Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify tense and grammar, use a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 clear sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and replace unclear phrases (e.g., "show park", "closed park") with precise vocabulary (e.g., "playground", "local park").

예시: Yes, I loved going to the local park as a child. I often spent afternoons on the playground because it had swings and a small pond to feed ducks. Those visits were memorable since I played with neighborhood friends and felt free outdoors.

제안: Use correct verb forms and make the reason clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example as supporting detail connected by a linking word like "because" or "so". Replace unclear phrase "going to teach" with the intended activity (e.g., "going to class").

예시: To be honest, I don't visit parks much now because I prefer more active or social activities. For example, I usually go to university classes or shopping with friends, which feels more useful and enjoyable for me.

제안: Respond directly to the yes/no question with a clear position, then provide specific supporting details about what kinds of parks you want and why. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Correct pluralization and word order ("play gardens", "benches") and avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because public green spaces improve residents' quality of life. For example, new parks with play gardens for children, benches, and picnic areas would serve families and older people alike.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence and a clear reason, avoiding repetition. Use correct verb forms and countable/uncountable nouns ("parks are boring places" or "a boring place"). Offer one specific alternative activity to illustrate your preference. Keep to 2–3 sentences max and use a linking word like "because" or "so" correctly.

예시: No, I don't have any specific parks I want to visit in the future because I usually find parks quiet and uninteresting. Instead, I prefer going to busy areas like shopping districts or cafes where I can meet people and have things to do.

× Actually, when I was a child, I definitely prefer to go and show park than any other place so because the closed park is very pitiful.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I definitely preferred going to the park more than any other place because closed parks seemed very sad.

The student mixes past and present tense; 'when I was a child' sets past time so the verb should be past ('preferred'). Use gerund 'going' after prefer in past or present continuous forms. 'Show park' is incorrect—likely meant 'the park'. 'So because' is redundant; use 'because'. Also plural agreement: 'closed park is very pitiful' -> 'closed parks seemed very sad' to match general observation in past and use correct adjective and plurality. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× To be honest, no, I don't like go to the park because I find myself in another place.

✓ To be honest, no, I don't like going to the park because I prefer being somewhere else.

After 'don't like' the verb should be in the -ing form ('going'). 'I find myself in another place' is awkward; 'I prefer being somewhere else' is clearer and keeps present tense consistent. This corrects the verb form and improves idiomatic phrasing. (Grammar problem type ID:8)

× For example, I prefer going to teach or go shopping rather than go to the park.

✓ For example, I prefer going to classes or going shopping rather than going to the park.

After 'prefer' when comparing activities, use parallel -ing forms for each verb ('going to classes', 'going shopping', 'going to the park'). 'Going to teach' is incorrect; use 'going to classes' or 'taking classes'. This fixes parallel structure and verb form. (Grammar problem type ID:8)

× Different parks in my city and that different parts contain many play garden and chairs and tables that serve everybody.

✓ There are different parks in my city, and these parks in different areas contain many playgrounds, chairs, and tables for everyone.

The original lacks a clear verb and has poor word choice and structure. Use 'There are' to introduce existence of parks (There be issue), correct plural nouns ('playgrounds') and add articles/commas. 'That different parts' becomes 'parks in different areas'. Provide clearer prepositions: 'for everyone'. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× Actually no, because I'm not interested in visit new parks because I mean I think parks is a boring places and I prefer to go out like people.

✓ Actually, no, because I'm not interested in visiting new parks. I think parks are boring places, and I prefer going out with other people.

Use gerund 'visiting' after 'interested in'. Avoid repeating 'because' twice; split into two sentences. Subject-verb agreement: 'parks is' should be 'parks are'. Use plural agreement 'places'. 'Go out like people' is unclear; 'going out with other people' is idiomatic. These changes fix verb form, agreement, and clarity. (Grammar problem type ID:6)