Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cümlelerinizde dilbilgisi ve kelime seçiminde hatalar var; ifadelerinizi daha doğal ve akıcı hâle getirmek için basit ama doğru yapılar kullanın. Konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından 1–2 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Ayrıca tekrarları ve anlamsız kelimeleri (ör. "hit", "allow", "late moment") düzeltin. Öneri: geçmiş alışkanlıklardan bahsederken 'used to' kullanımını doğru kurun, oyun isimlerini doğru söyleyin ve bir neden veya kısa ayrıntı ekleyin.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to play hide-and-seek and draw pictures there with friends, and we often spent entire afternoons playing. Those visits were special because they gave me freedom to run around and be creative.

제안: Cümleleriniz belirgin fikirler içeriyor ama kelime seçimi ve tekrarlar akışı bozuyor. 'Go to parks' yerine 'go to the park' veya 'go for a walk in parks' gibi ifadeler kullanın. Destekleyici cümlede gözlem ve neden verin; bağlaçlarla cümleleri birleştirin ve tekrarı azaltın.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park. I often go for walks there because I like watching the trees and birds, and being surrounded by greenery makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

제안: Fikrinizi doğrudan ifade etmişsiniz ama dilbilgisi, tekrarlar ve kelime düzenlemesi gerekiyor. "Because" ile sebep verin ve nedeni açıkça söyleyin; örneğin yüksek yapı yoğunluğunu belirtip yeşil alanların faydasını belirtin. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve doğal ifadeler kullanın.

예시: Yes, I would. My city has many tall buildings, so I would welcome more parks. More green spaces would improve air quality and give residents places to relax and exercise.

제안: Cevabınız amaçlı ve kişisel, ancak dil bilgisi ve kelime seçimi hataları var. Düşüncenizi kısa bir konu cümlesiyle ifade edin ve nedenini somut örneklerle destekleyin. 'Wanna' yerine 'want to' veya 'would like to' kullanın; TV dizisinden bahsederken daha net bağlam verin.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in the future. I'm a fan of the TV show Friends, and seeing the park from the series would be exciting; I would like to walk around, enjoy the scenery and sit at a café there.

× I used to allow park because I spent with my with my same age.

✓ I used to go to the park because I spent time with children my age.

The student used the wrong verb 'allow' instead of 'go' and omitted necessary prepositions and objects. Also subject-verb agreement and sentence structure are incorrect. Use 'used to' with the base verb 'go', include 'to the park', and express 'children my age' or 'people my age'. Improve by learning common collocations (go to the park, spend time with) and placing modifiers after the noun. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× So I I like to hit.

✓ So I liked to play tag.

'Hit' is incorrect for the intended game and 'I I' is a repetition. The past preference should match 'used to' so use 'liked'. Use the correct verb for the activity: 'play tag' or 'play hide-and-seek'. Avoid duplicate words by careful proofreading. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I love to play hit and and seek and I love to draw on the picture.

✓ I loved to play hide-and-seek and I loved to draw pictures.

Use the correct game name 'hide-and-seek', avoid duplicated 'and', and use 'draw pictures' (no 'on the'). Tense should match past habit ('loved') with 'used to'. Improve by learning fixed expressions and removing unnecessary prepositions. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× On the whole, it was very good late moment for me.

✓ On the whole, those were very good moments for me.

'Late moment' is incorrect collocation. Use plural 'moments' and 'those' or 'that was a great time' depending on meaning. 'Very good' can be replaced by 'great' or 'pleasant'. Improve by choosing natural collocations and matching singular/plural. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× As for me, uh, I love to go parks.

✓ As for me, I love to go to parks.

'Go' needs the preposition 'to' when followed by a place; also 'parks' needs 'to' before it. Preserve present tense 'love to go to parks' for habit. Practice verb-preposition pairs (go to, arrive at). Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Actually I don't play any tools to park, but I love to go for a walk for park because you can see very different environment, treats, birds and very green areas and it helps.

✓ Actually I don't play any games or use any equipment in the park, but I love to go for a walk in the park because you can see different environments, trees, birds and very green areas and it helps.

'Tools to park' is incorrect; use 'games or equipment in the park'. Use 'walk in the park' not 'for park'. 'Environment' should be plural 'environments' or better 'scenery', and 'treats' is wrong for 'trees'. Improve vocabulary for park activities and singular/plural consistency. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× It helps. It helps.

✓ It really helps.

Repetition 'It helps. It helps.' is redundant. Combine into one emphatic phrase 'It really helps.' Avoid unnecessary repetition. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I'd like to see more parks in my city because, uh, I, I have very, very, a lot of buildings.

✓ I'd like to see more parks in my city because I have a lot of buildings.

Remove duplicated 'I' and extra commas. Use 'a lot of buildings' without 'very, very'. If meaning many buildings, say 'there are a lot of buildings'. Improve by simplifying sentences and using correct quantifiers. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× So, uh, I love to see green areas and I love to, uh, breathe in my, this green and Green Zone.

✓ So I love to see green areas and I love to breathe in this green zone.

Remove extra pronoun 'my' before 'this', use consistent capitalization 'green zone' lowercase, and use 'breathe in' with the noun phrase directly. Practice article and demonstrative usage. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× So I love them see.

✓ So I love to see them.

Incorrect word order 'love them see' should be 'love to see them' using the infinitive 'to see'. Ensure correct verb patterns after verbs of liking. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Actually, I'm fan of friends come TV series.

✓ Actually, I'm a fan of the TV series Friends.

Include article 'a' before 'fan', use the definite article 'the' before 'TV series' and place the series title 'Friends' correctly. 'Come' is incorrect. Learn noun phrase structure. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Uh, I love, I wanna go to the, uh, Central Park Park because Central Park is very famous in the this TV series.

✓ I want to go to Central Park because it is very famous in that TV series.

Avoid double 'Park Park', use 'want to' instead of 'wanna' in careful speech, and remove 'the' before 'this TV series'—use 'that TV series'. Also avoid repeating 'Central Park' unnecessarily. Improve register and article use. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× So I wanna spend time and I wanna grab a coffee and I want to go to different Green Zone area.

✓ So I want to spend time there, grab a coffee, and go to different green areas.

Use consistent formal 'want to', avoid repeating 'I want to' by using parallel verbs, and use plural 'areas' with correct capitalization. Maintain present/future intention with 'want to'. Improve by combining similar verbs and keeping consistent tense. Grammar problem type ID: 6