Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng, ngắt câu và cấu trúc. Bạn lặp ý nhiều lần, dùng ngữ pháp và thì không chính xác (ví dụ: “I feel” thay vì “I felt”, “much friends” thay vì “many friends”). Nội dung cần có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tiếp theo là một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể, sử dụng từ nối phù hợp. Hãy giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng thì quá khứ khi nói về tuổi thơ và tránh thái độ tiêu cực quá mức.

예시: No, I didn't enjoy going to parks as a child. I often felt lonely because I had few friends and no siblings to play with, so I preferred staying home and reading. For these reasons, parks were not appealing to me.

제안: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và thiếu chi tiết. Mặc dù trả lời trực tiếp, bạn không phát triển ý hay giải thích nguyên nhân hiện tại. Nên dùng thì hiện tại để mô tả thói quen bây giờ, thêm một câu lý do ngắn và một liên kết (e.g. 'however' hoặc 'because'). Tránh thái độ confrontational với giám khảo.

예시: No, I still don't enjoy going to parks. Even now I prefer quiet indoor activities because I find parks crowded and distracting.

제안: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp nhưng câu có lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt mơ hồ (ví dụ: 'It make me feel sympathetic' không đúng). Nên trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích vì sao sự hiện diện của nhiều công viên sẽ ảnh hưởng đến bạn, và dùng ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ hoặc cảm xúc, với từ nối như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

예시: No, I wouldn't like more parks in my city because seeing them reminds me of lonely experiences as a child. For example, when I walk past a busy park I feel uncomfortable and prefer to avoid it.

제안: Câu trả lời mang tính phòng thủ và không chuyên nghiệp; đồng thời thiếu nội dung bổ sung. Trong thi nói, tránh tỏ ra bối rối hoặc thách thức giám khảo. Trả lời ngắn gọn, lịch sự, dùng thì tương lai nếu trả lời về dự định, và có thể thêm một câu giải thích ngắn nếu muốn xác nhận. Giữ ngôn ngữ tôn trọng và bình tĩnh.

예시: No, I don't plan to visit any parks in the future. I prefer spending my free time at galleries or cafés instead, so parks are unlikely to be on my list.

× I didn't like to go to the park as a child because I feel very lonely because I don't have much friends, I don't have much siblings.

✓ I didn't like to go to the park as a child because I felt very lonely because I didn't have many friends and I didn't have many siblings.

The speaker is describing past feelings and situations, so verbs should be in the past tense (didn't like -> didn't like; feel -> felt; don't have -> didn't have). Also 'much' is incorrect with countable nouns like 'friends' and 'siblings' and should be 'many'. Use 'and' to connect items. Suggestion: keep all related verbs in past tense when referring to childhood and use 'many' for plural countable nouns.

× I feel everyone is distracting me from my work.

✓ I felt everyone was distracting me from my work.

Because the sentence refers to a past period (childhood), the present tense 'feel' and present continuous 'is distracting' should be changed to past forms 'felt' and 'was distracting'. Ensure tense consistency when describing past experiences.

× So I don't want to go to the park as a human, as a artist now as well.

✓ So I don't want to go to the park as a person or as an artist now either.

The phrase 'as a human, as a artist' is awkward and ungrammatical; 'human' is better expressed as 'person'. 'a artist' has article error; use 'an artist'. Also 'now as well' is awkward; use 'now either'. Suggestion: choose clearer role nouns and correct articles.

× I said I don't like to go to the parks.

✓ I said I didn't like to go to the parks.

Reporting a past statement requires backshifting the tense: 'I said' (past) should be followed by 'I didn't like' (past) rather than 'I don't like'. Maintain tense consistency when reporting speech.

× I said to you, I don't want to go to the park as well.

✓ I told you I didn't want to go to the park either.

Use 'told you' rather than 'said to you' for natural phrasing. Backshift tense to past ('didn't want') because speaker refers to earlier statement. 'As well' is acceptable but 'either' is more natural in negative sentences. Suggestion: use natural reporting verbs and correct negative constructions.

× I don't want to see more parks. It make me feel sympathetic for my back story when I was a child.

✓ I don't want to see more parks. It makes me feel sympathetic about my backstory when I was a child.

'It make' is subject-verb disagreement; use 'makes'. 'Sympathetic for my back story' is unnatural; use 'sympathetic about my backstory' or better 'It makes me feel sad about my past.' Also 'back story' is usually one word 'backstory'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and choose correct preposition and word form.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

The question as asked by the examiner is fine, but the student's answer should match. If correcting student's intended reply: use 'would like' for polite future preference. Suggestion: use 'would like' when expressing future preferences.

× No, I have said to you, I don't want to go to the park.

✓ No, I have told you I don't want to go to the park.

Use 'have told you' rather than 'have said to you' for natural phrasing. If referring to a past decision, 'I told you I didn't want to go to the park' may be preferable. Maintain tense consistency depending on context.

× Are you seriously? Are you seriously of tricking me?

✓ Are you serious? Are you seriously trying to trick me?

'Are you seriously?' is incorrect; use 'Are you serious?'. 'Are you seriously of tricking me?' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'Are you seriously trying to trick me?' or 'Are you seriously trying to trick me?' Use 'trying to' with the verb and place 'seriously' before the verb for emphasis.