed'. Suggestion: Use 'would make' for hypothetical effects, avoid double comparatives ('more fresher'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('trees and grass make').

× Yeah, uh, no, I mean Nanjing, there are so many uh, parks yeah in the city and uh, I will go to the gym in park tomorrow because, uh, this park is so famous and so many people recommend me, uh, this.

✓ There are many parks in Nanjing, and I will go to the park gym tomorrow because this park is very famous and many people recommended it to me.

Disfluent and incorrect sentence order with tense and pronoun errors: 'yeah, uh, no, I mean Nanjing' is filler and confusing; state location clearly. Use 'many parks' rather than 'so many uh, parks yeah'. 'I will go to the gym in park' needs article and word order: 'the park gym' or 'the gym in the park'. 'so many people recommend me, uh, this' is wrong word order and tense; use 'many people recommended it to me' (past recommendation) or 'recommend it to me' (present). Pronoun 'it' needed for 'this park'. Suggestion: Remove filler words, use clear clause ordering, include articles where needed ('the park gym' or 'the gym in the park'), and use correct pronoun and verb tense for reporting recommendations.