Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammar (past tense), reduce fillers, and make the answer more coherent: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Use correct verb forms (went, spent, swam) and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends and we spent hours sliding and swimming, which helped me make close friends. Because the park was safe and lively, those visits remain some of my happiest childhood memories.

제안: Start with a direct, concise topic sentence answering the question, then give clear reasons with linking words (because, so). Correct awkward phrases (I go study → I study at university) and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Not as much as before, because I now study at university and have less free time. For example, I usually stay in my dorm with roommates to play games or exercise, so I rarely visit parks these days.

제안: Give a clearer opinion and support it with specific reasons. Use correct singular/plural forms and clearer linking words (because, for example). Avoid vague phrases like “see more many park.”

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space and help improve residents' health. For example, recent government projects have created small city parks, and I think continuing this will make the city more pleasant and cooler in summer.

제안: Answer directly and give a specific plan or example. Use natural phrasing (if I need to relax, I'll go to the park) and limit to two supporting sentences. Remove fillers and improve coherence with linking words (however, when).

예시: Yes, if I need to relax, I'll go to a nearby park to read or take a walk. However, when I'm busy studying or playing games with friends, I usually stay in the dorm and don't visit parks.

× When I was a child, I go to the park with my friends and spending the time to slide and swims, umm, I think it's a good memory for me and I can make friends in the park, yeah.

✓ When I was a child, I went to the park with my friends and spent time going on slides and swimming. I think those are good memories for me, and I made friends in the park.

The sentence refers to past habits and events, so past tense verbs are required. 'go' should be 'went' (simple past), 'spending' should be 'spent' (past simple), and 'swims' should be 'swimming' or 'swam'; here 'swimming' fits with 'going on slides and swimming' as parallel activities. Also 'I can make friends' should be 'I made friends' to match past time. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events that happened in childhood and keep parallel structure for activities. Grammar problem type ID:5

× No, really, I don't always go to the park since I go study in the university.

✓ Not really. I don't often go to the park since I study at university.

The sentence describes a current habitual situation, so present simple is appropriate. 'don't always go' is acceptable but 'don't often go' is more natural; 'I go study in the university' is ungrammatical—use 'I study at university' or 'I go to university'. Also use 'Not really.' as a short reply. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct verb + preposition patterns ('study at university'). Grammar problem type ID:6

× I sometimes stay in my dorms with my roommates and play games or do some sports.

✓ I sometimes stay in my dorm with my roommates and play games or do some sports.

'Dorms' is plural but context suggests one dorm room; either 'my dorm' or 'my dormitory' is more natural. This is a preposition/word choice issue; using 'in my dorm' is correct. Suggestion: choose singular 'dorm' if referring to your living place and keep consistent number with 'my'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I don't have time to the park to go to the park.

✓ I don't have time to go to the park.

The original repeats phrases and uses incorrect word order ('time to the park to go to the park'). The correct structure is 'have time to do something' so use 'to go to the park'. Suggestion: keep the infinitive 'to go' after 'have time' and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I usually see more many park in my city.

✓ I usually see many more parks in my city.

'more many park' is ungrammatical. Use 'many' for countable plural nouns and 'more' to indicate increase; correct order is 'many more parks'. Also pluralize 'park' to 'parks'. Suggestion: use 'many more parks' to express an increased number of parks. Grammar problem type ID:14

× With the development of the city and government policy, they build small City Park in my city, Yeah.

✓ With the city's development and government policies, they have built small city parks in my city.

Article and noun form issues: 'City Park' should be lowercase unless a proper name; 'small city parks' (plural) matches 'they'. Also tense 'build' should be present perfect 'have built' if referring to a recent change. 'government policy' should be plural or 'the government's policy'. Suggestion: use correct articles/capitalization and match number and tense to context. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Given the chance, if I need some relax to myself, I will go to the park in the future.

✓ Given the chance, if I need some time to relax by myself, I will go to the park in the future.

The phrase 'need some relax to myself' is ungrammatical. Use noun phrase 'some time to relax' or the gerund 'to relax', and 'by myself' is the correct prepositional phrase meaning alone. Suggestion: use 'time to relax by myself' for clarity and correct collocations. Grammar problem type ID:8

× But when I play games or do some works, umm and busy, I cannot go to the park, Yeah.

✓ But when I play games or do some work and am busy, I cannot go to the park.

The sentence mixes forms and uses 'works' incorrectly; 'work' as an uncountable noun is appropriate here. Also the clause needs a correct verb 'am busy' to describe the subject. Suggestion: use 'do some work' and include the verb 'am' for the adjective 'busy' to make a complete clause. Grammar problem type ID:6