Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 문법을 명확히 하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 주제문으로 직접 답한 뒤, 연결어(to, because, so 등)를 사용해 구체적인 이유와 예시를 하나로 묶어 자연스럽게 말하세요. 예: 시제 일관성(과거형 사용), 관사와 복수형 사용(‘a park’, ‘the sound of birds’)을 고치고, 불필요한 단어(예: 'I liked. I liked.')를 제거하세요.

예시: Yes, I did. I loved being outdoors as a child because I enjoyed listening to the sound of birds and the wind. For example, I often visited a local park with my family where I could relax and watch the trees.

제안: 답변을 간결하고 논리적으로 재구성하세요. 불완전한 문장과 어순 오류('the. Parking')를 고치고, 연결어를 사용해 이유와 빈도를 함께 표현하세요. 장소나 느낌을 구체적으로 설명하고, 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. There is a park very close to my house, so I often visit it to enjoy the fresh air and the gentle breeze, which helps me relax.

제안: 의미 전달이 되는 단어 선택과 발음을 분명히 하세요('Kathy's'와 'light'은 문맥상 부적절). 질문에 바로 답하고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 예: 공원은 스트레스 해소, 여가 공간 제공 등 구체적 이득을 말하고 linking word(Therefore, Because)를 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I would. Parks are important for city life because they provide places to relax and clear your mind. For example, many people use parks to exercise or spend time with family, which improves well-being.

제안: 구체적인 공원 이름이나 장소 설명을 명확하게 말하세요('centre back'은 부정확). 조건문과 시제 사용을 간단히 하고 중복 표현('if I would if I go to there')을 제거하세요. 이유(예: 넓은 잔디밭, 자연 풍경)를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요.

예시: I would like to visit Central Park in the future because I’ve heard it is very large and has plenty of green space. I think spending time there would help me relax and refresh my mind.

× Yes, because like when I was a child, I liked nature very much.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I liked nature very much.

The filler 'because like' is unnecessary and interrupts the sentence flow; remove them to form a clear past-tense statement about childhood.

× I prefer to hearing some sound of birds and waves, birds and winds, so I usually go to park.

✓ I prefer hearing the sounds of birds, waves, and wind, so I usually go to the park.

After 'prefer' use the gerund 'hearing' without 'to' when expressing a general preference. Use plural 'sounds' and definite article 'the' with 'park' when referring to a specific place; 'wind' is uncountable.

× Yeah, definitely, because the. Parking near my house so I usually I often go to the park and I feel some nature and.

✓ Yeah, definitely, because there is a park near my house, so I often go to the park and enjoy nature.

Replace fragment 'the. Parking' with 'there is a park' to create a proper 'there be' construction. Remove redundant 'I' and change 'feel some nature' to 'enjoy nature' to make the meaning natural.

× From the border winds like that, I like it.

✓ I like the breeze coming from the surrounding areas.

The phrase 'from the border winds' is unclear and uses incorrect preposition and noun choice. 'Breeze coming from the surrounding areas' is a clearer, natural expression.

× Yes, for Kathy's very important to our light.

✓ Yes, parks are very important to our lives.

'Kathy's' appears to be a misheard or incorrect pronoun; replace with 'parks' (plural) and correct 'our light' to 'our lives' which makes semantic sense.

× We can relax in the park or clear our heads.

✓ We can relax in the park or clear our heads.

Sentence is acceptable; minor stylistic choice preserved. No grammatical change needed.

× So perky is very good.

✓ So parks are very good.

'Perky' is incorrect here; likely intended 'parks'. Use plural 'parks' to match general statement.

× I want to go centre back in the future.

✓ I want to go back to the city centre in the future.

Phrase 'centre back' is incorrect word order; correct is 'go back to the city centre'. Use 'city centre' for natural English.

× I heard that the centre park is very big and good for field nature, so if I would if I go to there I can relax or refresh my mind so I want to go there.

✓ I heard that the central park is very big and good for experiencing nature, so if I go there I can relax and refresh my mind; I want to visit it.

'Centre park' should be 'central park' or 'the city centre park'. 'Good for field nature' is unidiomatic; use 'good for experiencing nature'. Remove conditional 'if I would if' and correct 'go to there' to 'go there'. Use 'visit it' for clarity.