Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small errors (e.g., repeat of 'boat'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid hesitations like 'Hmm'.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my family often visited Burnham Park where we rode bikes and took boat rides on the lake. There was also a small playground with a slide where I played with my friends.

제안: Good clear topic sentence and reasons. Improve grammar (use 'prefer to spend') and add one brief linking phrase to connect reasons. You could also soften general statements with an example.

예시: Not really — I don't usually go to parks now because many local parks look neglected and are often full of litter. For instance, the benches are broken and the atmosphere feels unpleasant, so I prefer to spend my free time at clean cafés or hiking trails.

제안: Avoid unrelated words ('Bye') and sentence fragments. Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a complete concluding sentence. Use linking words like 'however' correctly and avoid repetition ('many many').

예시: I wouldn't necessarily want more parks. There are already several parks in Baguio City, such as Burnham Park, the Botanical Garden and Wright Park; however, many of them are poorly maintained. Therefore, I would prefer resources to be used for improving existing parks rather than creating new ones.

제안: Correct subject-verb agreement ('look' not 'looks') and expand slightly with one concrete example or a contrasting possibility. Use a linking word to show reason and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I don't think so — most parks around here look very similar and there isn't much variety or anything new to see. Unless a park added new attractions or special events, I don't plan to visit any in the near future.

× Hmm yes I like going to the park.

✓ Hmm yes, I liked going to the park.

The question asked about childhood (past). The verb 'like' should be in past tense to match the time frame. Use 'liked' when referring to a past habit or preference. Suggestion: match the verb tense to the time expression (when I was a child).

× When I was a child my family often went to Burnham Park where we rode bikes and took boat boat rides on the lake.

✓ When I was a child, my family often went to Burnham Park where we rode bikes and took boat rides on the lake.

There is a repeated word 'boat boat' which is a typo. Also add a comma after the introductory time clause. Remove the duplicate word and punctuate correctly. Suggestion: proofread for accidental repetition and use commas after introductory phrases.

× There was also a small playground with a slide where I used to play with friends.

✓ There was also a small playground with a slide where I used to play with my friends.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but sounds more natural with the possessive 'my friends' to clarify whose friends. Use 'my friends' when referring to friends from the speaker's past. Suggestion: include appropriate possessive pronouns for clarity.

× I don't usually go to the park now because it looks neglected and is often full of litter.

✓ I don't usually go to the park now because it looks neglected and is often full of litter.

This sentence is correct in present tense and matches the current situation; no change needed. Explanation: 'don't usually go' and 'looks' correctly describe habitual present condition.

× The benches are broken and the atmosphere feels unpleasant, so I prefer spend my free time elsewhere.

✓ The benches are broken and the atmosphere feels unpleasant, so I prefer to spend my free time elsewhere.

After 'prefer' when followed by a verb, the infinitive form 'to spend' is required. Missing 'to' makes the verb phrase incorrect. Suggestion: use 'prefer to' + base verb or 'prefer' + -ing form consistently (e.g., 'prefer spending').

× Bye, There's already a There are already several parks in Baguio City, such as Burnham Park, the Botanical Garden and Wright Park.

✓ There are already several parks in Baguio City, such as Burnham Park, the Botanical Garden, and Wright Park.

The original contains 'Bye,' which is irrelevant and 'There's already a There are already' duplicated phrase. Remove the extraneous words and use correct plural 'There are' for 'several parks.' Also add a comma before 'and' in a list for clarity. Suggestion: remove filler words and ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there are' for plural nouns.

× However, many many of them are poorly maintained and neglected.

✓ However, many of them are poorly maintained and neglected.

The phrase 'many many' is a repetitive error. Use a single 'many' to indicate a large number. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition; use emphasis words like 'very many' only when appropriate.

× Instead of more parks, I would prefer to.

✓ Instead of more parks, I would prefer not to.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'to.' It needs an object or an infinitive complement. Adding 'not to' clarifies the speaker's preference to avoid more parks. Suggestion: complete sentences by providing the required verb or complement after 'prefer'.

× I don't think so.

✓ I don't think so.

This sentence correctly uses the present tense to state the speaker's current opinion; no change needed. Suggestion: none.

× Most parks around here looks very similar and there isn't much variety or anything new to see so I don't plan to visit any in the near future.

✓ Most parks around here look very similar and there isn't much variety or anything new to see, so I don't plan to visit any in the near future.

'Parks' is plural and requires the plural verb 'look' not 'looks.' Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement by matching plural subjects with plural verb forms and punctuate compound sentences properly.