Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ короткий и понятный, но есть проблемы с связностью и грамматикой: лишняя точка и фраза "There and we had picnics" звучит неестественно. Можно объединить предложения, добавить связующие слова и немного конкретики (где вы катались, что делали). Также избегайте тавтологии и следите за правильным порядком слов.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to ride my bike there with friends, and we often had picnics on the grass while playing games like football or hide-and-seek.

제안: Ответ затянут, есть паузы и повторения ("we, we"), незавершённое предложение в конце. Нужно говорить более сжато, использовать связки (however, although, so) и завершать мысль. Уточните, почему вы ходите в парки и что именно там делаете.

예시: I don't have much free time during the week; however, my family and I try to visit a park at the weekend to relax, have a picnic and let the children play outdoors.

제안: Ответ понятен, но есть грамматические ошибки (артикль и число: "a new parks") и повторение идей из предыдущих ответов. Лучше дать конкретную причину, где вы хотели бы парки и какие удобства нужны (детская площадка, тропы). Используйте связки для добавления деталей.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city, especially in densely populated neighbourhoods, because they would provide green space for families, playgrounds for children and safe walking paths for exercise.

제안: Ответ содержит много заполнителей ("uh") и нечеткие формулировки ("a kind park", "spectacular places"). Нужно конкретизировать, какие именно места или виды вы хотите увидеть, и убрать словесные паузы. Используйте прилагательные точнее и приведите пример активности, которую вы хотите там сделать.

예시: Yes, I've heard about a large park in Krasnodar that features lakes, flower gardens and panoramic viewpoints; I would like to visit to walk along the trails, take photos and relax by the water.

× Yes I did. I used to ride a bike to the parks when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to ride a bike to the park when I was a child.

The phrase 'used to' correctly indicates a habitual past action. The noun 'park' should be singular when referring generally to the idea of going to park(s) as a child. Use 'park' instead of 'parks' for natural collocation: 'ride a bike to the park.' Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I spent time with my friends. There and we had picnics.

✓ I spent time with my friends there, and we had picnics.

The original has a fragmented structure: 'There and we had picnics.' Combine the ideas into one coherent sentence: place the adverb 'there' next to the verb phrase it modifies and join clauses with 'and'. This fixes sentence fragmentation and improves flow.

× Actually, I don't have free time to go to the parks now, but sometimes, especially at the weekend, we, we with my family try to go to the parks, spend time together and spend time outdoors because it's.

✓ Actually, I don't have free time to go to the park now, but sometimes, especially at the weekend, my family and I try to go to the park, spend time together, and spend time outdoors.

Use the singular 'the park' when speaking generally about going to park places in this context. Pronoun order should be 'my family and I' as the subject. Remove repeated filler 'we, we' and the trailing unfinished clause 'because it's.' Punctuation: add commas to separate items in the list. These changes correct article usage, pronoun order, and sentence completeness.

× Yes, I'd like to see a new parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see new parks in my city.

You cannot use the singular article 'a' with plural noun 'parks'. Either use 'a new park' (singular) or 'new parks' (plural). Here 'new parks' fits the intended plural meaning. Remove 'a' to fix the article-quantity mismatch.

× I like being outdoors and spend time with my family and friends.

✓ I like being outdoors and spending time with my family and friends.

After 'like' when listing preferences, use parallel gerund forms: 'being' and 'spending'. Using 'spend' (base form) breaks parallelism. Change 'spend' to 'spending' to maintain grammatical parallel structure.

× We usually go to the park at the weekend and have a picnic sometimes.

✓ We usually go to the park at the weekend and have a picnic sometimes.

This sentence is acceptable, but watch consistency: 'have a picnic sometimes' is natural. No plural change needed. Provide the same sentence as correction with punctuation unchanged; the structure fits the context.

× Yes, I've heard about, uh, a great park in the Krasnodar city.

✓ Yes, I've heard about a great park in Krasnodar city.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before most city names. Use 'in Krasnodar city' or better 'in Krasnodar'. Remove the extra comma after 'about' and filler 'uh' for clarity. This corrects article misuse.

× It's a kind park with a lot of, uh, places to relax, to spend time.

✓ It's a pleasant park with a lot of places to relax and spend time.

'Kind park' is incorrect because 'kind' describes people, not places. Use 'pleasant' or 'nice'. Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma before 'places'. Use parallel infinitives or combine with 'and' for natural phrasing: 'places to relax and spend time.'

× Uh, it has some memorable views and uh, spectacular places.

✓ It has memorable views and spectacular spots.

Remove filler 'uh' and simplify 'some memorable views and spectacular places' to a more concise pair: 'memorable views and spectacular spots.' This fixes redundancy and improves natural word choice.