Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. The parks had large green lawns and many colorful flowers, and I often saw rabbits and birds there. Because of those sights and sounds, I felt happy and free while playing outside.

제안: Reduce repetition and give a complete, coherent answer. Provide a clear topic sentence, then one specific example using a linking word (for example, because, so) to explain when and why you visit. Correct omissions (e.g., name of park or location).

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks with my family. For example, when we have free time on weekends, we usually visit the park near our house to relax, talk, and let the children play on the swings.

제안: Answer the specific question (about wanting more parks) directly, avoid repetition and fillers, and use correct grammar (want vs go, breathe vs breath, I can take a walk). Give reasons with linking words and one specific benefit or example.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide fresh air and green space. For instance, with more parks I could take long walks near my home and enjoy quieter streets, which would improve my health and mood.

제안: Be specific and avoid hesitations. Name the park clearly, use correct verb tenses, and explain why you want to visit with 1–2 clear supporting details. Use linking words (because, since, as) and limit to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Magdalen College Park in Oxford in the future because I have heard it is very beautiful and spacious. Since I enjoy wide lawns and historic architecture, I think walking there would be relaxing and inspiring.

× Absolutely, I'd love to. I'd love going to parks.

✓ Absolutely, I loved going to parks.

The question asks about liking to go to parks 'as a child' which requires past tense. 'I'd love' (I would love) expresses a present hypothetical desire, not a past habitual. Use simple past 'I loved' to show a past preference.

× I remember umm, there are there was green spaces and many flowers.

✓ I remember there were green spaces and many flowers.

The speaker mixes present 'are' and past 'was'; the correct form for a past recollection is 'there were'. Also use plural 'spaces' with 'were'. Remove filler words and keep past tense consistent.

× It's even animals.

✓ There were even animals.

'It's even animals' is ungrammatical and mixes pronouns and tense. Use 'There were' to state existence in the past and keep tense consistent with the childhood context.

× Everything was very.

✓ Everything was very beautiful.

The sentence 'Everything was very.' lacks a complement; 'very' must modify an adjective. Add an appropriate adjective such as 'beautiful' to complete the sentence.

× Yes, I still still often go to parks with my family.

✓ Yes, I still often go to parks with my family.

The repetition 'still still' is a speech repetition error, not grammatical category but needs correction. The present simple 'I still often go' is correct for habitual current actions.

× So for example, when we when when we have a rest time, we go we go to parks near.

✓ For example, when we have free time, we go to the nearby parks.

Remove repeated words and use natural phrasing: 'have free time' and 'nearby parks' (adjective + noun). Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, I, I definitely go to parks because, uh, when I go there, uh, I, I'm, I breath, I can breath, uh, fresh air and, and I taking a walk for a long time.

✓ Yes, I definitely go to parks because when I go there I can breathe fresh air and take long walks.

Multiple issues: use 'can breathe' for ability (modal + base verb), not 'I can breath' (noun). Use base verb 'take' after implied 'can' or as part of the sentence; 'taking' is incorrect without auxiliary. Remove repeated fillers and contractions. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

This question sentence from the examiner is correct as given; no correction needed. Included for completeness. Note: no change because it's already grammatical.

× Yes, I would like to go go uh HMO Modulin park Modulin College in Oxford.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to HMO Modulin Park at Modulin College in Oxford.

Use 'would like to' + base verb 'go' and include the preposition 'to' for destination. Remove duplicated 'go' and extra fillers. Capitalize proper nouns and include 'at' before the institution if needed.

× Uh Ivor I've heard it. It was a very beautiful and spacious place out there uh, having a spacious place so I can I I I.

✓ I've heard it's a very beautiful and spacious place; it has large open areas so I could enjoy spending time there.

Combine tenses correctly: 'I've heard it's' (present reference based on past hearing) instead of 'I've heard it.' Use present 'it's' to report a current state. Replace 'was' if the place still is beautiful. 'Having a spacious place' is incorrect grammar; use 'it has large open areas'. Use 'could enjoy' or 'I can enjoy' depending on intention. Remove repetitions and filler words.