Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer slightly more natural and correct tense/agreement, add one concise supporting detail with a linking phrase. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I used to go to the park with my parents when I was a child. We often played badminton or soccer there, which I enjoyed a lot because it helped me stay active and bond with my family.

제안: Improve coherence by using linking words and correcting repetition and verb forms. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why and give an alternative activity.

예시: Not really — as a university student I don't have much free time, so I rarely go to parks. Instead, I usually go to the gym or study in the library because I need to balance fitness and coursework.

제안: Clarify ideas and use accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'air quality' and 'green spaces' not 'air conditioning'). Use linking words to connect reasons and be specific about benefits.

예시: Definitely. My city has heavy traffic and poor air quality, so I think we need more parks. In addition, green spaces can reduce pollution, provide shade, and give residents places to relax and exercise.

제안: Correct grammar and vocabulary errors, remove filler words, and be specific about features and effects. Use one linking phrase to add a supporting detail and avoid unclear phrases like 'natural asthma'.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Tai Dang Park because it has many trees and large open spaces where people can play sports like basketball. Also, I expect the park to be peaceful and to improve the local air quality, making it a good place to relax.

× We would often play some sports like badminton or soccer in the park and I really enjoy it.

✓ We would often play sports like badminton or soccer in the park and I really enjoyed it.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'would often play' with present 'I really enjoy it'. The time frame should be consistent; since the speaker refers to childhood, use past tense 'enjoyed'. Also 'some sports' is awkward; omit 'some' when listing examples.

× Not really. Now I'm a university student so I haven't had much free time so I haven't been.

✓ Not really. Now I'm a university student, so I haven't had much free time and I haven't been to the park.

The phrase 'I haven't been' is incomplete; include the destination 'to the park'. Also use 'and' instead of repeating 'so' to improve sentence flow. Tenses (present perfect) are appropriate for recent experiences.

× I can't go to the park, instead I usually go to the gym or study in the library.

✓ I can't go to the park; instead, I usually go to the gym or study in the library.

Punctuation and connectors need adjustment: use a semicolon or period before 'instead' and a comma after it. Prepositions are fine, but the sentence structure required punctuation correction for clarity.

× Definitely, yes. You know, my city has a lot of traffic so small or something like that.

✓ Definitely. You know, my city has a lot of traffic and limited green space.

The original is fragmented and contains vague filler 'so small or something like that.' Replace with a clear noun phrase 'limited green space' to convey the intended meaning and correct sentence structure.

× So I think we need more park in my city because they can improve the air conditioning.

✓ So I think we need more parks in my city because they can improve air quality.

'More park' is incorrect; use the plural 'more parks' (quantifier issue). 'Air conditioning' is wrong in this context; the intended phrase is 'air quality'.

× Umm, I would like to visit Tai Dang Park because it's have a lot of tree and uh, it's have a lot of open space where people can play sport like basketball.

✓ Umm, I would like to visit Tai Dang Park because it has a lot of trees and a lot of open space where people can play sports like basketball.

The verb 'have' is incorrect with the contraction 'it's' (it is); the correct verb is 'has' for third person singular. Also 'tree' should be plural 'trees' and 'sport' should be plural 'sports' when speaking generally.

× Umm, and I think this park really relax and have natural asthma.

✓ Umm, and I think this park is really relaxing and has natural atmosphere.

'Relax' is a verb; the adjective 'relaxing' or phrase 'makes me relaxed' is appropriate. 'Have' should be 'has' for third person singular. 'Natural asthma' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation of 'natural atmosphere' or 'natural ambience'.