Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and avoid pauses and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (past tense: 'I was a child', 'I liked', 'getting fresh air').

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played on the swings and watched other children singing, which made the atmosphere very cheerful. Also, I enjoyed the fresh air and open space, so it was always a fun part of my week.

제안: Give a direct short answer and then one clear reason with correct grammar (use present tense: 'doesn't' or 'isn't'). Avoid repetition. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'but' once to connect reason.

예시: Not really, because it has been very hot recently, which makes walking in the park uncomfortable. However, I still go occasionally in the early morning when the temperature is cooler.

제안: Answer directly and provide specific reasons and benefits of more parks. Reduce fillers and correct grammar ('get fresh air', 'I would like to see more parks'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to add clarity.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and cleaner air. For example, in winter I enjoy walking in parks at night to relax, so having more parks nearby would make that easier.

제안: Start with a clear statement and give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, using correct tense and vocabulary ('I've seen photos and videos', 'I'm excited'). Avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I plan to visit Hyde Park in London in the future. I have seen many photos and videos of its lakes and gardens, and I'm excited to walk there and see the Speaker's Corner in person.

× Definitely because, uh, when I am child, I was uh, like to uh, uh, go uh, around the park and uh, seeing other people sing, uh, other child, uh, it was uh, getting a fresh air. So it was fun.

✓ Definitely, because when I was a child, I liked to go around the park and see other children singing; it was refreshing, so it was fun.

Problems: incorrect verb tense and form ('am child' should be past 'was a child'), singular/plural ('other child' -> 'other children'), verb forms ('was...like to' -> 'liked to', 'seeing' -> 'see'), article use ('a fresh air' -> 'refreshing' or 'fresh air' without 'a'). Suggestion: use past simple for habits in the past, use plural for multiple children, use correct collocations ('refreshing' or 'get fresh air').

× Recently no because the weather don't help to go around the park because they were now hot and not able to to go to the park because of the weather. And no the the last answer is no.

✓ Not recently, because the weather doesn't make it pleasant to go to the park; it has been hot recently, so I am not able to go to the park because of the weather.

Problems: subject-verb agreement and tense ('don't' should be 'doesn't' for 'the weather'), incorrect pronoun reference ('they were now hot' should refer to 'the weather' and use singular), mixed tenses. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements about weather ('doesn't make it pleasant'), or present perfect/simple continuous for recent conditions ('has been hot'). Also avoid repetition and keep pronouns consistent.

× Uh, yes, definitely, uh, especially in the winter, uh, I would like to, uh, go to the park in the night and getting a fresh air. Uh, so the weather is cold and with the, uh, refresh air, I as I said, uh, so yes, I would to see more parks in, in our area.

✓ Yes, definitely. Especially in winter, I would like to go to the park at night and get some fresh air. The weather is cold and refreshing, so I would like to see more parks in our area.

Problems: incorrect verb form after 'would like' ('would like to go' is fine but 'getting' should be 'get'), incorrect preposition ('in the night' -> 'at night'), article and collocation ('a fresh air' -> 'fresh air' or 'some fresh air'), missing verb ('I would to see' -> 'I would like to see'). Suggestion: use 'would like to + base verb', correct prepositions of time ('at night'), and use 'some fresh air' or 'get fresh air'.

× Yes, I plan, I, I plan to visit Hyde Park in London. I watch the photos about it and the videos and I'm exciting to plan one trip to London to visit Hyde Park and I hope to do that in the future.

✓ Yes, I plan to visit Hyde Park in London. I have seen photos and videos of it, and I'm excited to plan a trip to London to visit Hyde Park; I hope to do that in the future.

Problems: tense and verb forms ('I watch the photos' should be present perfect 'I have seen photos', 'I'm exciting' should be 'I'm excited'), redundancy and article use ('plan one trip' -> 'plan a trip'). Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences seen before now ('have seen'), use adjective 'excited' not 'exciting', and use 'a trip' for a single trip.