Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use correct tense consistency and precise vocabulary; correct factual errors (e.g., 'plane' -> 'pond' or 'plane' likely 'plane tree' unclear). Keep within 3–4 sentences and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details (what you did, with whom, and one vivid memory).

예시: Yes. I loved going to the park as a child because there was a large pond with ducks where I could play for hours. I often went with my parents and friends, and we had picnics and played football on the grass, which I remember as very exciting.

제안: Fix grammar (articles, plural nouns) and verb forms, reduce hesitations, and make the answer more concise. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one clear reason and one brief example of what you do instead. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' correctly.

예시: Not really. I don't go to parks much now because my work and other responsibilities keep me very busy, so I usually relax at home or meet friends at cafes when I have free time.

제안: Correct noun forms and remove repetition. Provide one clear benefit and one specific example of how more parks would help people. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would mean more trees and cleaner air, and they would give people places to exercise or relax. For example, a new park could include a jogging path and benches where families can spend time outdoors instead of staying on their phones.

제안: Clarify the answer: say whether you have a specific park or not, then explain your expectation and emotion with correct grammar. Avoid short vague replies; add one specific reason or example to support your feeling. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage.

예시: Not really. I don't have a particular park I plan to visit because I think new construction will reduce green spaces in my city. This makes me disappointed, since I enjoy spending time outdoors and worry about losing those places.

× I love going to the park when I was a child because there was a big plane around where I could climb and swim for hours.

✓ I loved going to the park when I was a child because there was a big plane around where I could climb and swing for hours.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I love' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'loved' to match the time frame. Also 'plane' is likely a typo for 'plane' vs 'playground equipment'; context suggests 'swing' rather than 'swim'. Replace with an appropriate past activity verb 'swing'. Improvement: keep verb tense consistent with time markers and check word choice for meaning.

× I often went there with my friends or my parents and we used to have picnics and play football on the grass.

✓ I often went there with my friends or my parents, and we used to have picnics and play football on the grass.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; only a comma is recommended before 'and' to separate clauses. No singular/plural mismatch. Suggestion: add a comma for clarity when joining two independent clauses.

× Umm, I don't really like going to park much anymore because I have much busier scheduled now with work and other responsibilities.

✓ Umm, I don't really like going to the park much anymore because I have a much busier schedule now with work and other responsibilities.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park' and missing article 'a' before 'much busier schedule'. Also 'scheduled' is incorrect form; use noun 'schedule'. Improvement: use 'the park' when referring to parks in general as a habit, and 'a much busier schedule' to modify the noun 'schedule'.

× When I was a child I had plenty of free time to play outside, but nowadays I prefer to relax at home or meet my friends when I have a time.

✓ When I was a child I had plenty of free time to play outside, but nowadays I prefer to relax at home or meet my friends when I have time.

The phrase 'a time' is incorrect; use the uncountable noun 'time' without an article. 'When I have time' is the correct fixed expression. Improvement: drop the unnecessary article.

× Yes, I would like to see more park in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

Countable noun 'park' needs plural 'parks' when referring to more than one. Alternatively 'more park' would require uncountable usage which is not correct here. Use plural to indicate multiple parks.

× More park would mean more trees and cleaner space which would which would make the air cleaner and they would provide place for people to exercise or relax instead of spending so much time on their smartphone.

✓ More parks would mean more trees and cleaner space, which would make the air cleaner, and they would provide places for people to exercise or relax instead of spending so much time on their smartphones.

Multiple issues: 'park' should be plural 'parks'; 'space' is okay but could be 'spaces'; 'which would which would' is duplicated; 'provide place' needs plural 'places'; 'smartphone' should be plural 'smartphones' to match 'people'. These are singular/plural agreement and repetition errors. Improvement: ensure noun number agrees with intended meaning and remove duplicate phrases.

× I don't think so. Nowadays many new buildings are being built, so I expect there will be fewer parks available in the future.

✓ I don't think so. Nowadays many new buildings are being built, so I expect there will be fewer parks available in the future.

This sentence is correct. Tenses are consistent: present continuous passive for buildings, and 'expect there will be' for future prediction. No correction needed.

× This make me a little disappointed because I enjoy spending time outdoor.

✓ This makes me a little disappointed because I enjoy spending time outdoors.

Subject-verb agreement: 'This' (singular) requires 'makes' (not listed as separate ID but fits subject-verb agreement—use present tense third-person). More specifically, 'outdoor' is an adjective; the adverbial phrase should be 'outdoors'. Correction addresses verb form and preposition/adverb use. Improvement: use 'makes' with singular subject and 'outdoors' for the activity location.