Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сформулируйте предложение чётко в прошедшем времени, используйте правильную структуру и больше деталей. Избегайте грамматических ошибок (например, 'I liked', 'when I was a child'), указывайте конкретные примеры (куда вы катались на велосипеде, с кем). Уменьшите количество повторов и соединяйте идеи связками (for example, with my friends, we would...).

예시: Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child. I used to ride my bike there with my friends to explore different paths, and we often played games near the pond. For example, we would race each other and have picnics on sunny afternoons.

제안: Говорите ясно о настоящем времени и причинах предпочтения парков. Упражняйтесь в упорядочивании мысли: тема → причина → пример. Исправьте фразы типа 'I can to' на 'I can' и используйте связки (because, so, for example) для логичности.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax when I am stressed. For example, I often have a picnic with a friend and we sit on the grass to talk, which helps me forget work for a while.

제안: Дайте развёрнутый, но краткий ответ: сначала утвердите, затем объясните почему и добавьте конкретное пожелание. Используйте связки ('because', 'so that') и конкретику ('more small parks', 'green spaces'). Не оставляйте ответ слишком коротким.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and improve air quality. For example, more small neighborhood parks would give families places to exercise and children somewhere safe to play.

제안: Чётко сформулируйте, какие парки вы хотели бы посетить, и почему. Избегайте бессвязных фраз и повторов. Используйте структуру: утверждение → конкретный пример парка → причина → краткое завершение. Это сделает ответ логичным и содержательным.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit more parks in the future, especially botanical gardens and waterfront parks. For instance, I want to go to the city botanical garden to see the flower collections and relax by the lake because it seems peaceful and different from my usual local park.

× Yes, I like to go to park when I was child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. Use past tense 'liked' because the time reference is 'when I was a child'. Use the gerund 'going' after 'liked'. Include the definite article 'the' with 'park' and the indefinite article 'a' before 'child'. Suggested improvement: keep tense consistent, use articles, and use gerund after 'like/liked'.

× I have a bike which I can to.

✓ I had a bike that I could ride.

The student uses present tense 'have' and incorrect structure 'which I can to'. The context is past, so use 'had'. 'Which' can be replaced by 'that' and 'can to' is wrong; the correct verb is 'could ride'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'ride' and correct modal past 'could'.

× You go to anywhere and go to with my friend.

✓ I could go anywhere and go with my friends.

The original mixes 'you' and 'my friend' and has incorrect word order. Context requires first person past ability: 'I could go anywhere' and 'go with my friends' (plural). Suggestion: maintain consistent subject and correct preposition 'with' placed before the companion.

× It was seven years ago.

✓ That was many years ago.

While 'It was seven years ago' is grammatically possible, it conflicts with earlier 'when I was a child' depending on age; a more natural phrasing is 'That was many years ago' or specify exact time. Keep past tense. Suggestion: choose a phrasing consistent with previous sentences.

× Now I'm, I'm very stressed because I'm too ready to get the aisles.

✓ Now I'm very stressed because I'm too busy and ready to get away.

The phrase 'too ready to get the aisles' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Too busy' fits 'stressed' context. 'Get away' means to escape stress. Keep present tense 'I'm'. Suggestion: use clear collocations: 'too busy', 'need to get away'.

× I prefer to go to park because there are so many green place which I can to relax on a picnic with my friend and I talk about with about thing, uh.

✓ I prefer to go to the park because there are so many green places where I can relax and have a picnic with my friends and talk about things.

Problems: missing article 'the park'; 'green place' should be plural 'green places'; use 'where' rather than 'which' for locations; 'can to relax' incorrect — use 'can relax'; 'on a picnic' → 'have a picnic'; 'my friend' → 'my friends' for generality; 'I talk about with about thing' is ungrammatical — use 'talk about things'. Suggestion: use correct articles, plural forms, 'where' for locations, and standard collocations 'have a picnic'.

× Yes, I would like to see more.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks.

The answer is incomplete; 'more' needs a noun. Add 'parks' to clarify what is desired. Suggestion: always include the object after 'more' when necessary.

× Yes, I prefer to go to in the future in some more parks because there are so many, there are so many.

✓ Yes, I would prefer to visit more parks in the future because there are so many to see.

Mixes tenses and has awkward repetition. Use 'would prefer' for future preference and 'visit' for parks. Remove repetition and finish the thought with 'to see'. Suggestion: use conditional/modal 'would' for polite preference and concise phrasing.

× The classical music I don't see, I don't think I don't listen.

✓ I don't really listen to classical music.

The original is ungrammatical and confused. Use correct verb 'listen to' and place adverb 'really' appropriately. Simplify to a clear negative statement. Suggestion: learn verb-preposition collocation 'listen to' and avoid double negatives.

× Then yes, I prefer to go to the.

✓ So yes, I would prefer to go to more parks.

Incomplete sentence ending with 'the'. Replace with a complete clause stating preference and include the noun 'parks'. Use 'would prefer' for future/conditional preference. Suggestion: ensure sentences are complete and include necessary nouns.