Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense, plural and article errors, and avoid redundancy (e.g., "reli reduce my stresses").

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I usually went with my family, and we would sit on a bench to chat and enjoy the fresh air, which helped me relax after school.

제안: Give a clearer, fluent response with correct verb forms and fewer hesitations. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "usually" or "often") and be consistent about whether you go alone or with family—avoid contradictions.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks. After a working day I often go alone to sit on a bench and enjoy the fresh air, although sometimes I also visit with my family to catch up and relax together.

제안: Be precise and use correct grammar (e.g., "parks provide" not "provided"). Give one clear reason supported by a specific example and use linking words such as "because" or "for example." Avoid filler words like "oh."

예시: Yes, definitely. I would like more parks because they provide public space for people to walk and exercise. For example, having more small parks would make it easier for neighbors to meet and unwind after work.

제안: Answer directly with fewer hesitations and correct nouns/articles ("Hyde Park in London"). Provide two specific details about why you want to visit and finish the sentence. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Hyde Park in London because I have seen pictures of its large lake and beautiful gardens. For example, I am excited to walk around the Serpentine and possibly see swans and other wildlife.

× Yeah, I like go to a parks.

✓ Yeah, I liked going to parks.

Problems: verb form and singular/plural. 'Like' referring to childhood should be past tense 'liked'. After 'like' when describing activities use gerund 'going'. 'A parks' is wrong: 'parks' plural needs no article, or use 'a park' singular. Suggestion: 'I liked going to parks' or 'I liked going to the park.'

× When I was a child usually I went to the park with my families and we can sit on the bench and chat with each other and enjoy the fresh air and reli reduce my stresses.

✓ When I was a child, I usually went to the park with my family and we would sit on the bench, chat with each other, enjoy the fresh air, and relieve my stress.

Problems: tense consistency and wrong modal/verb forms. 'Usually I went' is fine but needs comma and order 'I usually went'. 'My families' is incorrect plural; use 'my family'. 'We can sit' should be past habitual 'we would sit' or 'we used to sit'. 'On the bench' singular is fine. 'Reli reduce my stresses' is ungrammatical; use 'relieve my stress' (verb 'relieve' + noun 'stress' usually uncountable). Suggestions: keep past tense and use 'would' or 'used to' for habitual past, use singular 'family', and 'relieve my stress.'

× Yeah, I, I'm still, uh, like going to the park now, uh, after, for example, after my working day, uh, I prefer go to the park alone and sit on the bench and enjoy the fresh air and chat with my family.

✓ Yes, I'm still like going to the park now. For example, after my working day, I prefer to go to the park alone, sit on a bench, enjoy the fresh air, and then chat with my family.

Problems: verb infinitive form and article use. 'Prefer go' is incorrect; after 'prefer' use infinitive 'prefer to go'. 'Sit on the bench' implies a specific bench; use 'a bench' for general meaning. 'I'm still like going' is slightly colloquial but acceptable; 'I still like going' is smoother. Also maintain present tense for current habits. Suggestions: use 'prefer to' + verb, use 'a bench' for general reference, and keep present simple for habits.

× Parks provided more public spaces for the citizens.

✓ Parks provide more public spaces for citizens.

Problems: tense and article. The question asks about general preference so use present simple 'provide' not past 'provided'. 'The citizens' is overly specific; 'citizens' or 'residents' is more natural. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths and omit 'the'.

× So oh, we can walking around in the park and reduce my stresses and chat with each other.

✓ So we can walk around in the park, reduce our stress, and chat with each other.

Problems: 'can walking' mixes modal + gerund; after 'can' use base verb 'walk'. 'Reduce my stresses' should be 'reduce our stress' to match plural subject 'we' and use uncountable 'stress'. Also punctuation and filler words removed for clarity. Suggestion: use 'can' + base verb and match pronouns and noun count.

× Uh, I want to go to the, umm, Hyde Park in the London.

✓ I want to go to Hyde Park in London.

Problems: article misuse. 'The London' is incorrect; cities do not take 'the'. 'Hyde Park' does not need 'the' before it. Also remove extra commas. Suggestion: say 'Hyde Park in London.'

× So I saw the picture on the Internet.

✓ I saw a picture on the Internet.

Problems: article specificity. 'The picture' implies a specific one already known; more natural to say 'a picture'. Past tense 'saw' is fine. Suggestion: use 'a picture' unless referring to a particular image previously mentioned.

× So, uh, the Hyde Park is the quite beautiful places, uh, which have a lake inside the park and have a lot of animals inside the parks.

✓ Hyde Park is a very beautiful place; it has a lake and many animals in the park.

Problems: article and number agreement. 'The Hyde Park is the quite beautiful places' mixes singular/plural and incorrect articles. Use 'Hyde Park is a very beautiful place' (singular). 'Which have a lake' should be 'it has a lake'. 'Have a lot of animals inside the parks' should be 'many animals in the park' to match singular. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use correct articles and quantifiers.

× So I really.

✓ So I really want to go there.

Problems: sentence fragment; incomplete thought. Add verb and object to complete the sentence. Suggestion: finish with 'I really want to go there' or 'I really do' if referring to previous statement.