Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and incorrect verb forms (e.g., say “I liked” for past).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I usually went in the mornings to cycle and do simple exercises, which helped improve my health and energy levels.

제안: Use correct tense and word order, and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence about the present, then one or two specific activities and reasons, connected with linking words (for example, because, so).

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go most mornings to cycle and jog because it helps me stay fit and reduces stress.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Say whether you would like more parks and give specific reasons and examples. Reduce hesitations and avoid irrelevant comments. Use linking words (for example, such as, because) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, especially in busy neighborhoods. For instance, Parimal Garden and Prahladnagar Garden are popular, but more small green spaces would make the city healthier and more pleasant for families.

제안: State a clear plan for the future using correct tense (will or am going to). Give one specific reason and mention who you will go with. Keep it to 1–2 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I plan to visit Parimal Garden next month with my friends and family. We want to enjoy a picnic and spend time together outdoors.

× Yes, I like too much going to park because, uh, in the morning I go to park and uh, I doing exercises and more like cycling and all and uh, so these things too. So improve your health.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks very much because in the morning I would go to the park and do exercises such as cycling, which improved my health.

Problems: incorrect adverb placement and choice ('like too much' -> 'liked ... very much'), singular/plural and article errors ('going to park' -> 'going to parks' or 'the park'), verb form errors ('I doing exercises' -> 'I would/do exercises'), vague phrasing. Suggestion: use 'liked' for past habit, place 'very much' after verb, use 'the park' or plural 'parks', use base verb after auxiliary or simple past for past habits, and provide clear examples (cycling).

× Yes, I like to going. I like to going park a lot because in this years I woke up in the morning and I go to park for a cycling, jogging and more exercises to improve in my health and fitness.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park a lot because in recent years I wake up in the morning and go to the park for cycling, jogging and other exercises to improve my health and fitness.

Problems: incorrect verb form after 'like' ('like to going' -> 'like going'), article and preposition errors ('going park' -> 'going to the park'), tense inconsistency ('in this years' -> 'in recent years', 'woke up' vs present 'wake up'). Suggestion: use 'like + -ing' or 'like to + infinitive' not both, use 'go to the park', keep consistent present tense for habitual actions, and use 'other' instead of 'more' for exercises.

× Yes, I like, I still like to going in my city more parks like uh, low garden, Prahladnagar garden and Parimal garden.

✓ Yes, I still like going to more parks in my city, such as Law Garden, Prahladnagar Garden and Parimal Garden.

Problems: incorrect preposition ('going in my city' -> 'going to parks in my city'), verb form after 'like' again, word order. Suggestion: use 'going to parks in my city' and list examples with correct names and capitalization.

× And I personally, uh, uh, I personally say to you, OK, I'm going to the mostly Parimal garden and I'm doing umm, I'm doing a more, uh, funny thing.

✓ Personally, I usually go to Parimal Garden most of the time and I do fun activities there.

Problems: awkward phrasing and incorrect use of continuous tense ('I'm going to the mostly Parimal garden' -> 'I usually go to Parimal Garden'), redundant repetition ('I personally' twice), incorrect 'doing a more funny thing'. Suggestion: use 'usually' or 'most of the time' for habitual actions, use 'do fun activities' for clearer expression.

× Yes, I go to the park in the future Parimal Garden and I'm going, going with my friends for uh, uh, enjoying and spending time with my families members.

✓ In the future I will go to Parimal Garden with my friends to enjoy and spend time with my family members.

Problems: incorrect future tense formation ('I go to the park in the future' -> 'I will go' or 'I plan to go'), awkward repetition and gerund misuse ('I'm going, going' and 'for enjoying' -> 'to enjoy'), plural noun issue ('families members' -> 'family members'). Suggestion: use 'will' or 'plan to' for future intentions and use 'to + base verb' to express purpose; use 'family members' for relatives.