Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on correct grammar (verb tenses, articles, plurals) and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often spent afternoons there with my friends, playing on the swings and slides. Also, my parents used to take us for picnics at the weekends, which made it a special family time.

제안: Correct sentence structure and word forms (feel → feel, unwind me → unwind, try jogging). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler sounds. Mention frequency and purpose briefly.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I feel tired, I prefer to go there to unwind and relax, and I often go jogging or cycling to stay active.

제안: Improve accuracy with articles and plural forms, and organize ideas: state preference, give reason with specific details. Use linking words like 'because' or 'since'. Avoid vague phrases like 'I hear' without context.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. I recently heard about new parks with large lakes and well-kept gardens, and I think they would provide cleaner air and pleasant places for families to relax.

제안: Use correct tense and articles, and combine sentences to be concise. Specify which park or what attracts you and mention when you plan to go. Use linking words like 'when' or 'because'.

예시: Absolutely. There is a new park that recently opened in my city, and I want to visit it when I have free time. I've heard it has interesting features, so I plan to go on a weekend to explore it and relax.

× Absolutely, I like I like to go park when I am child.

✓ Absolutely, I liked going to the park when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present and past. Talking about childhood requires past tense ('liked', 'was a child'). Also 'go park' needs 'go to the park' and article 'the' is required before 'park' when speaking about a specific place type. Suggestion: use past tense consistently and include 'to' and 'the'.

× I'm spend a time with my friends on swings and swings and slides and my parents took me a picnic on a weekends.

✓ I spent time with my friends on the swings and slides, and my parents took me on picnics on weekends.

Multiple issues: 'I'm spend' is incorrect verb form; past tense 'spent' needed. 'a time' is unnatural; use 'time'. 'on swings and swings and slides' repeats and needs 'the' before plural nouns. 'took me a picnic' should be 'took me on picnics'. 'on a weekends' should be 'on weekends'. Use past tense consistently and correct prepositions and articles.

× I think park is a great place to burn your energy.

✓ I think the park is a great place to burn off your energy.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park'. Also common collocation is 'burn off energy'. Use 'your' is acceptable if speaking generally. Suggest adding 'the' and 'off' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I like to go park nowadays when I'm feel tired I will I I prefer to go park and unwind me and also try to jogging and cycling often.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the park nowadays. When I feel tired, I prefer to go to the park and unwind, and I also try jogging and cycling often.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'go park' needs 'go to the park'. 'I'm feel tired' should be 'I feel tired' (simple present). 'I will I I prefer' is redundant; use 'I prefer'. 'unwind me' is incorrect reflexive usage; say 'unwind' or 'relax'. 'try to jogging' should be 'try jogging' or 'try to jog'. Ensure present tense for current habits and correct verb forms and prepositions.

× Yes I'd like to go park in my city which are newly opened I hear.

✓ Yes, I'd like to go to parks in my city that have recently opened, I hear.

'go park' needs 'go to parks'. 'which are newly opened' should be 'that have recently opened' to use present perfect passive describing a recent change. 'are newly opened' is less natural. Use plural 'parks' if speaking generally and correct relative clause and verb form.

× I have heard about they have a big lakes and gardens so I want to go there to get a clean airs.

✓ I have heard that they have big lakes and gardens, so I want to go there to get some fresh air.

'heard about they have' is incorrect; use 'heard that' or 'heard they have'. 'a big lakes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'big lakes'. 'a clean airs' incorrect countable form; use 'some fresh air'. Suggest using 'that' for reported information and correct noun number and collocations.

× Absolutely. I like to go new park, which is recently opened in my city.

✓ Absolutely. I would like to go to the new park which recently opened in my city.

For future intention/polite preference 'would like' fits better. 'go new park' needs 'go to the new park'. 'which is recently opened' should be 'which recently opened' or 'which was recently opened' — present perfect or simple past depending on context. Use correct article and verb form.

× When I got a time from my busy schedule, I like to visit there.

✓ When I get some time from my busy schedule, I would like to visit it.

'got a time' mixes past with intended future; use present/future 'get some time'. 'I like to visit there' should be 'I would like to visit it' for a future intention and use correct pronoun/object. Also 'some time' is more natural than 'a time'.