Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid hesitations and repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, articles) and remove filler words like “uh” and repeated words.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved going to the park with my parents on weekends because we spent the whole day there having picnics and playing games. For example, we often flew kites and shared homemade snacks, which made those days very memorable.

제안: Give a clear present-tense topic sentence and follow with a specific reason. Use linking words (because, so) and finish the thought; avoid trailing off and fillers. Use correct verb forms and complete the sentence.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I like them because the natural surroundings and peaceful atmosphere help me unwind after a busy day, so I often go for a short walk or sit and read to relax.

제안: Provide a single clear opinion and then support it with specific reasons. Use correct sentence structure and linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Avoid confusing phrases and repetition. Mention concrete benefits of more parks.

예시: Definitely — I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and fresh air. For example, additional parks would give families places to picnic and children safe areas to play, which would improve residents’ health and well-being.

제안: Be specific and fluent. Start with a direct answer, then explain what attracts you to that park with complete sentences and correct vocabulary (e.g., “contains” not “contain”). Avoid short broken fragments; combine ideas with linking words.

예시: In the future I would like to visit Jurassic Park, which is an amusement park rather than a natural park. I am interested in it because it features realistic dinosaur exhibits and interactive attractions, so it would be both exciting and educational.

× Yes, definitely When I was young, I, I would love to go to park, go to the park with my parents on the weekend because, uh, on the weekend my parents spent the whole day to.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was young, I loved going to the park with my parents on weekends because my parents would spend the whole day there.

Errors: run-on sentence, tense mismatch, article omission, plural timing, and incorrect use of 'would love' for habitual past. According to the list, this is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use past simple 'loved' for a habitual action in the past, include the definite article 'the' before 'park', pluralize 'weekends' for habitual occasions, remove filler words and repeated fragments, and replace 'spent the whole day to' with 'would spend the whole day there' to convey habitual past action clearly. Suggestions: Break into clear sentences or clauses, use past simple for past habits, include correct articles, and use 'there' to indicate location.

× Yes I'll uh, currently I live, I still love going to parks now because uh, when I get to the park, the nature and the atmosphere that make me unwind after uh, after.

✓ Yes. Currently I still love going to parks because when I get to the park, the nature and the atmosphere help me unwind.

This includes present tense and sentence structure issues; per the list treat as Present tense issue (ID 6). Errors: unnecessary future 'I'll', extra commas and fillers, wrong verb agreement 'that make' with compound subject, and incomplete ending 'after after'. Use present simple 'help' to describe a general truth/habit. Remove extraneous words and finish the thought. Suggestions: Use 'currently' without 'I'll', use 'help' (agreeing with 'nature and atmosphere'), and avoid filler words.

× Definitely Granddad City have more parks, there more. The more parks we get, the more people, the more people we go there for the fresh air for the rest year and later.

✓ Definitely. Granddad City has more parks now. The more parks we get, the more people will go there for fresh air and relaxation throughout the year.

Problems include subject-verb agreement and unclear adjective/adverb phrases; primary issue here is adjective/adverb usage and sentence structure so classify as Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13). 'Granddad City have' should be 'Granddad City has' (subject-verb agreement), 'there more' is unclear — clarify with 'now' or remove. The comparative sentence is repetitive and missing verbs; use 'will go' for future result and 'fresh air and relaxation' to express purpose. Suggestions: Ensure subject and verb agree, use clear adverbial phrases for time ('now', 'throughout the year'), and complete comparative structures.

× In the future, I want to go to the Jurassic Park. It's not the nature park, but it's the interesting park that. That contain many. Dinosaur.

✓ In the future, I want to go to Jurassic Park. It's not a nature park, but it's an interesting park that contains many dinosaurs.

Errors: article misuse, sentence fragments, and incorrect verb form 'contain' (should be 'contains' to agree with singular 'park') classified as Verb in the present participle form (ID 10) per the list. Use 'Jurassic Park' without 'the' when referring to the attraction, use 'a nature park' (indefinite article), combine fragments into one sentence, and use present simple 'contains' for factual description. Suggestions: Use correct articles, avoid sentence fragments, and ensure subject-verb agreement with present simple verbs.