Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct tense and pronoun errors (use past tense “liked”, “when I was a child”, and correct possessive “nearby”). Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. However, there weren’t any parks near our home, so I could only visit them when we traveled to relatives’ neighborhoods. Those rare visits were memorable because I could play on the swings and feed the ducks.

제안: Start with a direct statement (use present tense: “I still enjoy going to parks”) and then give specific reasons or a brief example. Fix grammar: “I’m a teenager” and avoid unclear pronouns like “her.” Use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) correctly.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are a peaceful place to relax. As a teenager living in the city, I often go to a nearby park to meet friends or study outdoors on weekends.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, then give a specific reason with correct vocabulary and grammar. Clarify unclear phrases (e.g., remove “Pakistani city” if irrelevant) and use conditional language properly: “If there were more parks, the city would be greener and people would be happier.”

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve air quality and people’s well‑being. If the city built more parks, there would be more places for families to relax and children to play.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatical response and explain why with one or two specific details. Correct plural and tense errors (“there are no parks”, “I would like the government to build one”). Avoid unclear phrases like “dive like to goat” and use a conditional or future structure: “I hope the government will build parks.”

예시: Currently there are no good parks where I live in Mysore, so there is no particular park I plan to visit. I hope the government will build more public parks in the future so families and young people have safe outdoor places to enjoy.

× Yes, I like to go to the parks when I child but there is no park nearby us so I can't go to the parks when I charge.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child, but there were no parks near us so I couldn't go to them often.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'like' should be past 'liked' because speaking about childhood (present tense issue). 'when I child' missing 'was a' (verb and article error; covered as present/past tense and article). 'there is no park nearby us' should be 'there were no parks near us' (plural and preposition use). 'I can't go to the parks when I charge' is unclear: likely meant 'couldn't go to them often' (past tense/modal and wrong word 'charge'). Suggestion: match tense to past, use 'was a child', use correct preposition 'near', and refer back with 'them' for parks.

× Yes, I still like her to the parks because now I am a teenage so I go to the parks in a city.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because now I am a teenager, so I go to parks in the city.

Errors: 'still like her to the parks' uses wrong pronoun 'her' and wrong verb form; use gerund 'going' for liking activities (verb + -ing form). 'I am a teenage' is wrong adjective/noun form; correct noun is 'a teenager' (incorrect use of adjectives or nouns). 'the parks' and 'in a city' should be simplified to 'parks' and 'in the city' or 'in my city' depending on meaning. Suggest using 'going to parks' and 'a teenager' to fix tense/word forms.

× Yes, I would like to see the more parts in my city, but there is a two or three Pakistani city. If there is more parks, the greenery would be happier.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, but there are only two or three in Pakistani cities. If there were more parks, the city would be greener.

Errors: 'the more parts' should be 'more parks' (word choice and article error). 'there is a two or three Pakistani city' is ungrammatical: use plural 'there are only two or three in Pakistani cities' (subject-verb agreement and pluralization). 'If there is more parks' should be subjunctive/conditional: 'If there were more parks' (past subjunctive for unreal present). 'the greenery would be happier' is awkward; use 'the city would be greener' (incorrect adjective use). Suggest using correct plural forms, subject-verb agreement, and conditional 'were' for unreal situations.

× No, in Mysore there is no parks. There were dive like to goat in the future. I wish the government will make it the back in the future.

✓ No, in Mysore there are no parks. I would like to visit some in the future. I hope the government will build them in the future.

Errors: 'there is no parks' wrong 'there is' with plural 'parks' (there be issue and subject-verb agreement). 'There were dive like to goat in the future' is unintelligible; likely meant 'I would like to visit some in the future' (verb form and vocabulary). 'I wish the government will make it the back in the future' mixes tenses and uses wrong phrasing: use 'I hope the government will build them in the future' or 'I wish the government would build them' (modal/future tense and verb choice). Suggest using 'there are no parks', clear verbs like 'visit' or 'build', and proper future/modal forms.