Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be natural and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid wrong words (e.g. 'pub' → 'park'), limit to 2–4 sentences, and add one specific detail with a linking word. Also correct grammar (past tense consistency, plural forms).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents took me almost every day, and I remember playing on the swings with other children and having picnics with my mother. Because of those happy memories, I hope to recreate similar outings with my family in the future.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, use correct grammar (articles, verb agreement), avoid repetition, and use a linking word to explain reasons. Keep it concise and include one specific example of when you go now.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I go less often now because of limited time and difficult transportation. For example, I usually visit a nearby park on Sunday mornings when my parents are free.

제안: Answer directly and avoid redundancy: state your opinion, give one clear reason with a linking phrase, and be specific about benefits (e.g. air quality, recreation). Correct plurality and use concise vocabulary.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks. More trees and green spaces would improve air quality and provide places for exercise and relaxation, which is important because the city currently has high pollution levels.

제안: Be concise and specific: state the park name clearly, avoid repetition, and add a precise reason or activity you want to do there. Use one linking phrase to expand (e.g. 'because', 'so that').

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York someday because it is one of the largest urban parks. I want to walk through its different areas, see the lakes and gardens, and experience the atmosphere in person.

× I love going to pub, when I was a child my parents used to take me there every day and I love and I have a lot of memorable experiences such as meeting other children at the playground and having picnic with my mom.

✓ I loved going to the park; when I was a child my parents used to take me there every day and I had a lot of memorable experiences such as meeting other children at the playground and having picnics with my mom.

Errors: missing articles 'the' before 'pub' (should likely be 'the park' or 'a pub' depending on meaning) and before 'playground'; 'having picnic' needs plural 'picnics'; tense consistency: speaker refers to childhood so past tense is appropriate. Suggestion: Use appropriate articles ('the' for a specific place), pluralize countable nouns when needed, and keep past tense consistent for childhood recollections.

× These two experience are very memorable for me and I want to recreate it in the future.

✓ These two experiences are very memorable for me and I want to recreate them in the future.

Errors: 'experience' is countable here and should be plural 'experiences'; verb agreement with plural subject must be 'are' (already present) and the pronoun must agree in number: 'it' should be 'them'. Suggestion: Match noun number and pronouns: plural subjects need plural pronouns.

× Yes, I still love going to park but due to difficulties in transportation and I don't really have much time.

✓ Yes, I still love going to the park, but due to difficulties with transportation I don't really have much time.

Errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'park'; awkward preposition 'in transportation' should be 'with transportation'. Suggestion: Use 'the park' for general places you habitually visit and use correct prepositions with nouns ('difficulties with transportation').

× The the amount of time I go to the park are not as much as when I was a kid.

✓ The amount of time I go to the park is not as much as when I was a kid.

Errors: duplicate word 'The the' and subject-verb agreement: 'amount' is singular so verb should be 'is' not 'are'; clarity: 'not as much as when I was a kid' is acceptable. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words and ensure verb agrees with singular nouns.

× But if I have a time I would prefer going to the park especially with my mum and dad.

✓ But if I have time I would prefer to go to the park, especially with my mum and dad.

Errors: article 'a' is unnecessary before 'time' when speaking generally; 'prefer going' is acceptable but 'prefer to go' is more natural here. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary articles in general expressions and choose preferred verb form: 'prefer to do' + infinitive.

× Yes, I would. I would love to, even though there's already a lots of green spaces in my cities, but I would still want to see more space, greens, green places because I feel like having lots of trees in the cities would enhance the air quality in these cities because there are lots of pollutions happening here.

✓ Yes, I would. I would love to, even though there are already a lot of green spaces in my city, I would still want to see more green areas because I feel that having lots of trees in the city would enhance air quality, as there is a lot of pollution here.

Errors: 'there's' should be 'there are' for plural 'green spaces'; 'a lots of' should be 'a lot of' or 'lots of'; 'in my cities' likely should be 'in my city' (singular) unless multiple cities intended; awkward repetition and pluralization: 'space, greens, green places' replaced by 'green areas'; 'pollutions' is uncountable so use 'pollution' and use 'is' with uncountable noun. Suggestion: Use correct plural agreement, correct quantifier 'a lot of', use uncountable nouns correctly, and avoid redundant phrasing.

× I would love to visit Central Park in New York some days.

✓ I would love to visit Central Park in New York someday.

Error: 'some days' suggests multiple days; 'someday' (one word) is the idiom meaning 'at some point in the future'. Suggestion: Use 'someday' for future unspecified time; use correct idiomatic expressions.

× I'm not sure of the exact names but it's the large the large park in the city centers.

✓ I'm not sure of the exact name, but it's the large park in the city center.

Errors: 'names' should be singular 'name' if referring to one park; duplicate 'the large the large' and unnecessary plural 'city centers' should be 'city center' for a single city; article use: keep 'the' before 'large park' once. Suggestion: Remove duplicates, match singular/plural, and use correct article placement.

× I want to see how big it is and walk through different areas so I can see I can experience the atmosphere for myself.

✓ I want to see how big it is and walk through different areas so I can experience the atmosphere for myself.

Error: Redundant phrase 'so I can see I can experience' repeats 'see' and disrupts sentence flow. Suggestion: Remove redundancy and keep a single verb phrase 'so I can experience'.